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By : ilke

From scarletwitchextreme on September 11, 2008
*clears throat*...sigh...shakes head, you evil, evil person u, u, yeah i am sure photoshop can help depict my sentiments, and as for the warning tags being for us and not the characters, *screams like a banshee*, whatever!!! Anyway i hope u do let them give into those tags because Merlin help me, I am salivating at just the thought of hermione in those situations in this particular masterpiece, there wont be anything else like it. But u vile, loathsome, evil, little.....u are gonna pile so much tension again into our bodies and then release us when the master tells us we can come. BDSM indeed.
Anyway onto the chappy, and lo and behold u turned her into a frigid little bint just as cold as the snow around her in just one sentence, and although she said it and she felt wrong immediately, it still was low especially from her, and the fact that he actually admitted how many girls he slept with and who they were just thumped me into silence, it was a heck off a way to handle her statement. But she changed her attitude towards him right on spot and she was attentive and supportive to him especially about the auror situation, and the gift and her speech was beautiful. And what surprised me was the way her body and mind responded to him from the slight touches and chaste kiss on the cheeks, and he knew it. *clears throat* this was the tension I was refering to,, the swet, sweet tension, the walk to the headmasters office was perilous, and the braking of draco's control when he carressed her on the steps (my heart stopped and I forgot to breathe) and she reponded was explosive and it was just one touch, and they almost forgot where they going, and she didnt answer him, y. The moment she ran through those doors her resistance towards him gonna go back up and its gonna be tougher isn't it....sigh.
I cant say anymore or beg any more and I know my position as u willing slave is i am supposed to beg in order to get rewards from my master, well.....NO...no more beggin, I will die soon, if u dont release me.

UPDATE SOON MASTER
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From Tootsie on September 11, 2008
Damn it! the staircase too short!!

When I read,I hold my breath all time! Want they touch each other in everywhere.
And yeah so glad (^_^ Draco know Hermione want him. They want the same thing and I want too hahaha.
Can
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From LittleMissPrincess on September 11, 2008
:)
I get very excited when I see you've updated
I actually jumped up and down in my seat, clapping my hands this time, haha

I love how you're expressing Draco's feelings, he knows he shouldn't but he can't stay away. That little bit on the staircase was golden, they both wanted it. But also frustrating, because straight after it ended, lol

I can't wait until the next chapter!

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From ANON - JKRsunkmyship on September 11, 2008
Wonderful job! I've had a very long day, and this was the perfect thing to end it with!!! Well... technically, it's already tomorrow, but you get the picture. As much as I want them to get on with it already, wonderful job working them out of the little position at the beginning of this chapter. It's so nice having them alone now for the holidays.... I wonder how the dynamics will change when everyone comes back from break?

Absolutely fabulous end there! Goodness, I'm dying for more!

*will continue to check obsessively*
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From Scarybearhair on September 11, 2008
Chapter 2

Wow, I love all these little details you add, like the visceral description of Draco remembering Hermione holding him and the beautiful description of the handkerchief Poor Draco has no one really that cares about him, even Pansy doesn
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From Amaya1015 on September 11, 2008
You really had me on the staircase part. i finally notice i had to exhale when it ended. ohh i so want them to hurry up nd get it over with, but i also love the waiting and inticipating. u really nailed this chapt.
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From Eilisbelle on September 10, 2008
good chapter!!! Can't wait to see what happens next!!
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From ANON - crescentmoon on September 10, 2008
I love this story. i love how they're falling in love but fighting it. I can't wait to see love win. :D

Great work!
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From ANON - Anon on September 10, 2008
Book 2 is where I get to know what's going on with the story without having to deal with these darn cliffies. And I'm sure I can convince the twins (Fred lives on in my head) to give me a discount. ;) LMAO And I think that if you continue to write such wonderful chapters then I will happily endeavour to keep you laughing. Do we have an accord? :)

