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From darkpyroangel06 on April 23, 2009
Okay, so this isn't a review. I just realized something and had to share it with you. You update every other weekend, right? Of course, you already know this. However, I get married on May 9. And you're posting that weekend. I'm so excited! You're going to update on the same weekend as my wedding! What an amazing wedding present! Sorry, I just had to share that. I was getting excited because you're updating this weekend, and then I realized you'd also be updating on my wedding weekend. And I was even more excited. And then I had to share with you.

You probably think I'm on crack right now.

You're only mostly right... ~dpa06~
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From TwilightVampire on April 18, 2009
love this story please update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Lovs ya
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From ANON - Kuromei on April 16, 2009
I can't imagine Dumbledore forcing Harry to learn magic and succeeding. Not when Harry himself doesn't want to. But what happens when (or if) Harry learns that the connection is a two-way thing? Severus might have to teach him Occlumency after all. X3

Another great chapter, just like the ones before. ;3 *hugs Dream-sama*
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From Rokkis on April 16, 2009
Not totally understanding why Harry doesn't want to bother his alpha with the vision. But what is more surprising is Fenrir allowing it. Yeah, sure he is in love with Harry, but he's still alpha and the well-being of his pack should be his number one priority! Despite Harry's childish rebellion or whatever.
As for Sirius.... nope. Don't like him anymore. But you did manage to make Sirius character more real with the whole photos and desperate attempt to bring Harry to him or make him dependent on him. Must say I am hoping for a telling off soon. Truly believe that Harry can only take so much prejudice and coercion before he too breaks. Also hope Albus is in for a good dressing down, especially considering the different treatment between Fenrir and Lupin. Can't see that it really inspires Harry that the wizarding world is the place for him!
Anyway, looking forward to the next update and hope you had a lovely Easter holiday.

Cheers!
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From ANON - Sirin Black on April 14, 2009
hope you had a good easter, i of course ate way to much chocolate :P
this chapter was excellent as always :D can't wait for the next one!!
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From ANON - qwerty on April 12, 2009
"There was nothing Fenrir could do and Harry thought it best to just ignore the Wizarding side of his heritage, even when it was apparently manifesting itself in such a distressing manner."
That's so frustrating^^ Will Harry at least tell Snape? And if he does, will Fenrir let Snape teach Harry Occlumency? Even though is it magic, it will help Harry out with his visions...
Great chapter!
P.S. I'm not your older brother despite the same sn. For one thing, I'm a girl ;)
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From Elphaba on April 12, 2009
Oh i can't wait until he tells Fenrir what is going on! And Sirius just annoys me with his desire for Harry to be like James!
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From darkpyroangel06 on April 11, 2009
LOLz! I love this story. My room mates think I'm crazy when they see me perched in front of my laptop Friday night on until I find the new chapter. They ask me what I'm waiting for, every other weekend! And I always respond, "New chapter for one of the greatest fics ever!" But, the one time I forgot it was an update weekend, I take a look and WHAM!!! Update! I was so excited I danced around my dorm room! LOLz!

Sadly, I cannot marry you. I am getting married to an amazing man in 28 days. I am madly in love with him, and we've already got most of the planning finalized. I mean, I have the dress and the ring and the tux and the place. So, thanks but no thanks. However, continue writing and I'll review just about anything you write! Promise!

Okay. This was an amazing chapter. I loved everything about it. I loved how Ron went home, and how the relationship between the two boys is growing without being the same as canon. I loved Sirius. Sirius! Wow. He's perfect. I mean, you spent that many years in Azkaban, there are gonna be a few screws loose. I can totally see him stalking around Harry's quarters, waiting for the second he steps foot out of them to ambush him. I loved the presents too. Invisibility cloak: check. Photo album of deceased parents: check. Practical gift: check. I loved Harry's view of the gifts though. That was so perfect, there's no proper adjective to describe it. I never even thought about the robe, but I would covet it too if it were Isaac's. I mean, he was only in the fic for a very short while. But he was so important! I mean, that's Harry's sire! And the thought of wanting to look at the pictures for Sirius' sake alone... Ah, pure genius. Harry is his own person, and he's not like anyone expects him to be: he's not James, he's not Lily, he's not conceited, he's not human. I loved it. Severus jumping in to stop Sirius so Harry would slip away was awesome too. And thinking to bring the innards for Fenrir? I was thinking a plate of cooked food and cookies. WAY better, the innards! I LOVED that part. But the visions. Wow. I love how you tie in so many pieces of canon, without making it the same story that's just written by you instead of JK Rowling. This is so awesome. I loved the lack of Dumbledore in this chapter too. Love him, love his role, but I needed a break. Oh! And I'm pissed that Remus is allowed in the castle! SO not fair! If I were Harry, I would stay outside with Fenrir during all school breaks and not just summer hols. But that's me. Main point? Loved it! As always. ~dpa06~
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From darkpyroangel06 on March 31, 2009
I think because I've been writing and betaing for so long, I can see what other authors are trying to do with their characters more easily than others. Like with Fenrir. He's such a hard character to pair with Harry, but have him stay a hardass, badass werewolf who is known for being completely ruthless. Meanwhile, Harry is this softer, mostly human, emotional person. You have to find a way to make them work without turning Fenrir into a complete pansy. And Severus! I kill his character in every fic I write. I cannot write a snarky Sev, which is what is needed. I applaud your writing, and hate you for the same reason. It's amazing, and I'm so jealous.

