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Reviews for The Apprentice

By : Nerys

From ANON - Gakuhaitsu on May 06, 2011
Wow. Awesomeness. I've d/led this fic a while back, but I put this one on hold since I wanted to save something more lengthy (and guaranteed time-worthy)for a nice long one-shot reading day. I wasn't disappointed :)
Is it one of the Weasley's (Ginny?) in the bag or someone else from Hogwarts? Can't wait to see how the fight with Bellatrix will play out since Bella can't use her wand against Hermione. But there wasn't anything preventing physical violence was there? And we all know extremist Bella gets excited over physical torture too. Hm...
As with your other fics, I love the dark, evil and in-character Voldemort that you portrayed, and how Hermione (and her actions for the most part) is the only one that can amuse him, and constantly make him smirk. His severe mood changes create quite of tension, and this was expressed very clearly too (it put me on the edge, one minute loving, the other biting and sarcastic, and then purely masochistic) Loved the bit about Luna being one of the apprentices too, and how her uniqueness brings endless frustration upon others.
Update soon (along with Prisoner please);)
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From animenemo428 on April 13, 2011
At first i wasn't amazed by this story, ill admit, but the more i read, the more enamored i became. Please update as soon as you can. ^^
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From ktgymnastics on March 19, 2011
Wow this is an amazing story and I can't wait to read what happens next!
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From Popcornbandit on March 07, 2011
Took me a whole day straight of doing nothing else to read this story, and I must say so far its simply amazing. I really hope you update soon because its simply addictive.

Voldemort is such a sexy manbeast, although nobody seems to agree with me. "he has no nose! Hes bald! blah blah blah" I don't care I love him the way he is. Evil, sexy snakeman that he is! This story portrays him so very well. Evil, but with a dark sense of humor. Lucky lucky Hermione.

