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Reviews for Ashes of Armageddon

By : emilywaters
  • From emilywaters on June 23, 2008
    Jean: (re: Forgotten) For the sake of this story, we can assume that Dumbledore's portrait was tight-lipped about the Plan, and did not tell other portraits about him asking Sev to kill him, or about harry being Horcrux, etc. while the war was still going on. Given how paranoid Dumbledore was (he wouldn't even give Severus the whole picture, even with his Occlumency skills), it's not entirely surprising. Then, once the war was over, he no longer remembered, oddly enough. But there's a good reason for it. Not a super-happy one, but a good one.
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  • From ANON - Jean Lamb on June 23, 2008
    But what about the other portraits? Surely they remember things...or have all the Headmaster and Headmistress portraits been Obliviated? (probably by Harry because they told him things he didn't want to hear).
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  • From emilywaters on June 23, 2008
    Hermione seems less than competent in this story. If she was able to keep Snape in a coma for five years, why was she unable to transfigure something else into a copy of Snape's body (and she would do the job all the way to the DNA, of course), have "Snape" die, and then spirit the real one out of Britain? Answer: Yeah, Hermione isn't perfect in this story. She doesn't have an answer to everything. Now, I am not sure how far along in the story are you, but there are tracking spells embedded into the slave-brand. The tracking spells will locate the "real snape". And additionally, punish him, for being outside of the household without owner's permission (quite severely).



    Yes, yes, the Slave Bond is really bad, but so is dying by torture by Harry's hand (and during this time Harry would have been getting worse and worse). Well yes. Everything's bad.

    And of course there are the portraits. Even if Harry doesn't believe Dumbledore's, there are other portraits in the Head office who would be able to testify to other things they heard that would back up Dumbledore. Yes, Albus kept the mostly deadly stuff away from them, but when he was a portrait himself, I'm sure there would have been discussions that the other portraits would have listened into. Would _all_ of them lie? Even Harry would find it hard to think so, though I expect he'd give it a shot. Once again, I'm not sure how far along in the story you are, but the portrait thing is complicated. See chapter "Forgotten".
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  • From ANON - Jean Lamb on June 23, 2008
    Chapter 16--well, given in canon Snape's name was clearly forgotten long before the Epilogue (Albus Severus had never heard it, and Harry had to _whisper_ the information to him away from the rest of the family), Snape's relatively quick death at Nagini's fangs begins to look better and better. It's not like anyone is really helping him.

    As for resisting Harry, the link I see (except for Neville) is that they've either worn the Horcrux, or come into other contact with Voldemort (Ginny, possessed by Tom Riddle). Neville is still a puzzlement, except perhaps _nearly_ being marked by Voldemort. Or perhaps Bella was close enough to Voldemort to affect Neville as a child, when his parents were nearly Crucio'd to death. Also, Neville spends a lot of time around plants, whose minds are also quite alien to most humans.
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  • From ANON - Jean Lamb on June 22, 2008
    Hermione seems less than competent in this story. If she was able to keep Snape in a coma for five years, why was she unable to transfigure something else into a copy of Snape's body (and she would do the job all the way to the DNA, of course), have "Snape" die, and then spirit the real one out of Britain? Yes, yes, the Slave Bond is really bad, but so is dying by torture by Harry's hand (and during this time Harry would have been getting worse and worse).

    And of course there are the portraits. Even if Harry doesn't believe Dumbledore's, there are other portraits in the Head office who would be able to testify to other things they heard that would back up Dumbledore. Yes, Albus kept the mostly deadly stuff away from them, but when he was a portrait himself, I'm sure there would have been discussions that the other portraits would have listened into. Would _all_ of them lie? Even Harry would find it hard to think so, though I expect he'd give it a shot.

    After all, the other portraits are not sworn to Albus any more, and can tell what he was up to. Still amazed Harry hasn't blamed the Dursleys on Snape yet...
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  • From Mizzfreestyle on June 22, 2008
    I find myself torn between utter amusement and pity for the agony Snape is subject to. Nevertheless, I love this story and I wish to see it through. Your writing is also smooth and allows enough detail for the reader to picture the scene before them. I also want to thank you for the frequent updates.
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  • From ANON - tribebohemian aka liz on June 22, 2008
    yeesh! aside from feeling my very insides twist and cringe at the content of this chapter, i thought it was artistically written. there was something ugly and poetic to see these young men who supposedly stood on the side of 'light', or whatever you want to call it, act in such a brutal and disgusting manner toward one they consider an enemy. it's so typical in war for soldiers to violate those on the other side simply because their being enemies justifies it for them somehow. it's like lee, oliver and george forgot that this is why they fought the deatheaters. and yet, they feel completely free to act in the same fashion. i'm hoping that george is only acting like this in order to get snape out of the house, though i wont bet the farm. heh. i'm more curious to see more about harry's mind control thing. keep up the good work. oh and if anyone gives you crap about the brutality of this chapter, kindly remind them that you gave quite an adequate warning at the top of the page. i say this because it's happened to me several times.
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  • From SoftObsidian74 on June 22, 2008
    Bravo Emily for handling such a serious and depraved scene so well. As sick as this was, it fits into the decline we see in Harry's mental state, his rapidly crumbling sense of morality, and his negative impact on those around him. All I can do for Sev now is weep. I was taken aback at Harry's reaction to George's discomfort, and at that point I realized how far gone our Harry really is. How can he ever be redeemed after this? Is it possible...or will this be your first truly dark fic? I'm here with you to the end nevertheless, and I can't wait to see where you go from here.
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  • From ANON - Vivi A.K.A wicca2star11 on June 22, 2008
    OMG!!! This fic is AMAZING! T_T whats gouing to happen to poor Severus!? Cant wait to see the new chapter. Im biting my fingers in waiting! keep writing wonderfully
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  • From Leentjef on June 22, 2008
    wow post soon
    bye bye
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  • From Visitkarte on June 22, 2008
    This doesn't bode well.... Not at all. And: Anything? Shudder!
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  • From Yocum1219 on June 22, 2008
    I love this...it's absolutely amazing. I enjoy Dark Harry on occasion, as long as it's well written, and I have to say this qualifies in abundance! I've joined the update group, so I can't wait for more! :-D
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  • From SoftObsidian74 on June 22, 2008
    Wow...it's getting DARK in here...I can't see...I'm scared. For everyone. What is Neville off to do? I hope it doesn't make things worse...Poor Hermione. Level 10 wards? Harry's flipped! I'm almost afraid to see what's on the horizon...but bring it on....the darkness that is...
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  • From ANON - LadyJayVee on June 22, 2008
    I finally got on to my computer and caught up with your ummm...disturbing story and I loved every word. I do have a strange request (it probably to late to ask) don't have Severus 'enjoy' being raped by Harry. Him enjoying 'it' would be just to horrible. Somewhere I must have missed the reason why Severus can't kill himself could explain it to me? So Harry has become totally dark and there is no sign of the 'old' Harry left, the one that might be feeling badly about his actions? It sound sort of sick but I'm looking forward to the rape. I'm one sick puppy. Thanks for a wonderful story.
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  • From Ellanath on June 22, 2008
    You, my dear, are quite the story teller.
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