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Reviews for Shivering can mean more then one thing

By : JaceDamian23
  • From ArcticKitty on September 10, 2009
    Nice twist ending! :)
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on July 10, 2008
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From on June 13, 2008
    Woah. That story was pretty hot. A couple of comments:

    - As Nerys says, it's kind of confusing to make reference to Tom Riddle [Sr.], the one who's buried in the Little Hangleton cemetery, and then right afterwards to call Voldie "Tom Riddle" too. I also agree with Nerys that it seems odd to refer to the Death Eaters as "boys" and that Voldie is creepier when he's being smooth and subtle.
    - I wouldn't expect the Dark Lord to let anybody call him Tom Riddle; I'd think he'd demand to be called "my lord" or "master" or something of that sort.
    - According to HBP, Abraxas Malfoy [luvhp: Abraxas was Lucius's father, who knew Slughorn and whose name Draco drops in their first potions lesson with Slughorn] died of dragon pox. I think it was also at least strongly suggested (in the chapter "The Slug Club") that Blaise Zabini's father is dead too. (His mother was widowed a bunch of times, and each of her husbands left her a lot of money; I thought the implication was that she had murdered them.)
    - I would have liked to see Bellatrix at this little orgy. (She always acts like she has a crush on Voldemort: even in front of her husband!)
    - I'm willing to offer my services as a Beta, if you'd like; as I said it's a hot story, but it could use a bit of proofreading.

    Anyway, thanks for this story. Keep up the good work! I'm going to check out your other stories now!
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  • From luvhp on June 12, 2008
    damn girl, you seriously know how to write the off the wall shit! lol.
    Here I was, thinking poor Hermione (wondering who Abraxes was? Draco/Lucius? Uncle?) and bam ,you turn it into a rape fantasy, you little tease you!
    Love your stuff.....
    Would LOVE to see an update to TLSLR! That is soooooooooooooo my favorite.
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  • From Nerys on June 04, 2008
    Hi,

    You asked for one, so I'll be frank I feel you have great potential in your writing. I liked your sentence structure and the way you described the scenery, fitting with the emotions. Especially the first paragraph is a winner, it draws you into the story and makes you want to read on.
    I also like the twist at the end. The fact that they were out fullfilling Hermione's rape fantasy was definitely unexpected; and it makes you reread the first piece in a whole new light. grins.

    I also like the way you address the reader personally during the story. Like the "where was she, you may ask?" It pulls you in too.

    Your Tom is also quite in character as I prefer him. Not some whimpy, crying creature, but a vicious, commanding snake as he should be. I don't think he would share though. And I don't see him as having any friends. Not even everybody's favourite Malfoys. But you made him more believable to me than most people out there do. Kudoos on that.
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