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By : WingsofaDream

From ANON - qwerty on May 25, 2009
First of all, I really LOVE that you'll be updating weekly now. I'm so excited!
I don't think this chapter was full of "stuff" that had to happen. You're being too hard on yourself!
I liked how Harry is playing matchmaker between Ron and Hermione - nice, cute fluff intermixed with the struggles Harry undergoes.
Harry finally met Lucius Malfoy! I know Fenrir was sleeping at the time but does Harry tell Fenrir that he met Lucius? And Remus took the fall for Fenrir! I hope that Harry will continue to develop his relationship with Remus despite this setback.
I'm glad Harry isn't eager to forgive Sirius. I know that Sirius had a tough life but like you said, bad move Sirius.
Anyway, great chapter! Can't wait for next week!
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From ANON - Spiros on May 25, 2009
This is a lovely chapter... I'm surprised though, that the diary hadn't been heard from before Harry had made it to Hogwarts. Lucius Malfoy is a sneaky bastard. :O
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From Elphaba on May 24, 2009
Harry can never get away from that diary can he! LOL
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From kati on May 24, 2009
;) We can keep a whole kennel of them if you like. lol I have three already, what's a couple hundred more?

Unfortunately, I didn't really like this chapter much. Sorry. (I still love yooouuuuu!)

It was just a bit, um... lifeless? I don't know; we all already know about Riddle's diary and all that and not much happened. But sometimes you need these fillers to make a story work, so I won't hold it against you. :D

~Kati-chan
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From darkpyroangel06 on May 23, 2009
Yeah for choking on coffee! How can you drink that stuff? Ew! Of course, I'm allergic to it, so that may be why I don't like it...

It was a good chapter. Yes, a lot happened in it and it wasn't as exciting as some other chapters, but it was a good chapter. The first meeting with Lucius was interesting; I liked that. And Dumbledore insisting that he escort him off the premises - I loved that! Remus resigning because of this reason rather than being found out as an actual werewolf was a good turn of events. I love the way you alter the "reality" of the HP World to fit this AU HP World you've created. I'm SO happy Harry didn't forgive Sirius. I can totally see his side of things, but Sirius needs to grow up and come to the year 1993 (or 1994, depending on the time of year). Things have changed, and Harry is NOT James. I think he'll learn, eventually. Harry may be 30 years old, but he'll learn. I hope. Severus was a rare feature in this chapter, but he stayed true to form. And, as always, Fenrir was the shiz. I loved when Dumbledore asked about anything fishy from the night before and Fenrir said they were asleep all night. However, as soon as the headmaster was gone, he turned on Harry with a look. Priceless! Keep it up, because this fic is amazing. Sad that in just over three months this will all be over. Just in time for me to start university again. Oh well. It'll be great while it lasts. And I can always just reread it. ~dpa06~
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From ANON - mrfurgeson on May 23, 2009
Great chapter once again! Too bad about Draco though. Hopefully there will be more smut to come?
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From ANON - kelsin on May 23, 2009
very nice chapter. Im so excited about the weekly updates!
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From ANON - dana_aeryn on May 21, 2009
Just wanted to say that I'm enjoying this very much. I usually avoid this pairin, but you storyy has pulled me in and kept me there. very much looking forward to the next part.
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From Darkless on May 19, 2009
Ah, a little guilt might soften up that old wolf...maybe a little coddling and cuddling is in order. I'm sure Harry won't complain. Ugh, when will Serius wise up?

Nice.
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From PantiesAreOverrated on May 14, 2009
i know that 'Kati-Chan' girl told you to marry her, but i just thought i should tell you that i love you more and you should marry me instead. lol. anywho. i havent even started reading this story yet. though, i know it'll be awesome sense i've read one of you originals and it rocked my socks. i was so happy when i realized you right harry potter fanfic. not only that, but you write Drarry AND Fenrir/harry! triple win. you win at winning.
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From darkpyroangel06 on May 14, 2009
I really thought I was going to be able to find a quite half-hour to sit down and read this newest chapter the morning of my wedding (since I didn't get married until 6:00pm Mountain Standard Time), BUT I DIDN'T! There was too much to do! People coming and going, bakers and caterers to track down, nervous bridesmaids to calm. Ugh! Everyone else was more nervous than I was! But, it was so beautiful and everything was perfect thanks to my maid-of-honour, best man, and husband's other best friend. Without those three... I can't even imagine the horrors.

