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By : Ms_Figg

From Ms_Figg on March 07, 2009
Daygonna: I didn't consider any of the comments as bashing. Actually, I thought they were well-thought out and presented the reasons why they feel as they do, and there was not one personal attack in the bunch which I appreciate. But you are right about this story taking a different tack than the usual, and I'm enjoying writing it because it's very challenging. Basically, I write what I enjoy reading so . . . :::shrugs::: that's the whole of it. But I respect the opinions of others and really consider them, hence my little foray into the world of psychopaths to see if I actually was writing one. I'm not. While Eileen is a bit of a devil, she doesn't have behavioral problems, she doesn't lie, she does have control and so forth. She is cunning and manipulative, but she's a Slytherin. So, according to the textbook definition of a psychopath, she doesn't fit the bill. I'm more of a psychopath than she is. lol. But thanks for the "holla" of support. It's appreciated. ***
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From ANON - Daygonna on March 07, 2009
You know what Ms_Figg? GOOD FOR YOU! I'm so glad you defended not only yourself but your characters. I believe most of these reviews are just stemming from the fact that this story is not going down the path that most Severus/Hermione stories do.

That, and also that the Elieen character is not some sweet and forgivable little girl. She makes perfect sense in the context of this story. SNAPE raised her. Snape, in any sense, doesn't easliy open himself up to forgiving and accepting others and I believe he would have raised his daughter to do the same.

And for god's sakes you really haven't even gotten that deep to Hermione's reaction so how can anyone really judge you on that? It just irked me that there were some serious reviews placed in here that just seem like a bashing. Not every Hermione and Snape story can be the same and I appauld you for trying something new and that many readers, myself included, enjoy.

So again, I bow to you standing up for the characters you've written and I hope you stick by it. In the words of my daughter, "YOU GO GIRL!"

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From Heidi191976 on March 07, 2009
A great chapter. I am glad that Eileen decided to help save Rose and actually talked to Hugo while she walked to her dorm. At least now she knows that Hugo can take care of himself. I look forward to the next chapter.
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From Ms_Figg on March 07, 2009
Niclare: Actually, I like Gryffindors but pretty much write from a Slytherin standpoint. I don't think they're right about Gryffindors and exaggerate that perception purposely. Slytherin always got the short end in the books after all. So I have fun with turning it around on Gryffindor.

As to Hermione's reaction, I wrote it that way because I believed she was just shocked to shit, and cought completely off-guard and was off her game. Now that she's had time to digest this, it could be their next meeting won't go so easily for Snape. Ten minutes in a waiting room isn't nearly enough time to come to terms with a situation of this magnitude. In my author notes for that chapter I stated that this was far from over.

And it is.
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From Ms_Figg on March 07, 2009
By the way, when I took the test, Eileen scored a 6. Personally, I scored a bit higher than she did. lolol.
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From Ms_Figg on March 07, 2009
Is Eileen Snape a Psychopath?

If you've read the reviews, you may have seen that Eileen has been described as psychopathic. To be honest, I didn't know if she was or not, but I really didn't think she was. So, I investigated exactly what a psychopath was and found this little test that is given to help identify a psychopath or psychopathic tendencies. I'm posting it here and you can rate Eileen yourself. I found her not to be one with my scores. Anyway, here's the test and some info.

The material thus covers two key aspects that help define the psychopath: selfish and unfeeling victimization of other people, and an unstable and antisocial lifestyle.
The twenty traits assessed by the PCL-R score are:

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From Astmara on March 07, 2009
Although I admit I admire your writing style, your imagination and the fact that you are probably the fastest writing author I know of, there is one thing that terribly irritates me in most of your stories, and it's one-sidedness. I haven't read all of your fanfictions, so it's possible I missed something, but as far as I know, you're the master of Gryffindor-bashing, and while that can be understandable in Severus, I personally think that a writer should be more open-minded than a bitter ex-spy willing to scorn some for what he admires in others. What I wanted to write of, however, was Hermione's reaction to Snape having a daughter. I agree that he is good with words, but the way she just let him walk all over her when, in truth, it was she who had more arguments in this discussion, was so un-hermionish that I simply couldn't not react to it. How could Hermione, who was always so passionate about things she believed in, who never backed down from an intellectual challenge, how could this Hermione not stand up for her right to know about having a daughter? She wasn't just some anonymous donor of a sperm bank, and I think she wouldn't have trouble coming up with arguments to counter Snape's. Especially considering that his accusations were just a way of turning her attention from the main issue, and had more to do with his furiousness at her behaviour in the Shrieking Shack than anything else.

