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Reviews for Escape to Love

By : saffron
  • From mlui on July 09, 2008
    Chapters 1-3: Hmm...Hermione giggles too much. Perhaps, you can vary the words and she might laugh or grin instead? Draco yelling at the TV like a lunatic is hilarious! The part with Harry is shocking! I mean, at least Hermione realizes it's a mistake, but Harry just keeps on hoping...which is BAD of him--especially because a) he's married and b) he has children. I hope Hermione will tell Narcissa that Draco is all right. If she thinks that her son is dead, it can lead her to an early grave! Wouldn't it've been better if as the day goes on, Hermione fakes knowledge that Draco escaped? For example, when she ran into Luna, she should've said something along the lines that she heard from Pansy that Draco escaped? I wonder if it's recorded that Hermione visited Draco the day before he escaped...I enjoyed reading this story so far and I hope you'll update again soon! =)

    I think the main things you need to work on in terms of grammar is punctuation. Most of the time, you don't seem to punctuate the dialogue and omit the much needed commas (,). You also mix up tenses--be careful about not reverting back and forth between present and past tenses.

    Missing punctuation in a dialouge, changes in brackets []:
    Draco looked confused.
    [new paragraph] Hermione gasped[,]
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  • From LilianaIsabellaSnape on July 09, 2008
    Amazing story so far! Draco is priceless! I love it! Can't wait to read more! Take you're time! Can't rush genius!!! ^^
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  • From Bellakuuipo on July 06, 2008
    This is awesome. keep up the good work.


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  • From Pyroangel198605 on July 01, 2008
    lol draco watching movies was great...laughing hystarically.
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  • From on July 01, 2008
    I just started reading & the story seems great! There are some grammatical errors, but you have a beta now. I hope you continue with this story - I really want to see where thing are going!
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  • From leValkyrie on July 01, 2008
    i soo totally loved the Lord of the Rings and laughed out loud with how you incorporated it into the story...i wonder what draco is going to get up to next onw that he's home alone again...hopefully there'll be some narcissa action soon and i luved the update...keep it going
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  • From ANON - Lexy Malfoy on July 01, 2008
    This chapter made me laugh my ass off. I love Draco's reactions to the movies and to the broom.
    Awesome chatper, hun. I can't wait for your next update. =D

    Keep it up!!!
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  • From starrynite45 on July 01, 2008
    haha, i really love it! laughing all the time...seems Draco is a bit hysterical after the Azkaban...anyway can't wait to see if Hermione got his "first born" really lol
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  • From soldiersgirl0709 on July 01, 2008
    Congratulations on the Beta! I think it will make a huge difference and make your story something for you to be really proud of!! I will keep watching for updates.


    Happy Writing!
    ~SG~
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  • From bananasforyou on June 30, 2008
    oh wow. more pleaseeee!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From soldiersgirl0709 on June 30, 2008
    Formatting is much better and easier to read. Im glad you took the advice as it was meant, as constructive criticism and not a flame. A beta will do wonders for your story. Its a good premise and can be a great story with some "cleaning" keep it up.


    Happy Writing!
    ~SG~
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  • From leValkyrie on June 30, 2008
    i laughed out loud literally when draco spotted the hippogriff and was like "buttcrack" hilarious! great update...i like this cooking, painting, kind of liberal arts side of hermione...hopefully she won't be portrayed as a complete and utter bookworm in your stories...i thought it was a great update totally loved the prison break now to see what draco does with his day...i think draco should get introduced to lord of the rings...
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  • From Pyroangel198605 on June 29, 2008
    Do you plan on explaining when pansy and her became friends? I was just wondering, Im curious about that one.
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  • From leValkyrie on June 29, 2008
    is she gonna break him out...hermione planning a prison break would be fucking awesome!! you have me intrigued please continue
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  • From starrynite45 on June 29, 2008
    hey, this is good beginning! can't wait for next chapter...keep updating soon
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