Wow. I don't know what to say to this chapter. I was annoyed that Sirius still hadn't accepted Draco yet. I mean, I can understand it to a point. But like Harry said, Draco isn't Lucius and he (Harry) has never even met Lucius! The lack of wolfsbane freaked me out. I want to know who or what botched it. I mean, this is Severus here! He doesn't mess up potions, especially not ones he's made several times before. Yes, the wolfsbane is a long and complicated potion, but... It's Severus! I knew the moment that was revealed that something would go wrong. I thought it would be more along the lines of Fenrir taking Harry and running away with him because he's in his werewolf mind instead of his human mind, or Fenrir and Moony fighting nearly to the death, or something along those lines. I even expected Padfoot to make an appearance. But as soon as Harry saw the figure, I knew it was either Sirius or Draco. Once it was revealed it was Draco, I knew Harry was in trouble. But everything after that shocked me right off my 7th story balcony here in Hawai'i. Except Sirius' part in it. I expected Sirius to be the cause. But the way everyone reacted, especially Fenrir, was perfect. And their natural instincts to protect Harry from the werewolf. And Moony! I loved Moony in this, simply because his pack instinct made sense. And I loved how his pack instinct is so far from Fenrir's! Oh, that was beautiful. You know what? I never connected Sirius sending Draco out there to the past when Sirius sent Severus out there. Oh, the irony. Fenrir's threat was, as expected, perfect. But Harry's what hurt. I mean, he's lying there with a shattered leg, and he has the most sense out of everyone there! I can guarantee that the only thing going through my mind with a shattered leg is something along the lines of "AHHHH! Bloody fucking hell! Shite! Damn! Motherfucker! AHHHHHHHHHH! That HURTS! AHHHHHHHH!" Or something like that anyways. But Harry's having a lucid, reasonable conversation, and controlling werewolves, and bringing order to four adults and another student. My God! I liked it when Fenrir accepted that Severus would be taking Harry to the hospital wing. It was just a fact; there was no growling or jealousy or threats or remarks. It was just accepted. Very nicely done. But Harry's parting words to his godfather... Will they work? Will Sirius grow up and be a man and... grow up? I almost hope he doesn't, ya know? Just so Harry doesn't have to worry about him anymore. On the other hand, I will miss Sirius, as he is a favourite character. Oh, I can't wait to see what you do! It's so exciting! (and I just can't hide it - I'm about to lose control and I think I like it) Sorry, had to. ~dpa06~
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From Charoum on May 14, 2009
O...M...G...we love the last line
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From Charoum on May 14, 2009
A jealous fenrir is a hot fenrir

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From kati on May 12, 2009
YAY! I love you! Marry me.

...

Okay, maybe not.

Anywho, this chapter was FANTASTIC. I think maybe that it's my favourite so far (it's definitely up there, anyway). I loved the drama, and the manipulation, the emotions - which you conveyed very clearly. Maybe Sirius will now finally grow up. Oh, I felt so bad for Draco, you could just tell that he thought Harry was gonna ask him out or something, only to have his hopes dashed! Poor baby.

Great chapter.

~Kati-chan
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From Rokkis on May 11, 2009
God that was disgusting! I can't actually believe Sirius did something so vile...
The logical and smart thing to do here for all parties is to out Sirius in some serious mental care. He just did afterall try to KILL a child in the school. I can not find ANY reason what so ever! for Dumbledore to allow the man to remain in a school full of children if he insists they make good werewolf food... *shakes head*
And even though Harry isn't a typical vindictive person, Sirius just tried to kill a friend and get Fenrir into Azkaban.... Is it even possible to forgive something like that?

Good chapter though, but I know that the consequences of this chapter will determine if I will continue reading this...

Cheers!
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