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By : lexi1498
  • From catysmom1028 on April 10, 2008
    I like it. Please update soon.

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  • From Tenar10r on April 10, 2008
    I liked all of the action/reaction but feel that the chapter was a bit shortchanged.
    It seemed more like an outline than your normally full-fleshed work.
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  • From Sampdoria on April 10, 2008
    Brilliant chapter. I loved how Fred and George jumped in to help the seccond they were told what was going on, I know there was a reason for me liking those twins:-))
    The relationship between Severus and Hermione is comming along nicely, I hope he will reach the hospital wing in time to see his child being born, not to mention to see the ordeal Hermione has to go through to get said child into the world:-))
    I look forward to read more!
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  • From Heidi191976 on April 10, 2008
    Poor Alyson and James. I am glad that they were both found quickly by Severus. I think if I were in his position, I would have done the exact same thing and confronted Malfoy as well. I look forward to the next chapter.
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  • From wicraven on April 10, 2008
    Great post, love the story, can't wait until you post again, so please post again soon. Thanks.
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  • From Heidi191976 on April 10, 2008
    I loved the way you wrote in the name change as a surprise for Severus, that was excellent. I think the second child should be a boy. I look forward to reading more.
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  • From genna on April 09, 2008
    I think it is pretty good for a first fic. The only thing you might want to watch out for is how quickly you sprint from one substantive point to the other. For example, Hermione stopped speaking to friends, had a baby, returned to Hogwarts, got pregnant, and started teaching without us knowing her whys or hows. As a writer, you want to tell us that she entered the room. As a reader, I want to know whether she stumped her feet as she yanked open the door or did she stroll into the hall expecting all eyes to be on her.

    I never finished my first fic. I have a so so incomplete first draft of the next fic. Just keep spitting out your ideas. Over time, you refine them. Surprisingly, you will do better than you expect.
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  • From Lauriurix on April 09, 2008
    awwwwwwww :)

    cant wait for more, im really enjoying this story!


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  • From Angie30 on April 09, 2008
    Such a sweet chapter
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  • From Heidi191976 on April 09, 2008
    These last two chapters were a bit sad. Poor Severus being blamed for hurting Alyson and thinking that he would never get to see her again. I am glad that Alyson told her mum what happened and that Hermione apologized to Severus, letting him be a part of his daughter's life. I hope that soon he might convince Hermione to change Alyson's last name to Snape. I look forward to reading more.
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  • From wicraven on April 09, 2008
    Great post, love the story, can't wait until you post again, so please post again soon. Thanks.
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  • From wicraven on April 09, 2008
    Oh...poor sev...great story..please post again soon...Thanks.
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  • From Lauriurix on April 09, 2008
    :P

    very interesting chapter n__n

    but at the end it was kind of a shock that well she got pissed off so easily :O

    but cant wait to read more! :D
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  • From Sampdoria on April 09, 2008
    Very nice progress in your story! Not to fond of Severus allowing Draco to call Hermione a Mudblood and Alyson a brat though. While I will grant Severus the rigth to have mixed emotions about bein a father, I fully expect him to stand up for his child no matter what.
    And, while I can fully understand that Hermione was out of her mind with worry, I think someone, not Severus, but someone, should tell her just how easily little four years old rush into things, that this could just as easily have happened when Alyson were in her care, that Severus loves Alyson and would never, if he could have prevented it, allowed her to get hurt. Hermione owes Severus one hell of a apologie!
    Update again soon:-))
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  • From Heidi191976 on April 09, 2008
    An excellent chapter. I am glad that Severus is getting along with his daughter. I hope that he and Hermione end up together in the end. I look forward to reading the next chapter.
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