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By : Kooldragon400

From Citten on September 30, 2008
That was great!!!! i will have to say i dont know how i missed this story and it has taken me the better part of a week to finally catch up to where you are and i absolutly love the story!!!!!!!!! i love everything and i have laughed so much! i look forward to lots more! :)
i have to go now or i would write more so i will have to do so later! :)
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From ANON - Apple on September 30, 2008
yep.. definitely better than the other revenge... haha...

this is more descriptive and funny...

thanks for this chappie... ^^
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From distinctlyME on September 30, 2008
Oh I do I do. Harsh but not too Death Eater harsh. It lets us know that maybe Bella and Roddy can make it through this new leaf program relatively changed and unchanged.
But I did like the old one too. I must admit, this was just much better. She loses everything and has to live with it. I really do love it. It's the perfect revenge with a bit of Bellatrix and Roddy nastiness with it.

I was a bit confused at first as to why she was acting all skittish and the "stranger comment", but it's 8 am here so I'm a bit slow on the uptake hahaha.

I really do hope that there is some Harry in the next chapter....maybe a few years into the future?
I think you've wrapped everyone up nicely. Now maybe a few years into the future at one of their weddings, and you can make it a long chapter and a perfect ending. Or someone is giving birth, or something climatic and lovely, but not TOO gushy.

I think where you left off just now in this chapter is the perfect leeway into a few years later. You've covered everyone, so why not right?
Unless of course you have more to say, in which case... More chapters? I'm all for it. haha

*sigh* Yes a wedding. We're so flustered with the payments and the saving and the everything that goes with it we're honestly at the point of "Oooh City Hall looks exceptionally pretty today doesn't it? And dinner at Stayners Wharf sounds delicious enough to finish it all off!"

Anyways my darling. I am off to the doctors and then work.
Fabulous chapter, and I'm truly excited to see what you do next.

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From Amaya1015 on September 30, 2008
I was just able to read the original chapter that you wrote and i have to say that i like this chapter better. It was funny instead of being kind of like a horror story. i loved when he suggested "a strongly worded letter" to the lestrange. I loved this chapter so much better.
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From AndreaLorraine on September 29, 2008
Wow. That was a little harsh. You didn't have to kill the woman, for Pete's sake. She did some nasty stuff but she was all talk. And after the violence Ruby endured (Ruby being someone Bella likes) I wouldn't think that Bella would want to subject any other woman, even Skeeter, to something like that.

This just doesn't sit well with me. Rape is never something to be celebrated or glorified, even if the person who endures it is rotten. Nobody EVER deserves to get raped. Nobody. Your chapter creates a double standard - you want your readers to be horrified at what happens to Ruby earlier in the story and then glad that it is done to Rita later? Not good. Just not good. I can't really express how not good it is.

I like that you want to show that Bella and Roddy haven't changed so much that they don't know how to take care of a 'problem'. I also like that you are going to have them indirectly silence Rita. However, they are much more creative than this. YOU are much more creative than this. There are dozens of ways you could have shut up Rita without rape & murder - most of which would have been a better, more entertaining revenge.

Anything would be better. Slip her a potion that makes her forget how to write. Forge some career-destroying stories in her name so that she gets fired. Hell, even obliviating her would be better. Do not leave this chapter like this.
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From ANON - darkangel on September 29, 2008
i love this story...i love how ruby is american....im living in none other than salem massachusetts which is known as the "witch city"...how ironic...i cant remember but did u ever state what part of america ruby was from?
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From distinctlyME on September 29, 2008
Brutal....totally brutal. Couldn't they have just let her turn into her animagus form and sqiushed her, and left her on some shitty persons door to frame. I mean her eye sockets and her raped her. *sigh*

I won't say she deserved it, because she didn't. Like the Minister said, she was a human being. But I guess if it had to be done, you did it good.

I can't say much because I have to run.
But I did like it.
Put Harry in the next chapter...pretty pretty please?

Also, I think when you're summing up a story, when there's a new character, you should put too much info. on them in. So to answer your question... You explained Miss America perfectly. You gave us enough to go by without adding a totally new character to the mix if you don't want to.

Anyways my darling, I shall write a longer review next time I promise. I'm just so beat and I need to get a nap in.
I am now officially working two jobs. Weddings are so freaking expensive. Lord, we are a world consumed by money. *sigh*

ta-ta for now.
dM
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From RyGirl824 on September 29, 2008
Not quite what I was expecting, but good nonetheless.
:D

Now, more Hermione & Draco? and Ron & Ruby? And Snape, and his baby, too? Please?
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From smmz79 on September 29, 2008
wow they definitely got their point across i think!!!! great job!!!! i love it....
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From pandabear on September 28, 2008
I've always passed up this story....thinking I wouldnt like it, come to find out ive been glued to my computer between sleep and my job to catch up with this story. You've got me hooked in the worst way.

I absouletly HATE Reeta Skeeter.

C.P.I.G
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From angelnomiko on September 27, 2008
man .. maybe they should talk to mione and what ever they do i hope they dont get caught.. pleaseplease update soon .. later for now

angel
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From RyGirl824 on September 27, 2008
Drool-worthy... nope, sorry, just can't see it..

But this chapter, that's just about drool-worthy. Little short, but very good. I'm super excited to see what Bella is scheming.. Can't you just see the wheels turning in her mind? Haha, it's sure to be good!
:)
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From AndreaLorraine on September 27, 2008
Well, I suppose that's the best kind of apology - the kind that contains make-up sex. I chuckled at the elves' comment about nesting.

Glad Kingsley is on their side and I hope Bella's revenge goes off without a hitch.

On a side note - you should give Delerium a try, they're great to write to. Definitely muse food.
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From distinctlyME on September 27, 2008
I'm sorry my love, I've been working crazy 12 hour shifts, trying to plan a wedding, and still make time for public appearances with friends without dropping dead. I hadn't had time to read anything, much to my huge disappointment, but really sleep needed to come in somewhere.
God being independent is hard freaking work. *sigh* And just imagine I'll be going back to school soon.

Anyways my Darling lets review shall we?
The Chapter before this last one was great just great. I think it really helped us sum up what people are doing. Like you said it'll take awhile to finish the story because you do need to sum up all those subplots. Which I think you are well on your way to doing. I'm super glad Hermione and Draco have gotten their spot light. I'm satisfied to deeply submerge myself into a few chapters without them now. hahaha.
Rita Skeeter is a dumb bitch. First Narcissa and then Bella and Roddy. And may I say how cute it was that they were out shopping for baby stuff? hehehehe.

Last Chapter:
YAYYYYYYYYY smut!!! If I weren't so damn tired I'd be in my bedroom doing the same thing. LOL
Awww I love Bella and Roddy. They are so sweet in such a dysfunctional turning functional way that you just can't help but adore the characters you have created for them.
This chapter was great. Really great. I think you're doing an amazing job summing up everyone's life after the war. But don't make it too good for everyone, even the light side. They were still in a war. But I think you've been good with that, like the nightmares Ruby was having and the way Narcissa and Lucius along with Roddy and Bella will never really be excepted is a great indication of the trials and tribulations they'll still face even in a war-free environment.

Oh and can I just say how excited I am to see Snape as a parent. Please tell me Snape will soften and be completely adorable and sarcastically soft. But obviously only to the Mommy and Baby.

and i want Harry to meet someone.
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From blondpierogi on September 27, 2008
ooh what is Bella planning??? ahh I wanna know!!!
Great chapter again!!!
btw where do you live? You probably mentioned it before, but im pulling one of my "blondie" moments so i forget.
I love it!!! cannot wait to read more!!! :D

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