This chapter... Wow. I like the explanation for the black blood. It's perfect and completely believable. I love the conflicts that are everywhere. I mean, you've got everyone but Harry against Draco. Sirius is fighting with everyone because of what's happened while he's been in Azkaban. Fenrir fights with everyone because Fenrir's just a hard person to understand, much less get along with. Severus is Severus, just like Dumbledore is Dumbledore. I'm just excited about all the little things that make up the bigger picture of this fic. It's all so interwoven and complicated... and yet not. It's all very simple as well. Sirius is Harry's godfather, but he's been absent for so long that too much has happened. He's not ready to take his place in Harry's life, and he's not willing to accept what Harry's life consists of. Fenrir is the overprotective mate and Alpha. Harry is trying to live his life, but is finding out all these new things: godfather, magic, friends, music, etc. Severus is Severus, just like Dumbledore is Dumbledore. Draco is set for life, but he doesn't really like it and Harry's trying to befriend him without anyone getting hurt in the meantime. And poor Remus over there. He gets Sirius and Harry back, but nothing is "as it should be". He's trying to play nice and go with the flow, but it's so hard. I'm... stoked! I love this fic and even though I want you to hurry and post more, I don't want you to go too fast because it will soon be over. And that will be such a tragedy. Keep it up. It's amazing, as always. ~dpa06~
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From ANON - Sirin Black on March 30, 2009
loved this chapter! to bad sev won't be a werewolf too, but i guess i can't have everything lol
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From Visitkarte on March 30, 2009
Chapter 22/23

I'm s happy Harry used his magic in such a good way! And Greyback's 'get well card' had a nice penmanship! :-P

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From ANON - Spiros on March 30, 2009
This is a lovely story, and I think Sirius is an annoying little fucker in this story. :D
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From ANON - Kuromei on March 29, 2009
Hey! I'm reviewing, but I'm not logged in to my account. O_O Is that on purpose? X3

But moving on and concerning the chapter, it was yet another doozy, emotionally. Arguments, accusations and fist-fights, oh my. lol X3 And the smut- no, the love making was everything I love about scenes like that; tender, sweet, and hotter than magma. lol X3 I almost can't wait for the next two weeks to go by. ^w^

Oh! And thanks for the wrinkle cream. lol XD *hugs Dream-sama*
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From Elphaba on March 29, 2009
What an excellent chapter! It was so, I cringe to use word, sweet! LOL
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From ANON - Shain the otaku of Ireland on March 29, 2009
Wow...I need to get an account on here, don't I?

I LOVE this story! It's well thought out, intricate, and detailed. There are no mary-sues, you didn't make Dumbledore a blessed martyr, or a sadistic bastard...just a meddling, secretive man with a sense of morals, which he truly is when you think about the books. I approve of your portrayal of Remus and Sirius. I mean, they love Harry, sure, but they love him for being the "innocent, sweet, perfect child of their best friend" a stereotype of him that they generated before they knew him in person. They really are great guys (with the exception of Sirius being a bully as a child...and even now...XP), but they aren't the be all, end all of Harry's aquaintances. I love how you are making that clear here.
I hope to see more of Ron soon. I know he probably won't be a best friend of Harry here, but you are capturing his awkward, "means well" nature. And Draco is an intriguing addition to Harry's little gaggle of maybe-friends.
I can't recall whether you stated if Snape would be straight in this story aside from his feelings for Harry. A gay Snape would be fun (but most likely impossible with his former love of Lily), but either way, I really wish he would find someone to love in this. He has had a difficult life. He was bullied through childhood (of course being snarky might have caused some of that), his family life was tough, and the one girl he ever loved severed ties with him and married his school year enemy. Then he has to stick his ass on the line being a spy, just so he can make up for Lily's death. I think he finally needs some love...or at least to get laid. XD
Forgive my little fangirl spree!
Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading it!
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