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Reviews for Ashes of Armageddon

By : emilywaters

From riokali on April 24, 2009
amazing story...read it in one sitting.our detailing is amazingly realistic...i wish it was possible to publish this...but it is truly a snarry classic.
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From mrequecky on April 20, 2009
Wow, finished reading and toooootally loved and enjoyed the writing!
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From ANON - Elohyn on April 20, 2009
I like it, I really did, though there were a hell lot of typos in here, which usually totally scares me off (I'm not a native speaker and don't want to ruin my English by memorizing mistakes through reading them often).
You had some really new and interesting ideas in this stories und painted your charaters just beautifully. I especially liked Hugo and the reason for his name. Oh, and you've drawn a beautiful Neville.
Great job.

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From ANON - Layla on April 11, 2009
I love your storys and I did enjoy this one. I love how even though there was problems, they worked them out. It was sad in parts of it but like always it makes it more real than fantasy. I ould say more but what can you say when the story is over but thank you for a wonderful read and I will look for more of your stories and hopefully I will be able to review before the end of them.
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From ANON - loussi on March 25, 2009
Just like you asked after reading i am leaving a review, i really liked the story in the beginning i couldnt really undesrtand what's wrong with Harry seemed a bit strange to see him acting like that and read you repeating that the scene at king cross didn't happen i felt there was sthg i was missing when the idea of tom riddle's dust was revealed i was really impressed, it was really an original idea completely unexcpected but so logical if you really think about it especially the fear of certain people. After the king cross scene i really excpected an epilogue couldn't understand why we were continuing so i excpected problems but again you surprised me and the danger came from an unexcpected source again, Percy bashing really lovely i hate that guy. Anyway to sum it up i really loved your fic it's long, original, well written and i guess i will shut up now.
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From odogoddess on March 10, 2009
What an imaginative and comprehensive story. I love when a story piles on the angst and then fixes things to provide a happy (or at least hopeful) ending. Nicely done!
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From ANON - cs on February 24, 2009
Oh you really are..... I can't find words. You made me an emotional wreck, a weeping fool. Really, this is the first time for me to go find the third handkerchief while reading any fanfiction, and I started reading more than seven years! I can't even imagine how you managed to create a thing like this. I usually enjoy watching my beloved Sev's undergoing very hard passages and sacrifices,(I know I am not normal, but didn't JKR DESIGNED him as the character for THAT, really?) but this story was.... *starts weeping again* Nevertheless, such a catharsis!! The word 'great' can't even start to describe your work. Fantastically believable, concerning all circumstances and especially characters. I boldly assume that you studied about results of traumatized experience scientifically?
It seems I can't shape any intellectual nor respectful review now. You really deserve much better than this, but it is also you who reduced me to this state- I am still too much absorbed in this fic and can't tell reality from creativity. I only can say that I deeply appreciate all your creativity, effort, time and much more which you shared freely here. Hope the best luck with you, and please keep writing, anything I don't care, since it really will be a loss and waste if you quit with your skill like this.
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From ANON - Elsa on February 06, 2009
Great story! Thanks for writing and sharing - good luck with future ventures. (And I'm really glad Harry wasn't killed off like you were planing originally!)
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From ANON - xuxunette on February 04, 2009
...Lol, not enough space for the review apparently.

Anyway, there is not enough time for me to detail everything that I liked in this story.

Please keep on writing and thanks for this story, I am definitely going to read more of yours in the future.

Oh yeah, also, the kids were utterly adorable.

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From ANON - xuxunette on February 04, 2009
This story was delightful, touching, and satisfying - one of the best post DH Snarry I've read.

I have to say that at first, after scanning through the first chapters, I wasn't terribly convinced and, as much as I love anything bottom!snape, I almost gave up on it, expecting yet another cliche slavefic written by an author who doesn't seems to care enough to even make an attempt at disguising the underlying BDSM fantasy by making the relationship at least somewhat believable. The better than average writing and lack of excessively eye-roll inducing moments made me stick around, and I'm very glad I did.

