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Reviews for Ashes of Armageddon

By : emilywaters
  • From ANON - Anon on October 01, 2008
    How was Neville effected that broke the covenant between Harry and Severus? I know he was the Guardian but he is not dead and only in for questioning at this time unless the Neville in custody is a fake. Harry and Sev have to know that something else is not right. Great story by the way. I don't think I have reviewed before but have been following it for some time.
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  • From callistianstar on September 30, 2008
    Well, yes, it is apparent that Neville is in a "tight bind" as you had him explain in the previous chapter. If he were to have revealed everything, it would have made him Peter, and probably have Ginny and Al killed or imprisoned out of fear for the rest of the wizarding world. And as for that position of trust, I was more thinking of the books. Yes, he has been in that position in Ashes, but it is that very position that has gotten him in this sticky problem. I brought it up because, despite all of this, I was a bit satisfied that since Neville is involved in a way he wasn't in the books, he now can't show judgement against the actions of others. He can no longer stand in judgement of people like Ron and Hermione who stood aside and watched as Harry became Tom. I can't imagine Neville is responsible entirely for this mess (stray death eater?). And although I could definitely see the kidnap of Al as a possible solution for Neville to keep Al safe as well as Ginny, I don't think he'd involve Hugo. I'm having a hard time pinpoint Neville in this story. Something in him is stopping him from going to Luna, and making him take all of the actions he has taken. Something is terribly wrong with Neville, Ginny, and Al in my opinion. I just hope Ron keeps his head. Great job.
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  • From cravedom on September 30, 2008
    Darn it, another surprise! Neville is one of my favorite characters in HP and usually gets ignored, is cool to see him getting some of the spot light, even if is not in a good way. What about Luna? Maybe she took the kids to look for whatever weird creature she is after now ;p
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  • From Leentjef on September 30, 2008
    this was very very good
    and can't you take the same solution as with harry
    use the killing curs and kill the dust
    keep up the graet work and post soon
    bye bye
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  • From ANON - theseachange on September 30, 2008
    Interesting turn of events. Any chance Ginny hid the children herself? Can a person obliviate themselves? But if so, why not wait for a time Hugo wasn't around? And then I suppose she'd have had to obliviate Neville as well. Guess I'll have to wait and find out.

    Nice to see you updating so frequently.
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  • From ANON - whitehound on September 30, 2008
    Well, if they can figure out some way of filtering the Dust out they might be able to do something which would stop Al fathering children in the normal (Dust-contaminated) way, whilst enabling him to be a father through some wizardiing equivalent of in vitro fertilization, once his semen had been filtered to remove the Dust. Unless, of course, the condition turns out to be manageable, or he turns out to be the equivalent of a descendant of Tom rather than Tom himself, in which case it won't matter so much if he passes it on. If Tom had actually had children, in a normal way, one wouldn't think they had to be stopped from reproducing. It's the power to warp minds which comes from Tom himself which is so deadly, and Al may not have that.

    In any case, on his own Al shouldn't be a personal threat to Severus, or to any of them except Harry himself. Dust-contaminated Harry was a threat to Severus because he, as Harry, already had a history of anger and resentment and distrust towards him. He didn't knowingly attack Severus because Severus had [really] betrayed Tom, but because of offences which the part of him which was still Harry imagined him to have committed, although it was the Dust which made him so certain and so vicious.

    Al, taken on his own, has no personal reason to want revenge on Severus, or on any of the rest except his father, whom he may hate for "abandoning" him. So whilst the Dust might cause him to grow up disliking Severus, Ron, Hermione and Neville, he has no grievance against them for the Dust to play on, and no reason actively to persecute them.

    But if he has, as I rather suspect, been kidnapped by Death Eaters who have found out what he is, then his innate dislike of Severus and the others will make it easy for them to indoctrinate him against them.
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  • From ANON - anon on September 29, 2008
    Ch 58. Wonderfully done, very tense.
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  • From ANON - anon on September 29, 2008
    Ch 57: Didn't see that coming, though you certainly laid the hints many chapters ago. All very well written, all always.
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  • From ANON - anon on September 29, 2008
    Ch 56: This chapter was very cathartic and sweet... until I read the next chapter! Then it all seemed like a set up.
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  • From ANON - anon on September 29, 2008
    Ch 55: Beautiful chapter. I'm so very glad to be wrong in my guess about how they might move forward.
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  • From ANON - athenakt fromLive/Insanejournal on September 29, 2008
    I've been enjoying this fic quite a bit; the motivations and behaviors are well thought out and characterized!
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  • From callistianstar on September 29, 2008
    Good grief. Your comment about whether Al could be Tom's son instead... It wouldn't matter who is his soul's father really, would it? I can't imagine Ginny's too careful parenting is helping Al's experience any, but I don't understand what you meant by whether Al is Tom's son or Harry's son. Assumming the dust is a factor, well I just find everyones reactions highly ironic. First off, there is the custody thing, where before it wouldn't be borne that Harry would watch Al, but now that Al is probably being affected by the dust, Harry's all good to go. Sure he and Severus are on a good rappot, but I find that this suggestion that Harry take care of Al to be a little unfair in regards to Harry's own previous reluctance and everyone else's. As for Neville's reaction... Goodness. I can't blame him, but the way he explains it, that he kept quiet for the sake of Ginny, just as Hermione and Ron did for Harry... so very ironical. Ron doesn't have a place to attack Neville (except in regards to his son), but Neville certainly is acting in an interesting fashion. I suppose we've never seen him hold a "trust" position and he's always been (since the beginning books) the one who got in the way (in those days, to stop the trio from fighting Voldemort [can't remeber if it was for the stone or the chamber]). I look forward to the next chapter. Nice job building up all this tension.
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  • From ANON - edelle on September 29, 2008
    So, so good! I don't ever want this fic to end! Absolutely love the story. Just one more thing would make it perfect - Snarry smex!
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  • From ANON - kunitsu on September 29, 2008
    Wow I never though that Al would have the Dust and I thought everything would be fine for Severus and Harry.
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  • From ANON - whitehound on September 29, 2008
    Forgot to say, I think it's good for their relationship, and for Snape's self-confidence, that Snape is getting to be the one doing the comforting and caring for Harry here. It takes them as far away as possible from where they were when Harry was infected by the Dust, reaffirming that that creature wasn't really Harry, and reassuring Snape that the fact that he may sometimes choose to be submissive or passive because that's the mood they're in at the time, doesn't mean he's stuck like that forever. He can still be the commanding one if that's what the situation requires.
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