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By : Nerys

From ANON - Summer Leah on August 22, 2009
Well that last chappie was confusing, but I guess it was supposed to be. I LOVED the chapter where she submitted to LV; I assumed the dream was the one that the dark people send their apprentices, except that in that there are two paths, right? Anyways, very good, and I can't wait for an update!
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From ANON - evildolly on August 20, 2009
Devilish Dark Lord charm?! Yeah that about sums it up. ARGH!!! I need a lemon!!! And not the kind u put in a glass of iced tea! As always, dear Nerys, I must be impressed with the plots you come up with! Always original, dark, and funny. So you did like the young tom in 6? He was kinda creepy it just seemed his face was too soft. Not the little boy but the school age Tom. The mocking condescending tone he used was spot on, I will agree. Unfortunately I must leave and make dinner seeing as I have a thoroughly annoyed and hungry Dark Lord waiting for me to cook dinner. I told him he wouldnt have this problem if he'd stop running all the damn house elves off! Bah! Looking forward to next chapter! Ta-Ta!!

~evildolly~
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From IntegraHellsing on August 20, 2009
This is absolutly amazing! You have a knack for keeping everyone in character. I cant wait to read more!!!!
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From TriniMinx on August 19, 2009
Ooooooooooooh!
I love this! Update soon :)
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From ANON - alianne on August 18, 2009
brilliant. Your story is brilliant. I love it. I have to say I love your version of Rowling's world... the Keepers, the personalities of Tom, Gellert, Albus, Hermione, etc! I can't wait to read more about what Tom has up his sleeve and to see if and how Hermione will react to him! I hope she keeps him on his toes and isn't as easy "to take over and make his" as Tom thinks she is! Update soon!
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From ANON - cennaka on August 17, 2009
Very much looking forward to lemons in this next chapter! I'm doing my best to be patient, but I lost most of it back in 2003. Oh, and I thought He said she wouldn't have to worry about Him spying on her while she slept? Guess it doesn't count when the info is about Him, huh? Since Voldemort obviously has plans for her, I have a feeling Hermione will be taking some "field trips" this coming year. I do wonder how Voldemort will keep in contact with her cause I don't think He wants the council to know how much time/effort He is devoting to her. Maybe a modified book, it's not like that hasn't worked before for Him and Hermione always has a book with her it seems.

I found this link: http://mediumlarge.wordpress.com/2009/07/17/friday-july-17-2009-all-voldemort-edition/ I think you'll get a kick out of these comics (I like the list one). I am feeling better and I thank you for your concern (having a great story to read really helps). ;)
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From Wistfu1Stargazer on August 17, 2009
RE: chapter two

I love how Voldemort was so cock sure that Hermione wouldn't dare to steal from him the book that he had left within her reach--FOOL!
LOL
:p

I love the parallels that are drawn between Hermione and Voldemort--too funny that they are so very similar.
:D

I found it rather funny that Gellert Grindelwald would point out to Dumbledore that his tactics are as manipulative and could even be considered as evil as the Dark Lord's plans.

Well done--keep up the good work!
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From Wistfu1Stargazer on August 16, 2009
RE: chapter one

Mysteriously interesting and humorous first chapter.
:D

I can understand the confusion of being assigned to Voldemort, and the despair at the seemingly impossible task given to her--poor girl.

Well done--keep up the good work!
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From DracoLover69 on August 14, 2009
I absolutely loved it!!! I will wait patiently until the next chapter is posted. Don't worry.
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From ANON - professional_lurker on August 14, 2009
This story is amazingly great. I love the LV/HG ship probably because only clever people even attempt it and it makes for some /really/ interesting stories. Your characterizations of Tom and Hermione are great and the chemistry seems so natural (if only JK was willing, haha). Your Dumbledore is intriguing; the amount of scheming that takes place in his brain is nearly exhausting. I must say I find Grindelwald hilarious.
The way cannon is woven in so seamlessly is really something to congratulate yourself on. Looking forward to more Snape, Draco, and of course, LV/HG action (so basically more everything)... and be excited, you made a reviewer out of me :)

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From ANON - cennaka on August 13, 2009
ell, I didn't die from suspense, but I did go to the doctor yesterday and I have a life threatening condition, yay! I'm not reacting to the med side effects very well, so I'm glad for the quick updates while I'm home. I'll be fine with meds, so no worries!

