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Reviews for The Two Way Mirror

By : Magzie
  • From lafemxtina on May 07, 2008
    This story is great! I do hope you stick with it til the end. It's way too good to not be finished!
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  • From miakitty on May 07, 2008
    super hot! u r a good writer,i love this story since the first time i read it. Though,i was hoping for you to post more chapters. By the way, are u kiddin me? I love draco and hermione together,this is Harry Potter fanfic for god sake,enemy can be lover,lover can be enemy..anything can happend in the land of fantasy!

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  • From jessirose85 on May 06, 2008
    This is a great fic...loved the smut....please update soon xxxxxx
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  • From bananasforyou on May 06, 2008
    holy crap people told you not to hook them up but thats bullshit! i loved it and fuck them.
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  • From catysmom1028 on May 06, 2008
    I like it. Please update soon.

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  • From on May 06, 2008
    Your dialogue is just fine. WHat I don't understand is why herm gave in so easily? I would have expected her to fight back. Oh well, at least she wasn't so viciously raped and broken to almost nothingness
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  • From nonentity on May 06, 2008
    The first chapter was quite nice, but I think you need to revamp the details in the second chapter. There's no issue with where you're trying to go, but their motivations change too quickly and the characterizations aren't convincing. For example, why did Hermione volunteer exactly which Horcruxes they had already destroyed? She could have kept her answer a lot shorter with less info. If she was really that terrified of the Crucio that she'd spill her guts, say so. Maybe go back and consider each action they do and what they say, and see if it is appropriate for the character given what had just happened?

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  • From Obscura on May 06, 2008
    Alright... I won't say anything about the plot of this story for it is still the first chapter and I believe everything is possible. What I noticed were three things:
    First, you have some mistakes in spelling. For example "Serius" instead of "Sirius" or "Horcruxe's" instead of "Horcruxes" and "its" instead of "it's". Maybe you need to read through your chapters another time or get yourself a Beta-Reader.
    Second: Please pay attention to your English and OOC-ness. Harry Potter is a British English story, but "Dammit" spoken by Bellatrix is OOC as well as more American.
    Third: Your grammar. You confused "was" with "were" and some other things that just make you stumble while reading.
    Please don't take this personal. It is just meant to help you with your story. My recommendation would be to get yourself a Beta-Reader to help. It can work miracles ^^
    Regards, Obscura
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  • From miakitty on May 06, 2008
    you should write more! intersting beginning
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  • From bananasforyou on May 05, 2008
    ooh more please!!!!
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