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Reviews for Intentions

By : Tassanaburrfoot
  • From BeautifulOblivion on April 24, 2011
    I think this is a nice snapshot of a budding relationship, so I wouldn't worry about the fluff. There isn't much of a chance for a true conflict to reveal itself, but that is what one shots are. I think it would be interesting for you to continue this story now that you have matured as a writer.

    I became intrigued by "Fantasy House," and decided to read some of your other stories, and I am surprised to find that you haven't written many Snape/Hermione stories with the way you have portrayed him in your latest story. Please update it soon.
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on August 05, 2008
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From luvhp on May 20, 2008
    If this is what you come up with merely 'dabbling' at work, then I am quite pleased to read your work.

    I absolutely love fluff stories. It's anice break nt to have drenched knickers when I go home, LOL. Although, this one was pretty good! XD
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  • From Jocelyn25 on April 22, 2008
    I would still love to read a continuation of this :)
    Its beautiful and sweet and i really like it.

    PLease? :)
    Jocy
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  • From Snaperape on April 22, 2008
    Well I hope you continue it. Althought he may be a bit fluffy that isn't a bad thing. It can be a alternate universe kind of thing if it does barther you. But I hope there are at lest a few more chapters.
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  • From JaceDamian23 on April 21, 2008
    love the start of that
    its cute
    sweet

    please email me when you write more

    angelinaguerin23@hotmail.com
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  • From lovesnogger on April 08, 2008
    aww so cute i loved it i hope that theres some more
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  • From Madietta on April 06, 2008
    Were this a generic student/teacher romance vignette, I would say it is a well rendered one. You are obviously a competent writer. However, for a Snape/Hermione pairing it doesn't quite work. I have nothing against Snape fluff, quite the contrary ;-), but there has to be rhyme and reason to it. Both Severus and Hermione are skewed so much out of character here that it's nearly grating. It seems like a romance of two teenagers, not that of an older teacher with issues and a smart, yet inexperienced girl. The piece would work well if it were a later chapter in a much longer story, where both characters would gradually develop into the way you are depicting them. I hope you don't mind my honest opinion, there is absolutely no ill will behind it, just a suggestion for improvement. Cheers, Madietta
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  • From Angie30 on April 05, 2008
    Well I like it but if you feel the need to work the bugs out then by all means do. Its hard to nail down Severus's personality especially when you want him a bit OOC. Please continue with this story I would love to see where this goes.
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  • From kittyperry on April 04, 2008
    Hello,
    Well because you did admit that it was overly fluffy, I'll be honest and tell you what I really think. First its a good story, but Hermione would never have spoken her feelings out loud like that. So that made me cringe a bit. Then there was the who smiling Snape thing. He doesn't really smile, his lips curls upwards, he sneers and raises his eyebrow really sexily :P
    But you can make them share more intelligent conversation and lemons if you continue the story - it does have potential, you just need to make sure you've got a good plot to build the relationship round. Have you read A Merciless Affection by Verity Brown on fictionally? Its brilliant and really brings out the dark, sexy Snape if you're interested.
    Best of luck and hope you don't mind the comments
    Kitty
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  • From AriaDragoncrest on April 03, 2008
    Excellent. please continue it.
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  • From NutsAboutHarry on April 03, 2008
    Yeah it was fluffy but it was good...can you please continue with it? Maybe do a chappie where Ron and Harry find out about their 'Relationship'

    Anyway great job, well done!
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  • From Jocelyn25 on April 03, 2008
    You are right, this is not really Snape like, but on the other hand...did we ever really get to know Snape? NO would be my answer he might actually be as fluffy as you described him and seriously i enjoy the !DarkSeverus as much as the !FluffySeverus as long as he doesnt get whiny, and yours seems very confident.
    That said, i would really like this story to continue. A fantastic, fluffy story is exactly what i need these days and yours is extremely well written. Thank you for sharing

    Love
    Jocy
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  • From neelix on April 03, 2008
    Hi.

    I am liking this, particularly that Hermione has the confidence to go an get what she wants. I am not sure that Snape would be quite so accommodating straight away... I had a hard time getting into his head too, so I sat and watched lots of HP and tried to think like Snape. It helped me, anyway....

    I think you could take this further. Wither way, I liked it!
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  • From chyara on April 03, 2008
    looking forward to were you take it. dont quit now....
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