Ha, I actually predicted something, huh? I do have a question: does Bella still have the hair she pulled out and will it turn back to Hermione's actual hair (polyjuice anyone)? I thought it was interesting that Voldemort made Hermione look like a Black. He sure likes making Bella jealous.

Dumbles is such an ass! I bet he's not sharing any of those spells with the rest of the Order; way to not help your compatriots dude!
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From DracoLover69 on August 13, 2009
I love it!!!!!!! Snape found out!!!!!!! Sexual tension!!!!! YAYYY!!!! MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!! gahhhh!!!!!!!
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From nonentity on August 13, 2009
Oh, you're sneaky. "The next step"? I would think Snape's discovering Hermione's alter ego would be a candidate, except you specify that Dumbledore might be able to tell if he looks at Hermione. I would guess sex but Hermione's underage and Voldemort looks like a snake (unless you rectifed that and I forgot) and authors like to mess with our heads. Also, we don't know if Draco, a candidate for the Council, has the power to stand up during bouts of Voldemort's power since he was squatting/hiding. Bella's a bit cartoonish, but decidedly entertaining and creepy. I love the idea that Voldemort simply moved the entire dungeons. The image of Snape grumpily standing in the middle of the blast with his arms folded is perfectly.
I hope you'll explain what the Order ploy was supposed to help Snape with.
re Chapter 13, I like that she feels guilty for giving Harry a hard time over not practicing Occlumency (sp?). Gellert's perpetual conniving ways are quite entertaining. Plus there were more committee rules, which is always fun. The highjacking of memories from other places was also amusing.
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From scarletwitchextreme on August 13, 2009
Chapter 14: OHHH!! This chapter was exciting with all that plot and magic. Voldemort was impressive and Dumbledore was a fool I love to hate and poor snape, one of these days I will read a fic where snape strangles a coniving dumbledore and comes out on top...sigh. And OMG what was that between our heroine and master villian, his displays of possessivenes and their intimate moment was shocking and gripping and so yummy...hahahha, squeeeeeeeee. I wonder what the hell is he up to by using bellatrix and what exactly he wants to show dumbledore, that hermione is falling for his power (I dont blame her, really I dont...simrks), does he already know about the dream/nightmare and using it to his advantage, Wht the hell is his plan. I laughing so hard at how she was trying to supress it, Poor horny girl! muahahahahaha. She has no defense if voldemort really tries to seduce her...and lord I was dissappointed that he hasnt found that sweet morsel of a memory/dream yet. sigh you killing me here. This is going so well and gosh I am so happy with and for this story and the fast updates...lol. Hope there is more soon, i am greedy for more. Keep up the amazing work nerys, and thank you for you brilliance.

Respect
Scarlet
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From scarletwitchextreme on August 13, 2009
Chapter 13: AGain evry memory invasion had me biting my nails in suspense of that revelation moment, and girl you can keep up the bloody suspense ARGHHH!!!!!!!!! And the chemistry and interaction between voldemort and hermione was so well done, and love how you build up your progression so perfectly and they dont overnight fall in fluffy love with each other *gags*, like that would ever happen its voldemort for carrying out loud and writers who sadly do that suck...lol. I also love the banter and arguements of intellect and frustration between them he is so snarky...lol. You really had me cracking up sometimes at his sarcastic humor. ANd of course the angst and the pushing each other button's to the extreme, and grindlewald presence had me very interested and excited to happen, mind you all this happened in her robe, and was actually shocked that voldemort let him crucio her, knowing him in that twisted mind of his she was his to crucio...lmao. She impresses me with her power, and that was one hell of a cliffy.
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