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Reviews for Miss Patil Takes a Holiday

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From ANON - SL on March 19, 2013
I feel the story is refreshing and sweet (in its own way). I enjoy the different take on Lucius Malfoy and the seldom-written Padama.

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From LadyZombie on December 13, 2009
Chapter 3 review.

I laughed at the cheesy romance novels that were written with Snape as a character and Padma's reaction it them. Love Amongst the Death Eaters...heh!

I say good for Lucius and what he did to the Punk. I liked the touch of what each of the variations of Lucius would have done. I felt bad that he felt he had to flee England. But we know that it works out in the end. ;)

I also like Finnegan's character. "It would have made less paperwork." Sigh. A cop is a cop is a cop. No matter where you are.

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From LadyZombie on December 13, 2009
Chapter 2 review.

I love how Lucius just can't help himself. He sabotages Ian's sermon with the Song of Solomon, annoys Draco's mother-in-law, feigns innocence about it all, wanks to Muggle pornography, and plays Monopoly with his grandsons and then expresses his admiration over getting beaten by Toby. It figures a Malfoy would enjoy Monopoly. I could almost see him sitting there, smiling innocently as if to say, "Moi?"

Poor Padma. Having to subject herself to Parvati and Justin must be torture. Parvati is a real piece of work! I do like how you wrote Padma's relationship with her Bapa. It's very sweet.

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From LadyZombie on December 12, 2009
I'm speechless. This was so fucking good ('scuse my language), it positively riveted me. It's not done, is it? At any rate, I plan to leave a review for each chapter. I actually owe you quite a few reviews for the Redemption series, Forgiveness, and Letters.

I just wanted drop this quick review upon finishing chapter 19.

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From LadyZombie on December 10, 2009
I meant to say that my last review was only for chapter 1. More to come as I devour the rest of the chapters.
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From LadyZombie on December 10, 2009
Right. Started in on this one now. It's strange reading Lucius this way, but it's a good strange. You've done a brilliant job of understatement. We're all familiar with the perceived arrogance of the Malfoys and therefore tend to take it at face value. But really, in a way, that same arrogance is like a curse that blocks them from their own genuine feelings.

At the end, you could see true regret with Narcissa even though it's been stunted by years of her lineage's assumed superiority. But, as with all upper crust society, it is quickly pushed down and replaced with the bred-in arrogance.

Kind of sad really. Although in Narcissa's case, she is so fundamentally narcisstic that she undoubtedly fails to recognize it.
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From ANON - RowanRhyse on July 29, 2009
What a roller-coaster ride! They are right that the course of true love never runs smoothly. I truly enjoyed this tale of Lucius' falling in love and courtship of Padma Patil. The humor, the crime drama, the character-driven angst were all well handled and blended together perfectly.

I found myself getting emotionally involved with the characters, feeling fear, outrage, pain and joy right along with them. You really dragged me into the story, because I just couldn't keep from clicking the "next chapter" button immediately I finished the page.

Well done! :) I look forward to you updates on your other tales, and I'll definitely be re-reading this story of the Slytherin Redemption ficverse.
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From Jilliane on May 06, 2009
(Chapter 19)

I really did love this story. I like Lucius in love, and I like Lucius as a father. With his twins, his and Padma's baby, and the more he asked if she minded, that's going to be one crowded house! Good thing Lucius does like it spicy, and with Padma and all those babies, life certainly won't be dull. A great ending to a great story.
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From ANON - zareenyn on March 20, 2009
Chapter 16

I know it's been a while, but real life got in the way of both my reading and reviewing. Sorry about that.

The dramatic nature of how Lucius found out about the baby really serves to give all involved a bit of punch, huh? There are so many things in life that deserve to be experienced in the most visceral way possible, and this is definitely why I enjoy good writing. I also giggled a bit at how Pradesh suddenly--and quite believably--morphed into Prudish...

