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By : Nerys

From scarletwitchextreme on August 13, 2009
hi nerys,
*Squeals hard and runs around the house*
You had me so excited at your response and the fact that I had 3 new chaps to read, i was in bliss and intoxication at the same time. I was so pleased that my review left so pleased and happy, thats my hopes and I do say the truth, You are the bomb and so are your stories. I laughed when i read you ended up on the floor, lol thats where I ended up after I read your first chapter and stayed there till 11, so I guess we were even...lol. I undersatnd your voldemort alot more now just from your review and chapter 12. I laughed so hard when you glared at me for remembering the yummiest scene in this fic so far...And I wonr go there yet but i was screaming when you said they werent done with Legilimency yet and that dun dun dun bit...lmao. i wait patiently master writer...NOT...lol. I can wait for the smut on their part but I just cant wait for his reaction and her mortification....muahahahahaha..clears throat, looks around innocently, smiles disarmingly

Chap 12: Your hermione is literally a tough nut to crack, she cane take a roughing up from that megalomanic we all love to hate. And agin the level of thought insight and adheration to the crux of the story is immense all the theories, work and research makes my head spin, you build a story so well and so deeply, I almost forget to care about the smut...lol. I love PWP very much, but adventures, substance, mystery and amazing story telling much better..lol and you do that for me. I was thoroughly impresssed with his review of her paper and her response to it, and her level of upholding his legilimency skills and his tortuing skills as well. He is careful with her in a way but still demanding and terrifing when ready letting us know just exactly who he is.
Most of his actions have me scratching my head like does he even realize what he is doing being worrisome, and demanding of her health and mind, little touches and especially being possessive of her to a level I dont neither of them realize yet and all that and it gets me wondering how deep does his plan run, I know he is doing some things on purpose and I itch to know what is his plan. And every pass he made into her mind had me squealing holding my breath hoping that its now he is going to find out...lol. But alas it wasnt in this chap, maybe next one...lol. And I love her weakened moments around him sometimes, that she tries to catch herself...lol. This is going so good.
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From ANON - cennaka on August 12, 2009
I love that your stories really get me thinking about the magic principles underpining everything. After thinking awhile, I realized that there is one spell that could get Hermione in trouble: Priori Incantatem. If (and very likely when) Dumbledore uses this on her wand, he will know about the Crucio and her combined efforts with Voldemort. Not that I doubt Our Lord but this could turn out badly for Him with Hermione and the Council.

Please update soon or the suspense might kill me!
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From DracoLover69 on August 12, 2009
Nice chapter... a bit of a cliff-hanger if I do say so myself. I think it's time to let Lord Voldemort use legilimency on Hermione and see Hermione and the handsome Tom Riddle at it.... This story is just screaming for more smut and action.
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From nonentity on August 11, 2009
I discovered this fic several days ago and it's brought me an absurd amount of joy. I like that there's no trace of romance or sexual attraction beyond Hermione's dream/nightmare (and teenage girls imagine themselves with all sorts of guys, so it's not a sign she's madly in love with Voldemort).

The introduction of minor amounts of physics keeps the fic interesting, and you avoid presenting aggravatingly elaborate theories or anything the reader can easily punch holes through. Your interpretation of each of the characters has been compatible with canon, even the minor ones like Tonks. I can easily see Tonks mouthing off about the "bitch" or Hermione focusing on her essay and forgetting her sufferings. I especially like your representation of a deeply thoughtful, impatient, vain Voldemort. Also, your back story gives a nice reason for why all the powerful wizards haven't managed to knock each others off yet. The assorted bylaws and rules are spot on, and you even throw in scary clowns. :-)