Arghhhh, I want to shake the pair of them and tell them to snap out of whatever's going on in their heads and just get on with it. I guess I forget sometimes that one thinks of things differently as an adult then one does as a teen yet to experience and understand things better. She shouldn't be jealous of his experiences, that's part of the reason she approached him in the first place. And he should have realised that she wanted to be someone special to him even if she hasn't realised it herself yet. LOL I'm being too hard on them, I know BUT arghhhhhhh just the same. LOL And why does desire rear it's naughty head at the most inconvenient times? On the steps to Dumbledore's office indeed!!!
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From ANON - ochit on September 10, 2008
Love this chapter! love the way you wrote in detail every thoughts and feelings that the two felt. And i felt them, too very strongly!!!! Cant wait for the next one!
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From ANON - janl on September 10, 2008
Yes...Damn it!!! I've been reading along, enjoying this - always happy for an update. The tension at the end of that chapter was SO palpable! Good job!
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From Breenieweenie on September 10, 2008
I did check out the smutastic awards and i was like a little child on christmas morning. fantastic! I feel for Draco and i completely love this passion between them and their vulnerability towards each other. amazing!
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From kismet510 on September 10, 2008
Ok. You need to write more. Now. :)
Seriously, you can't leave us hanging like this. lol
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From distinctlyME on September 10, 2008
Don't you love mushy moments? *sigh* I loves it too!!!
OKAY that is uber uber super totally cute, even though you're right it didn't make any sense. But in it's nonsensical state, it was utterly romantic. My fiancee isn't romantic at all. He doesn't know how to pick up on romantic moments, and certainly doesn't know how to create them. And he has tried really hard. Which in and of itself, is sweet enough to mush me. But this Valentine's Day he nailed it. We're both very poor, being in school at the time, and decided to do something low key, and not exchange gifts. So I was feeling pretty low, never having actually had a movie moment v-day before, when he walks out of our bedroom calling my name. So I go to him, and on our door is a post-it that says '51 reason why I love you', and I'm totally confused. But then he opens the door, and every single one of our walls is littered in post-its, all with reasons why he loves me. I totally cried. It was hands down, the flat out most beautiful thing anyone has ever done for me. Needless to say I got my movie moment Valentines Day. haha

Anyways enough with my mushies, onto my review.

Wow...wow. I LOVED the internal struggle your showing in Hermione. It's just so accurate. When you think a guy is bad for you, you don't want to relent, and you literally go through that inner turmoil. It was fabulous. Although I must admit, even though I love that she won't give in and that this will go slow, it's sad knowing and seeing the signs that she is falling in love with him and having her play it off as sexual. It kind of makes my heart break, because with that reasoning I know somewhere down the line she'll break Draco's heart. Draco is a character desperate for love, unconditional love. With his Mother gone, he's lost that, and with Hermione he thinks he'll never have it. So if she relents sexually, and keeps this friendship act up, his need will grow and he'll mistake it all. Even the most intelligent people fall victim to the game of love.
However, though I say it's sad now, I know if it does indeed go that way it will be amazing for the story.

I think what I love most about your story, besides your ability to display emotions so brilliantly, is that in most fan fics everyone had Hermione fall first. Everyone always believes it will be Draco who denies it longer, who won't realize it. In yours, its the opposite. I love it!
I always believed it would be this way. Throughout all the HP books, you can tell that Draco is the way he is because of how he grew up, because of the lack of affection and love, and you can tell how he desperately seeks it through his attention from his peers. I always thought that he would be the one to fall prey to loves whims first.
Hermione is someone who would never see herself falling in love with the 'bad boy'. She thinks herself too practical and too intelligent to fall for that commonly known syndrome of "I can save the bad boy" she'd never allow herself to believe the love she does have for him right away. Just so you know, I think you did it right. haha

Oh Oh Oh!!! I would LOVEEEEE if you threw in a rainy scene. I would wait chapters upon chapters for it. haha Oh I hope you do. I would be on cloud 9 if there was a rainy scene. And then the mush would start all over again.

You know...rainy scenes are always the scenes where there's a climax and the person who see's clearly and who is knowingly in love gives the other an ultimatum, or makes them see clearly.
It totally happened that way in my relationship.
I think a rainy scene would be PERFECT!!! haha.

I eagerly await the next installment.
'Till next time. :)
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From ANON - Anon on September 10, 2008
As expected the hunting begins and it is exquisite.. Lourdes
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