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From SParker on March 30, 2008
about #11...

I'm going to start calling you Superwoman the way you and another authoress crank
out these stories, I can't remember what I've said in each review...I need a break.

Anyway, as they say, ''the plot thickens...'' and Harry is slowly stumbling into a
HUGE mess I see, he just doesn't realize it. I'm not EVEN going to second guess you
on what it is you'll do next, 'cause all you'll do is throw a wrench in our thinking
and then bring it back on track. :-/

Now, the way I see it, if Draco wasn't such a Malfoy, he would explode with justifiable anger on the deception, but since he is, he will just simmer with it.

BUT, exploding IS good. :-)

Isn't it AMAZING how folks LOVE to guess what's going to happen next in this story?
I don't think I've ever done this before, but then again this story IS more
involving than most I've..and other people..have read, because of the simple fact
of the deception that WILL end up hurting people.

Well, enough rambling thoughts, I'm tired..and will chill out for a couple of days.

PS: I loved your depiction [is that right?] of Narcissa, though Harry's reaction to
her discovery had me...cringing in a way. I just didn't like him appearing so 'weak'
before her. No, Harry is the type who faces problems with eyes forward and
'guns a-blazing'! But of course he had his reasons. Blah!
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From Lunatichero on March 30, 2008
Draco Malfoy is on the warpath. Not exactly full blown yet, and not with all of the anger and violence he has at his disposal, but preparing to do a mental battle nonetheless. I believe that Harry may have put entirely too much focus on keeping Narcissa placated, and may find Draco is sliding in through the back clasp of his mask. I don't think it will be that easy for Draco to find out the truth about Harry and all of his many different brother, and sister, personalities, but I do think that if Harry isn't more careful, it will be easier than it should be. I can't wait for the update,
Thank you,
Lunatic with a Hero Complex
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From ANON - qwerty on March 30, 2008
Interesting chapter. I'm surprised that Narcissa bought Harry's lie. I supposed I'm just used to the real Harry but still... Harry seemed a little too pathetic, no?
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From SoftObsidian74 on March 30, 2008
This story is SO AWESOME. I'm spell bound with every word and every chapter. This chapter was no exception. This is gonna get really really messy. Harry is deluding himself if he thinks this will be over in the 2 week deadline Narcissa gave. I think Narcissa will have to eat her strict order a bit once she sees how things are developing between these two. I hope she doesn't just go in and break Harry's face in front of Draco, then again, I can see Harry ditching Draco at the end of two weeks out of fear of losing everything but I HOPE hope hope that Draco starts to replace Metamorphasis as the center of Harry's world. I know I"m being foolish in thinking all of that can occur in two weeks. But, at least, perhaps, Draco can become more meaningful to Harry to the point where he has to seriously figure out a way to keep his business and Draco. I don't see how you're gonna pull Harry out of this without him getting hurt either way and at least he's aware that he'll be hurt but I don't think he's ready at all. I'm so rambling because you've got me thinking a thousand different thoughts. I LOVE how Draco knows he can win Harry over, and in the end that may be what finally pushes Harry out of the closet either on his own or by way of Narcissa trying to intervene. I wonder how Lucius would react if he knew? OK, and I have to just comment on his performance for Narcissa, hilarious! I wonder if Harry even knows how much truth was in that story. Sometimes I think he buries himself so deep in the lies he creates that he's out of touch with his own truth. I can't wait to see how Draco plans to seduce him and how Harry can resist. GREAT UPDATE : )
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From ANON - SP777 on March 29, 2008
I just had a thought, when you started to write this, did you at
one point think about doing this...Brian/Harry or Brian (Harry)
when he had to go into his 'role' & then do just 'Harry' when
his personality started to slip through?

That way we would know when the fine line between playing
a role & being himself got crossed..or have you done that already
and I forgot?
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about #10....

you know in the back of my mind, I had a feeling that Harry displaying his power would trigger something in someone, I kind of leaned towards Draco than Narcissa,
but it makes sense it would be her first.

