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Reviews for Intensity

By : Bastian
  • From Demonicone on April 05, 2008
    I LOVE this story, its getting so good. The dream was kind of confusing though but I think I got it. I can not wait to read the next chapter. Seriously, I will most likely end up checking every day... a few times...

    Anyway, will the next chapter have more skirts?
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  • From dino1 on April 04, 2008
    Poor Harry he is having nightmares about Tom. So Fenrir is a rival pack. I wonder if all packs follow the same rules of are different. Can't wait till next chapter.
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  • From darkpyroangel06 on April 04, 2008
    If you'd like, I can keep my reviews short. I tend to give longer reviews because I kinda sum up the story with my comments on it as well. I really liked this chapter though because it was SO LONG! LOLz! Anywho... I liked that it was Remus comforting Harry and not Sirius. Mainly because I see Remus as softer and more caring than Sirius, although I can see Sirius as being there for Harry all the time. Don't get me wrong. But Remus is a submissive and can kinda understand where Harry is. Sirius is a Dominant and can speak to Severus, to a point, as another Dominant. Then Severus will get snippy and tell him to eff off because he's the Alpha and Sirius isn't. *sigh* Poor Harry. That dream scared the hell out of me though. And then Fenrir. Yeah! *cheering* *shouting* *much happiness all around* I was so happy to see him. Er, read about him actually, but you get my point. I like the Beta; seems like a playful sort to me. I half hope it's Evander that takes Harry before he can get to Tom Riddle, and I half hope it's Fenrir himself. I don't think it will be Fenrir, and I like the idea of Evander grabbing him. I can see Harry freaking out that after getting away from Snape and going to Riddle, he gets nabbed by Random Guy Q to be taken to Random Guy L. It's a great picture in my mind. I'm excited for what's about to unfurl. Keep it up, keep it going. ~dpa06~
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  • From kati on April 04, 2008
    Yeah, I get your point, it would be boring without Fenrir! ^^ I actually thought that Harry's personality really shone through in this chapter, you could really feel his helplessness and frustration at his situation. I liked Sirius' and Remus' roles in this, as his guradians. I am very curious as to how you will portray Fenrir; you have a very unique style. I liked the momentum in this chapter, you had a good balance between thought and action. I hope you are recovered from you illness. It totally sucks being stuck in bed. :( Good luck with the next chapter!
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  • From gorgeousbowneyes on April 03, 2008
    It's OK that you didn't get it up, better for it to be good than posted earlier without it being good. Sorry to hear that you were sick, I hope your feeling better now!

    As to this chapter, I liked it, although it was a little bit of a filler. However if it means that Harry has to be mated to Tom, then things should get real interesting real soon.

    Looking forward to more,
    ~gorgeousbowneyes
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  • From alma on April 02, 2008
    I love that it's different and the direction it's heading. And Snape's an ass!!! but I love him.
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  • From darkpyroangel06 on April 01, 2008
    I'm so sorry you were sick, but I understand your pain. 'Tis the season, no? This was amazing though. Why didn't Harry continue with the thought process of Tom forcing him? Because he didn't have proof? How is anyone going to have proof of that?! Unless there's a witness, or he beats the crap out of Tom in the process. Even then Tom could state that Harry was playing rough, you know how Harry is. I mean... *growl* Stupid Tom. I can't wait for Fenrir to show up. Is he going to just take Harry, take Harry from Tom, or disrupt the whole pack and become Alpha? Oh, the possibilities! You have some amazing writing. And the piece you wrote when sick? I bet I can imagine. I wrote an essay for English back in high school when I was sick and doped up to the gills. I handed it in,a nd my teacher handed it back two days later telling me to rewrite it, and that she'd never speak of the first essay I handed in ever again. I'd talked about pink ponies and the grass in the backyard and the poem we were supposed to be analyzing... for a paragraph out of three pages. It was interesting. So, "don't write when you're sick" is excellent advice indeed. But this chapter was great. I loved it. And I love that you reply to your reviewers. Keep it up. ~dpa06~
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  • From purpleismagic on April 01, 2008
    Hello again!
    Surprisingly, Snape's personality fits. ^_^ But I feel sooo bad for Harry!
    Fenrir needs to come save him from evil Tom!
    Much Love
    Dee
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  • From crazy4sex41582 on April 01, 2008
    Oh this is good
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  • From applesaucensoysauce on April 01, 2008
    I'm still hooked and glad to read another chapter.
    Harry is such a drama princess...
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  • From alleycat88 on April 01, 2008
    Oh wow! this fic is amazing! all the people are in character only they're all werewolves! ^^ Poor Harry....god snape is such a prick. Could we get some more background on Harry and the others? I feel like I walked into the middle of a lifelong play. Other than that I love the story and cant wait for Fenrir! Thanks for the chapter and update soon please!
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  • From kati on March 21, 2008
    well, I like the way you've thought this out, but I have to say, you've kinda rushed the beginning. Yeah, its important to get readers eager to learn more with a little action, but it is very difficult to connect with the protaginist and to care and empathise with them, when their character hasn't really been developed yet. Your authors notes are important, yes, but I couldn't pick up on any of the themes you described in them by reading the story alone. You should work on giving Harry a personality (and not the over-used "I am a submissive but I won't act like one" sort of thing you see more and more frequently in this fandom) first, making us really care about what happens to him, and then move on to the angsty-action scenes. Heh, looking back over this review it seems overly harsh, but rest assured, I like this and would appreciate being emailed when its updated. I only take the time to give advice when I like an author's style! ^^ So, good luck with the coming chapters and keep striving to improve! (btw incase you are wondering, the only stories I myself have published were written many years ago and are extremely sad little afairs, so if you are thinking "where the hell does she get off saying how I should write my stories when hers are shit with bells on?" then, well... I'm afraid I can't answer that question because I wonder sometimes too. ^0^)
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  • From bumblebee on March 20, 2008
    very interesting start, i'd like to read what you have next

    continue soon ^^
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  • From purpleismagic on March 19, 2008
    Wow.
    I'll defiantly be interested to see how Tom will react to Fenrir. ^_^ I liked how everyone was in character, despite it being an alternate universe. And I can just picture Snape as an alpha.
    Well- I'll wait till the next chapter to say more!
    Much Love
    Dee
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  • From gorgeousbowneyes on March 17, 2008
    OK I know it's only been a couple of days, but I'm going to start begging for an update now, as I have a few exams coming up and I can't concentrate on my study coz I keep having to check up on this story to see whether its been updated and it's driving me nuts!!!!!!! I'm totally in love with this story and this idea and I want more!!! Please? Pretty please? Please can I have some more? *Gets on knees* Please???? I don't know how else to beg here, other than to offer sexual favours like our fanfic characters do!! Please?

    Can you hear the desperation? I'm hoping you update soon, I really want to read more before I have to closet myself away and study for my exams tomorrow.

    But if you don't, that's OK. I'll read what ever is posted when I come back to fanfiction on Wednesday next week. *sigh*

    xoxoxo ~gorgeousbowneyes
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