Click Here!

  • 1

Reviews for A Werewolf\'s Love

By : VannyPegasusKetchum
  • From tanyaflorio on March 29, 2010
    PLEASE PLEASE FINISH THIS STOEY PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!
    Report Review

  • From angelnomiko on August 24, 2008
    ohh man .. poor mione she should tell snape what blaise did and where did draco go and why did he not look for her ... i hope mione dose not lose draco .. please please update soon ... later for now

    angel
    Report Review

  • From Snowe on August 22, 2008
    Please tell me this is a parody.
    Report Review

  • From mlui on July 05, 2008
    This is an interesting story so far. I'm not sure I like Hermione changing her looks for a guy, even if it's Draco. I mean, since Draco is bitten, shouldn't he have gone through a major attitude adjustment? He should understand being cast as an outsider. You've shone that, but then he requests her to change her looks...it's disheartening. Also, couldn't he at least tell Snape? If Snape favours Draco, then he'd help him brew Wolfsbane Potion for him. He helped Lupin even though Lupin wasn't a favourite person of his. I'm sure he can also use the Shrieking Shack. Hermione knows where it is and how to get in, she can show him. Why would Harry and Ron ask Ginny of all people of what's up with Hermione...especially Harry since he has the Marauder's Map. He can just stare at the map during his free time if he wants to find out what's going on with Hermione. But, please update!
    Report Review

  • From Wistfu1Stargazer on June 25, 2008
    Please, Please, Please, UPDATE soon!!!
    Report Review

  • From Wistfu1Stargazer on June 03, 2008
    Lovely story. Draco had better damn well appreciate Hermione changing for him! I can't wait to see their relationship become more lemony and passionate. Know what I mean?
    ;~D

    Keep up the good work. I'm looking forward to reading further installments!
    Report Review

  • From Utopia on May 31, 2008
    Two.

    Oooh, Dumbledore isn't dead! Yay, I do like the meddling old man.

    Was Draco more vegetarian than carnivore previously? Is that why his friends become suspicious?

    Blaise has far too much testosterone for his own good! lol.

    Hogwarts, like every school, is one giant game of Chinese whispers! A nice touch of reality in there.

    Hermione takes her usual role of mediator, as the voice of reason. I do like how you have her defend the 'unknown' werewolf.

    I don't know how many more reviews I can get in tonight, AFF doesn't always like it, but I do have something to say about all 12 chapters.

    x
    Report Review

  • From Utopia on May 31, 2008
    Right, home from work with a nice cold drink and a packet of chocolate cookies... time to read and review properly. I hope my previous review (about clothing) was informative not offensive. I don't like to upset people, so if I did, yell at me.

    I write stories for my fience too, he was a bit surprised to recieve a hand-written short story as a birthday present. Though he made me a promise that he'd take me to the tropical beach of the story and we'd hide away in the little cabin and make love in the sand... I might just write a few more stories in exotic locals if a promise is what I get!

    I think Draco as a werewolf has been done before, but not recently. But plots are recycled frequently, don't worry about it. You can do whatever you like with the characters!

    Your opening paragraph is like a fishing line with a big juicy worm on it! And trust me, I bit. It was so fast paced! You can feel Draco's panic! He's scared, he's confused - and it is reflected by the opening.

    You give the impression that Draco is more of a pet than a son, someone substandard and inferior to Lucius. Lucius gets painted in so many different lights - and I think yours is one of the nastiest yet! But it is so convincing!

    Poor Draco, its harsh when a teenager who was so confident cries themselves to sleep.

    Pansy is another one who has many different interpretations; and I like yours. She cares, she might be a bit of a madam, but her heart is in the right place.

    Why would Draco be preparing food for the guests? What happened to the house elves? Or is this further belittlement from Lucius?

    Crabbe and Goyle have the manners of pigs. With just a few words from their mouthes you paint a picture of arrogance.

    I wonder... who bit Draco?

    Your development of Draco has him very in tune with his emotions; he's not afraid to have a good cry, and all I want to do is cuddle him!

    Brilliant opening.

    Report Review

  • From Utopia on May 31, 2008
    Ok, a bit of constructive criticism. One biggie that's really grating at me is the lack of a school uniform. Thats one of the major differences between US and UK schools.

    In the UK, school uniforms are pretty much mandatory from four-years-old up to sixteen. I only didn't wear my school uniform at seventeen and eighteen because our sixthform (last 2 years of school, and non compulsory education - you can leave at sixteen - but those last two years are needed if you want to go to university) had a non-uniform policy. But there are schools who just give their sixthformers a different uniform to the rest of the school.

    Though, on school non-uniform days (which were once in a blue moon, we maybe had 3 in a year), we'd have been sent home from my school for dressing like Ginny and Hermione (and I saw people who were sent home for wearing skirts too short and tops that didn't cover much). We'd also have been handed makeup remover on the school gates for wearing eye makup like that - And my school wasn't particularly strict! Seriously, if you watch the first films (the grey uniforms), then my school were all Slytherins, without the capes! In fact, my school tie is hung on my room door at uni.

    But I'm a tad confused, in the beginning of the fic, you had Draco getting changed before he got on the train? If it is non-uniform, why was he changing? Can you clear that one up for us?

    But, as the students are in non-uniform is VERY non-cannon, and you may wish to point out at the start of the fic that the school clothing rules you are using are not book friendly. You could have readers get uppity about it with you.

    Though, Draco in leather trousers is a VERY nice image. But you might want to convert the dollars to galleons - as far as we know, a galleon is somewhere in the region of
    Report Review

  • From Utopia on May 31, 2008
    This is a cracker! And top notch for your first fic!

    My only minor complaint are the 'Americanisms' - the books are British, and the little USA phrases that crept in made me squirm just a little bit. But, don't get me wrong, they're no big deal, I'm a Brit, and Beta, and I do something called Brit-picking in the fics I edit (converting USA phrasing to UK)- its just one of those things I pick up on. IT IS NO SLUR ON YOUR PART, and please don't feel you have to change things if you don't want to do so. Most readers don't pick up on it unless you do something like (for example) having them eat pancakes at breakfast - in the UK, most have pancakes once a year (on pancake day), and not for breakfast! *and I've lost my trail of thought completely, don't worry, I do that a lot* Oh yes, as long as it isn't a huge non-UK thing, you're fine - but I thought I'd just point it out. It can sometimes p**s some readers off (apologies for the expletive), perhaps put up an opening warning that this hasn't been Brit-picked? Nobody can complain then.

    It is such a shame that I don't have the time right now to give each chapter an individual review (as I like to do) - but I will get back to you, ASAP, with the reviews and comments this is worthy of.

    Best wishes in your future writing! Keep going, you're doing great!
    Report Review

  • From bananasforyou on May 31, 2008
    poor draco and poor mione. i liked it though!
    Report Review

  • 1
T.O.S. | Content Guidelines | DMCA Info | F.A.Q. | Facebook | Tumblr | Abuse | Support | Contact | Donate

Click Here!