*says very haughtily* After ALL, she is a woman and women
sense these things.

:-)

Oh, by the way, I liked the 'game' that Draco & 'Brian' played back
and forth [..and it IS a game..], kind of makes you wonder...well
it makes me think once Draco gets over 'the betrayal' he will be
feeling soon, will he accept how right he & Harry are for each other?

After all, these are no longer boys, but men...and I have this HUGE feeling that something long-term could come from this. Since they are adults now and have an
idea [somewhat] of what it is they want.

okay, enough rambling thoughts...
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From ANON - Faery on March 28, 2008
I LOVE the end of this chapter! I cannot wait te read the confrontation^^
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From Christabell on March 28, 2008
What a cruel way to leave us, haha. This was a great chapter, and I'm very curious as to how Narcissa will react when they meet and Harry explains *something.* Can't wait for the next chapter!
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From ANON - Moyima on March 28, 2008
Wow. This is my new favorite fic. This is fantastic. Harry's character is fascinating-- and it's interesting how you develop it and then crack it. I expected Draco to be faster-- but, alas! His mother bet him to the punch. I'm really looking forward to seeing more of this fic!
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From LiveLaughLoveMe on March 28, 2008
Ohh I just knew Narcissa would the first to figure it out. I love her as a character ever since I read the last book and I love how you protray her. I look forward to the meeting.
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From ANON - angelmuziq on March 28, 2008
Oh goodness. What is Harry going to do now that Narcissa knows that its him? And will Draco ever run into Harry on the street when he (Harry) isnt hiding his features? I think it would be interesting to see how they interact. Man I love this story and I cant wait for an update to see how in the world Harry and Draco will get together after this because Draco is definately going to be mad that he was lied to and bt the Great Harry Potter at that! Great work!
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From ANON - qwerty on March 28, 2008
Damn. That was a twist that I didn't expect. Christ, how is Harry going to get out of this one?
Great chapter
update!
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From gorgeousbowneyes on March 28, 2008
Narcissa??? I thought Lucius immediately as I was reading the letter, but of course that would make sense. Narcissa's had more conversations with Brian, has more suspicions of where he's been because she hasn't seen him in her social circles. Any man with that kind of power and those kinds of pure blood mannerisms would have made himself known in society whether he wanted to or not, so the doubt over whether he was who he said he was is already in her mind.

And yeah, I didn't really think Harry would live as Brian, that would be too deceitful, also hard to maintain as Harry himself 'surfaces' quite often in the Brian persona. Although I'm thinking that there's a good possibility Draco will find that something is up with Brian sometime soon, after his mother finding out, and with him sending off inquiries to the Ministry, doubt over who Brian really is presiding in his mind. But I'm not sure if he's thinking along the right lines yet to figure Harry out.

The other thing that hit me as I was reading through this ... Brian in this story, although extremely different, takes on the look and feel of what I know as "Brian" from Queer As Folk. That's who I imagine when I think of Harry as Brian. I have no idea why, I think the name is what made the unintentional link.

Good chapter, I can't wait to read more!

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From gentlenightrain on March 28, 2008
Uh-oh... spaghetti o's
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From Lunatichero on March 28, 2008
Narcissa has always been one of those characters that only has a very limited set space of characterization in the books, but that nonetheless fascinates me. I think I was definitely waiting, maybe subconciously, for her to realize who was necking with her son, and I mean who was 'really' necking with her son. Now that someone else knows that Brian is Harry, it feels as if some thick cable that has been held taut through all of these chapters, just snapped one of its wires. Its not broken yet, but I think we just saw the beginning of some fray-like action. I can't wait until we're hanging on by a thread.
Thank you,
Lunatic with a Hero Complex
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From dracoharry4life on March 27, 2008
Personally, I hope Narcissa works to get Harry and Draco together. Screw what Lucius wants or thinks.
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