Having said that, I will add that during my five years long adventure with fanfiction, you are only the second author who has managed to make me both angry and interested enough to react in such a way. Congratulations on that :D.
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From BarbossasBoots on March 07, 2009
I have to agree with Animeaddictanonymous. I'm a long time reader but this fic is really to extremes. I'm a long time reader also but I have to say this is the first fic of yours I've really not enjoyed all that much after the first chapter I reviewed. I don't know if I'll keep reading...Eileen is horrible. She has no morals, not even Slytherin ones. She's a psychopath.
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From Ms_Figg on March 07, 2009
Animeaddictanonymous: I'm pretty sure Snape has stolen plenty of fetuses in fanfic as a plot device. lol. I can't be the only one who came up with the idea. So, you think Eileen is a psychopath, eh? Well, she's dark and twisted, that's for certain. The characterizations give me plenty of room for growth and above all, understanding. Everyone has reasons for being the way they are, and there are people who can't let things go without help. I call this Snape Whiney!Snape. lol. He does need to be sorted out, but unless he interacts with others and confronts the truth of the situation, he's never going to get past it. Eileen had issues with her mother before she knew she wasn't her biological daughter, and Delores had issues too, before she found out she wasn't Eileen's mother. These were abandonment issues. Yes, Delores was used by Snape horribly, but that doesn't justify ignoring Eileen. Perhaps there are other reasons we'll find out later, something that might promote sympathy for Delores. This is really a story about growth and what's in the heart, at least, that's what I'm hoping it will be when it's all said and done. This is uncharted territory for me, and I'm just going to ride it out until the end, hoping there's some light there. Thank you for your thoughtful review.
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From Heidi191976 on March 07, 2009
Eileen is a really evil girl. I hope that Rose will be alright, if not I hope that Eileen will get into trouble for purposely making Rose get hurt. I think Eileen should have just listened to what Rose had to say instead of acting like she did. I look forward to the next chapter.
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From ANON - Animeaddictanonymous on March 07, 2009
Long time reader, some time reviewer. I've read your other OC fics and while the children in them tend to be selfish, a little cruel, and well human by and large, this one isn't. Snape raised a psychopath, pure and simple. She rationalizes all fault away from herself and those she cares about and places it on others. (See a few chapters back when she rationalizes away any feelings Delores should have over being used as a brood mare, or states that it's somehow Hermione's fault for any of this. That's called blaming the victim and while we can argue rape till the cows come home. I think theft of fetus is pretty cut and dried. I imagine with the many different things magic can do, that someone stealing a child from a woman still in the fetal stage is not new. As for the whole Delores confrontation, it wasn't that believeable and Eileen just came off as bitchy and over the top.)

I realize that Snape is antisocial to an extreme, but even he understood the need for reigning in his famous razor tongue from time to time, Eileen lacks the common sense to do that. She's rather spoiled in her actions and interactions with others.

I don't know. I just don't like these OCs that much, nor the characterizations of many of the main characters. Including Snape. With the trying to get on with his life and getting someone to love, you'd think he'd release some of the bitterness he holds onto. Not all, the man has gone through enough, but he seems overly 'didn't life treat me horribly' in this fic. I have a mental image of Snape sitting on the floor throwing his arms in the air crying, "Anything I do can be excused, because of what I've gone through!"

Hermione would do well to just wash her hands of this little girl. Especially with her latest actions concerning Rose. I understand wanting to lose the other girl, but putting her life in danger with a smirk on her face? She's disturbed. Don't know if that was your point, kudos if it was.
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From BarbossasBoots on March 07, 2009
Eileen is a bloody bitch. Could use a good keelhauling in my opinion. Hope she gets her due for her bitchiness. Snape himself isn't even that bad.
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From catysmom1028 on March 07, 2009
I like it. Please update soon.

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From ANON - Woot_Hoot on March 06, 2009
OOPS. You mixed elieen n rose in the first sentence.

esh elieen was abit harsh in this chap
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From TriniMinx on March 06, 2009
chpt-18
stupid hermione thinks too much.
snape and eileen are good :-) that makes me happy!
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