I discovered a story with an actual *gasp* plot, original and well thought out, with a compelling portrayal of characters, which sold the story to me and made me suspend disbelief.

The first thing that had me genuinely intrigued was your depiction of Harry's psychopathic behaviour, the abrupt mood shifts, and the fact that there was no moustache-twisting excess in Harry's evil, and this while you still managed to make him most definitely and guts-twistingdly cruel. Harry punishing Snape for touching the Order's photo was brilliant, and the way you described how it wasn't too hard for Snape to feign complacency, while at the same time not loosing his rebelliousness, because a part of him actually believed he merited the punishment, struck a chord with me.

By the time you had Snape write lines with the blood quill, I was utterly hooked and couldn't have stopped reading if I tried.

You can't be commended enough for not making Harry stick his prick into Snape right off the bat, for choosing to built the escalation in the abuses slowly, for making Harry's hate clear and cold. And you can't be thanked enough for not making Snape suddenly 'liking it' halfway through his rape when it did happen.

There are still things I didn't buy entirely, I still think Snape was too subdued during the branding ceremony at the very beginning, and I think that chapter feels very rushed, but the Riddle dust in Harry's mind is actually believable and an original idea, and the conspiracy very fun to read. Actually all the action/aventure/mystery elements were quite well done, which is very rare and treasurable in slash fics.

And when they started to work things out, it was just so good and satisfying, pushing all my buttons. The right amount of angst and h/c, but not in over cloying proportion. Though sometimes I felt annoyed with Harry being so careful and apologetic, but you subverted that nicely when you made Harry ask Snape if it irritated him. That gave me a chuckle, and upon reflection, I came to the mind that you are right in that Snape needed no less from Harry to be able to trust him.

My favourite moment has to be the parallel between the Cockarices (sp) and the Snarry relationship. And when Snape dropped to his knee for the first time:
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From Darkless on January 30, 2009
What an amazing and full story. Wonderful. And you completed it, in a way that the reader feels complete, not left wanting more. Kudos to you! If I had a nickel for every fanfic I've read that is never finished....

This story was well thought out, written, both in spelling, grammer and content (minus the occasional typo that happens even in published work with paid editors) and I don't feel like it was too long at all. The longer the story, the more time for character and plot development, like a banquet. A oneshot is at best drinks and appetizers. It's rare to find a 'chef' willing to go whole-hog and feed the mases, so thank you for sharing your imagination and talent with we starving readers. I have really enjoyed watching Harry and Severus' relationship go through its unique trials to their ultimate peace and family. Even better when you managed to keep everyone 'in character' to do it. Severus' inner monologue gave great insight to his mindset and logic to his actions. A brilliant piece of work; be Proud. *bows respectfully*
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From TenariRose on January 29, 2009
It's an awesome story, you're a really good author. Usually when I try to read a story this long I get bored half way though, but I didn't get bored with your story.
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From selfproclaimedbeauty05 on January 27, 2009
I really loved your story. I was very intrigued by it. I love the bond you formed between Severus and Harry. I really enjoyed it and now I have become a fan.
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From ANON - coffeewalnut on January 24, 2009
i've read your whole story and it is definitely one of its kind... and that's what makes it such a wonderful read! i mean even though there were so many new concepts being dealt with there was always a trueness in the characters' behaviours... they were inherently cannon, just dealing with different circumstances and situations... good work!
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From ANON - KP on January 21, 2009

I'm really enjoying this story and am on the edge of my seat with each new chapter. I particularly love the revelation that Severus thought he had the master wand and wanted to let Harry defeat him... so he would have the wand and perhaps not have to die. Very moving. And his feelings for Harry! Oh, oh, oh!

I'm getting a distinct "something external happened to Harry to change him" vibe from this story, which I respect, though sometimes those narratives seem like a cope out. I mean, if he gets really warped, it makes him seem so human. You seem to have a really nice balance between the two possibilities here. I look forward to reading more....
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