I think people avoid tackling Hermione/Voldemort mostly because the pairing is hard to do and requires quite a bit of thought. Fluffy Voldie/Hermione drabbles come off as delusional when there's no back story, and there's less room for a fuzzy reinterpretation of Voldemort, unlike the Malfoys.
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From DracoLover69 on August 10, 2009
hahaha... indeed, I believe our dear Hermione will be like Pavlov's dog and associate charming Lord Voldemort whenever she is thinking of numbers and letters.
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From ANON - heehee on August 08, 2009
glad u're writing a new story! cant wait to see voldy and hermy get steamy....yes mind in gutter- love ur story and ur fast updates! thanks for a new story!
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From ANON - cennaka on August 08, 2009
I love this story! I was so excited to see new chapters because there just isn't much love for Voldie ships.
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From marieve on August 08, 2009
I'm finally able to review your story, work has been kicking my ass! Anyways this chapter was brilliant as always! I thought it was soo funny when Hermione called the Dark Lord an energizer bunny on speed lmao!! I'm really enjoying the diversity in the relationship between Lord Voldemort and Hermione, he does encourage her because it helps him and then the next instant he doesn't put up with anything so he crucios her. Then Hermione on the other side pushes him and he looses his temper but unfortunatly for her, he learns more about her at the same time. She's kinda stuck right now and needs to try and keep herself one step ahead of the game. When she finally realised that he only encouraged her in a way to gain advantage of her and to help manipulate her, she remembers that he's the one that's after Harry, the manipulated Ginny..etc. She's in a very tricky situation, because on one hand she can learn ALOT from him but on the other what is that gonna cost her afterwards! I'm really enjoying your story :D, I had like 8 chapters to read or something like that so I was delighted :) I can't wait to see what happens next!
Oh! and another thing, I love how you stuck with the typical Draco caracter. He wants to be independant but he's not looking at the big picture..the fact that Voldemort is sending him on a suicide mission...he's only looking at the glory and power he would be getting if he is victorious. I liked the scene where Bella, Narcissa and Draco are speaking together, Narcissa is like the angel on his right shoulder and Bella is the devil on his left. Fabulous :) it just gives some more depth to the story!!
Anyways I'm really really really enjoying your story! Keep it up! :D
Cheers!
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From scarletwitchextreme on August 08, 2009
OMG nerys, you're a bloody genius with this pairing, OMG I just rea 1-11 chapters straight through and I am foaming at the mouth in shock, awe, excitement and wonder. It was so well written, and so beautifully put together and your plots are juswt so full of research and thoughtfulness and substance that makes my head spin. I love how u make sure for us not to forget just exactly who voldemort is and we remembered well when he cruicoed her in the last chapter, poor hermione, i was so scared for her, I am dying to know what voldemort was thinking when he did that. And the building of their unstable and unsure relationship, and I use that word loosely, and the idea of the secret keeper order, and tying it in so well with canon HBP. masterful.
I just wonder what exactly is he going to with hermione, and he is his plans for the girl, and come on do you really think we forget about the dream sex sequence that was bone and mind melting with his younger self. I was thinking that he would seen it in her mind when he was teaching her, and I refuse to believe that little matter is forgotten. I believe its going to haved large significance(sp) soon, and lord i want to get some answer to that whole fiasco as to what reall happened in that dream, because all that even though generated by her mind was monumental. Please keep up the amazing work that I could go on and on about.

Respect
Scarlet
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From DracoLover69 on August 07, 2009
Oh my goodness!! Thanks for mentioning me... it made my day! I was actually quite surprised by the speed of the updates. Impressive. And I had to laugh... A LOT... the sarcasm was brilliant!!!!!! More, more, more, please!!! I can't wait until Voldie and Hermes get it on.... it's gonna happen... I can feeeeel it.
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From DracoLover69 on August 07, 2009
God, I'm in love with this story. Update quickly!!! I just need to know how Voldie and Herms interact again. Thanksss!!!!
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From ANON - evildolly on July 27, 2009
As one of the pitchfork-weilding readers I must say I am relieved to see you back! Saw HBP at the Imax and it was terrific! Voldy thought they made his younger self too pussy but hey thats the Dark Lord for you. Hope to see another chapter soon! Take care!
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From marieve on July 27, 2009
OMG! Cliffie much?!!! Damnit I can't wait for the rest of this!! It's soo damn good!! I can't wait for the update!! Gah what's going to happen!!!!
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From angelnomiko on June 01, 2009
lol that was awsome .. please pleaseupdate this fic i would love to read more ... later for now

angel
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From MistressDragonFlame on April 18, 2009
Now this is utterly fascinating. I do hope you'll continue.
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