Chapter 17

I've gotta say, this was possibly your heaviest expository chapter to date. At first it was hard going, but then the inherent humour of the situation took over. That bit about the Brownies was also inspired. Interestingly enough, Snape's time with Native Americans is also a believable leap. Given the OOC nature of a fanon Snape, his comfortable transition is not a bad thing at all.

Chapter 18

Is Miss Patil's Holiday coming to an end? If so, that explains why loose ends look like they're within a stone's throw of being tied. I would have enjoyed reading more if that is the case.
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From Happyappy on February 05, 2009
Oh my, quite a trip for everyone to America! Poor Dibby, I guess he is learning his lesson about meddeling the hard way. At least he will be going to home soil when the Snapes return. Narcissa, ughhhhhhh! I don't care if she sent Draco a nice letter (if you could call it nice. Oh, feel sorry for me, my heritage makes me do despicable things)she is still a horrible horible person. Will Mr. Malfoy take the children that she concieved deviously since after all they are still his. But what would that do to his and Padma's relationship, since she is also having his baby? Oh, I can't wait to read more to see exactly where you are going to take this.
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From LaBibliographe on February 05, 2009

Chapter 18: Everyone is assembled and now the Brownies may get the various problems untangled. And how delicious that Narcissa discovers her intimacies with the infant were broadcast all over the world. Tomas certainly has good taste in men if he sees Snape as sexy. And the American wood sprite obviously thought Lucius had possibilities (I agree).

Well! Narcissa has had an epiphany of sorts. She always expected Lucius to protect her from anything, but she didn
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From LaBibliographe on January 20, 2009
Chapter 17: Does this mean that Narcissa
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From ANON - zareenyn on January 15, 2009
I don't know why I didn't read chapter 15 before now. It's a great chapter that moves the story right along. I like how you haven't dropped any of the Patil family issues in light of the latest developments. All too often these threads are forgotten or disregarded. I believe that they are worth mining as well as proof of the minefields of family life. Your view of Narcissa--while it works for Miss Patil--is one that I usually choose to avoid. I know it happens with other couples, it seems weird to me that such a vapid and shallow woman as Narcissa could have ever have been paired with Lucius to anyone's satisfaction. Your Lucius is interesting, real, intelligent, and sexy.

Parvati is such a bitch to Padma. Not the kind of sister anyone ever wants, but all too often, the kind of sibling many are stuck with. It amazes me that parents express such clear preference for one child over the other--especially when the favoured child seems truly unworthy--but I know it happens. Just watch Maury--is it even still on?--or Jerry Springer for evidence of that.

Now on to chapter 16. One of the things I enjoyed here was Lucius's misnomer for Pradesh, Prudish. Growing up with an ethnic name, I'm not surprised anymore when someone does something like this. In any event, it is fun to see some of the "chips" falling where they may. I'm glad Lucius got to hear the news from Padma's own lips, albeit accidental knowledge. His shock is interesting, although I'd like to take a deeper peak into his heart in the aftermath of hearing the news.

Naming her baby Lumpkin, is an interesting choice. Where did you come up with it?

Oh, I am so glad to hear that Severus is coming back the plot, hopefully front and center, but let's see. Lucius has needed the succor that only a long-time intimate can offer. I hope that Sev as you write him will be the kind of person Lucius and Padma both need to move the story forward.

As ever, I am looking forward to the next installment. Great job.
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From Happyappy on January 05, 2009
Dibby, do your meddling! Narcissa's sins need brought out into the open, so that Mr. Malfoy can go and scoop up Miss Patil and carry her off into the sunset. Doesn't she think he is smart enough to add up the months though, or does she think that his condition would prevent him from knowing? I liked Severus's letter telling about what his family is up to. I do hope that Mr. Malfoy will drop in on him while in America. I would like to read about that reunion. Liked the cat fight. I do hope the other Patil girl got some bruises too! Now, I must go and vote.
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From LaBibliographe on January 04, 2009
Chapter 16: I hope Lucius and Snape reconnect. It sounds very promising. Snape has moved on. If Lucius can move on with Padma, it will be a wonderful day. I guess Dibby is going to get into trouble with Elf Mother again, isn
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