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Reviews for Ashes of Armageddon

By : emilywaters
  • From ANON - theseachange on July 06, 2008
    I liked the Interlude, the way you cover the changes in Snape's life and situation, and the growing easy relationship between Snape and Hermione. This last chapter was well done. I liked the description of Snape allowing his surroundings at home to reflect the way he feels. I'm curious to know where you're going with Snape's dreams. On the one hand, I can't help but wonder if you'll go in the direction of some of your other fics. On the other hand, I think this is by far your best written HP story, and I think you've worked pretty hard to be believable and keep the characters convincing, so I'm interested to see exactly what you'll have Snape dreaming, his reactions, etc. After all, vomiting into the sink at the memory of the night at Godrics Hollow doesn't seem to fit, on the surface, with having dreams about that night that aren't nightmares.
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  • From Visitkarte on July 06, 2008
    Whamm! What a start! Severus is screwed, even more than he likes to admit. How hard could it be to heal his scars and help the soul get over the torture experience. But no, drugging himself to the point he is worse of than a sixth-year-Hermione... She is right, he needs help. But he will hardly admit it, unless he lets Harry come him near and try to make amends. They need each other to get over the terror of the old terrors...
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  • From ANON - whitehound on July 06, 2008
    I hope this isn't going to turn into another "Snape is really kinky and into bondage" story. You've written him, and the story, so well so far, it would be such a shame to warp his character just to make a bit of cheap porn.
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  • From ANON - Fairner on July 06, 2008
    ...i feel bad for severus his mind is slowly escaping him, but i wonder why albus sirius cried when he saw severus...
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  • From ANON - Jean Lamb on July 06, 2008
    How very special that Dumbledore's plan worked out so well :(. And wasn't it convenient for Snape and Harry to be so full of love and peace that the old Headmaster was let off so easy. Of _course_ Snape felt protected by the slave bond to Albus while he was still alive--though oddly enough, he didn't feel that way in the real world, and in actuality suffered immensely from it, from both Dumbledore and Harry. Once again, Albus is off the hook and feeling fine, oh yeah.

    But any tale is good enough as long as Dumbledore still gets worshipped, isn't it?
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  • From callistianstar on July 06, 2008
    Dreams of Harry, he means? Yes well, as darkHarry said, Snape is always more unnervered by kindness rather than pain. Although this deterioration of mind he is going through now doesn't help matters, as one of the last things he was able to take pride in as a human being was his mind, and also the ability to duel. With a book called the Void, and a chapter called descent, I suspect we once again will not be seeing any degree of the bright lights we saw at King's Cross not to long ago. Unless of course Snape dies. Which would, you know, suck. I'm digressing. Anyways, I look forward to more. Was that potion meant to help his health? Or is it inconsequential to know?
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  • From Maybe on July 06, 2008
    At first I was surpised and almost disappointed to see the grim storyline turn into happily ever after, but I can feel in your excellent writing skills that it's not so. Love your writings and lover to read more.
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  • From callistianstar on July 06, 2008
    I find myself rather liking the Interlude, when I thought I'd be frustrated beyond belief hoping that it would end so I could maybe see Harry and Snape together. This chapter in particular gave me the kind of insight I had hoped to gain from the Harry Potter books. Instead of just focusing on four or so main characters and their children or something, we see Snape's interactions with everyone and a taste of how everyone is doing. Although I wish I knew what was happening between Luna and Neville. Except for Harry of course. I do wonder why Albus had that reaction, but... I'm quite glad that Snape is getting recognition he deserves, and I enjoyed the daughter/father banter with Severus's ratings on his pain. As for Harry's relationship with Ginny, I'm halved. I don't think they should be together, not only because I want to see Harry/Snape, but also because he is rather treating her as second place. I wonder if she knows. However on the other side, they do have a son, and if his reaction is any indication, I think it is rather sad that he would have to go through a time without both parents. Looking forward to more, as always.
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  • From lilpotter on July 06, 2008
    i think neville with be ginny.poor harry and snape.i hope they together soon
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  • From ANON - hobgoblinn on July 06, 2008
    Very nice continuation, with realistic passing of time, and deepening of relationships. I especially like how Hermione becomes like a daughter to Severus, and how he doesn't mind, though he never would admit it. I'm exploring a different kind of father daughter dynamic with those two in my current wip, "In Loco Parentis" on ff net. I've often thought a father and an adult daughter kind of relationship between them would be an interesting dynamic to explore, for all that so many fanfic writers want to pair them up.

    At any rate, look forward to more soon. Is this story complete in draft and just being polished as it's posted? If you're writing this on the fly, I am even more impressed than before. But if you have got it set, I'm still highly impressed with the level of skill and craft and thoughtful planning here. Really outstanding.
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  • From Visitkarte on July 06, 2008
    Rate of damage 4, Nagini's bite 7 out of 10... Severus is a master of understatement. I feel so sorry for both Harry and Severus. They are both walking on eggshells around each other... and they feel the old wounds, now more than ever, I guess. And Neville was again just great. I'm happy he is finally working with his beloved plants. Duelling practise with Minerva... LOL! Just perfect, stiff and formal, but great, I guess.
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  • From ANON - whitehound on July 06, 2008
    Seven for surviving Nagini is probably reasonable, if you take a ten as "irretrievably dead" and eight and nine as varying degrees of permanent disability.

    On the whole, he's coping well, except that the sudden flashback/vomitting fit still bodes ill for any future relationship with Harry, because it shows he can be freaked without warning by a sudden reminder.

    I had a look at Bonds of Affection and must confess I didn't like it much - it seemed to be a story where the characters' natures and the plot itself had been bent well out of shape to force them into the mould of the x-rated story you wanted to tell. But this one, so far, is really excellent - everything flows naturally from canon, once you make the AU tweak about Harry not properly dying when Tom killed him at the end of DH, and the characters are all very much *in* character. In this chapter I especially liked Snape still being willfully aggravating even when he was desperately sick, and the detail about his having done a decent initial job of healing on himself, and then neglecting to follow it up until he got an infection because he was too self-denying or too much of a macho idiot to seek help. This perfectly mirrors what must have happened in PS, when the Trio see him still with an oozy Cerberus-bite ten days after his encounter with Fluffy.
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  • From ANON - qwerty on July 06, 2008
    Oh man. That was SOOO good. Can't wait for the next one!
    Great job!!
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  • From ANON - Cara on July 06, 2008
    Wow...just wow. This is...EPIC!!!
    Really, without exaggerating, one of the deepest fanfics I've ever read!
    You sure are very talented!
    I'm looking forward to more...
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  • From Visitkarte on July 06, 2008
    That's a great job. Great story! This chapter was so great, it gave everything Severus deserved. I find it brilliant how he took the whole responsibility on his own shoulders, taking as much weight from Harry
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