Once again please update soon,

Reine
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From HadesDaughter on March 06, 2011
Even though I've been following this story for what seems like years (it probably is actual years), I wanted to tell you how thoroughly I enjoy it. I've not found a lot of Hermione/Voldemort stories that are genuinely good but this one far exceeds them all. I first found this story through fanfiction . net but I have to say I enjoy this version much more. I like it when Voldemort is actually portrayed in the right sense and not some love sick fool, I couldn't imagine him that way. Hope to see an update soon!
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From Ilovetwilight18 on February 13, 2011
Very interesting, I cannot wait for more.
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From mrequecky on February 05, 2011
Finally caught up again and damn I want to see Hermione tear a new one into Bella :D
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From ANON - cosettex on January 29, 2011
fuck fuck fuck!!! How did I not read this piece of deliciousness before? Oh and the Weasleys walking in on them priceless! I cannot wait to hear their little "talk". Your smut muse is my goddess : O
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From ANON - Fleur K. on January 25, 2011
I just finished reading your story.....and I think I am in love. I too have been wondering what it is, exactly, that the Keepers are "keeping". Also.....who is that girl in the bag?! Since I am so addicted to your story, I think you should update asap :) By the way.....your Voldemort is way sexy. Seriously. *fans self* It makes it more believable when reading the interactions between Hermione and Voldemort.....more believable that Hermione would honestly feel pulled in so many directions about what she wants to do and what is the "right" thing to do. Anyway....update? Please? Tomorrow? In 5 minutes? :D
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From Ssserpensssotia on January 18, 2011
FUCK I AM DRUNK from 2 glasses of Gl
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From TheLadyMiya on January 18, 2011
Yeees, Hermione kicking Dolohov around, nice, nice :) That we like a lot! And hilarious that she uses the necklace to beat him down. Tihi.
But what's the deal with the general guy? Hm... will be interesting to see. I don't think he is innocent even a little bit. And I mean, that he has become nice, now. Obviously he isn't innocent. Wonder what will happen... oh, well, I guess that will become obvious.
Oooh, I can totally get Hermione being all horny for watching Voldemort cast spells. Sometimes when some of my teachers lecture in their best way.... eh... well, you know...
Hm, wonder whom Bella have captured there. A very dun dun duuuun ending. :) And I guess you don't have any more chapters in line? Sigh, oh, well. Good luck with the writing! This is getting very interesting! Toodles!
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From TheLadyMiya on January 18, 2011
Oboy, you are quick updating now! And of course I have to read this instead of rereading my Christianity note for the re-exam Friday. I mean, Voldemort/Hermione is the true god, so it would be blasphemy to read about another god when I could be reading this! Right?
Oooh, attacks on Hogwarts Professors... my, my, he is upping the odds aren't he, dear old Voldie-poo.
"she held her hands about ten centimetres apart" - I don't know if it's important, but doesn't brits count in inches and thumbs and whatnot? I know they measure heat the same way we do nowdays, but... oh, well, I know what ten cm means and wouldn't have known what inches meant really, but eh... just wondering if this was a conscious decision from you to use cm or if it just happened since that is what you are used to.
"Your parents are a Malcolm and Sharon Granger, both from Yorkshire?" - I really wish JK would just tell us the names of Hermione's parents. Every story I read, it's a different one... any reason why you choose these two names in this story? And would it be okay if I used them in Soul Mates? (I don't yet know if I'll use them more in the story, so far, I've only called them "mum and dad" but one never know... and I'm tried of making up new ones and Hugo and Rose just doesn't fit...)
Haha, oh, it's always so nice to kick people down using Monte Python. Did I tell you I used Astrid Lindgren's books to cross a theory of a religion studies-professor? Oh, the joy of popular culture.
Bah, I think Hermione is acting all childishly about her papers being change. I can totally understand that she is mad at Voldemort, but wanting the Ministry to "change the mistake"... surely she isn't that naive that Dumbledore has to point it out to her? Oh, well... I guess it's just some sort of need for her to not let Voldemort control her life, but still...
That foreword was very interesting to read. It fit well into JK's thought about censorship only makes to people who can really misuse it to want to read it more. Like in the fifth book when Hermione was so happy Umbridge forbade everyone to read Potter's interview. Tihi. And I totally agree. There will always be people who misuse knowledge, but just because a government or editor or something forbids it, doesn't mean the people can't get a hold of it anyway. There is always other ways. Sure, just ignoring it and letting it be doesn't always work either. Like when rock-music came back in the days and a lot of people wanted to forbid it because they thought it was dangerous from the teenagers (how come it's always "dangerous for children" that are the biggest reason to forbid or censor something?) and then it exploded anyway and just stopped being considered dangerous by most people ;) Tihi.
Hm... how much is 49 galleons? I know it's a lot. Like, Potter's wand cost 9 galleons and I have a vague memory of reading somewhere that it was like
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From TheLadyMiya on January 17, 2011
Okay, maybe it is because I just saw a hilarious sex-ed film on the telly, but this: "before drawing his wand and focusing on the yew wood between his fingers as he caressed it with his other hand in a contemplative manner." sounds sooooo naughty. Especially since you have used "wand" to describe Voldies cock before. And isn't he still naked from all the crazy sex with Hermione? ;)
"No, the darkness came from his robes as he squatted beside" - such a shame.. he is dressed... but when did he get dressed? *go back to last chapter* Noo... he didn't go dressed there either. One moment he was banging Hermione against the door and then he stopped in front of them... or was he dressed all the time, his robe just open? *Miya gets the feeling this isn't what she should be focusing on...*
However, I do think he would be even more intimidating if he were naked...
Alright, I admit, I just want him walking around naked all the time. Can you blame me?
Oh... I suddenly got a vision in my head of O'Neill and Voldemort naked together. Nooo, not in a gay-way, in a Voldemort-is-goa'uld and O'Neill is being interrogated... naked. I think that could sell, don't you?
Ah, mind back in the gutter where it belongs... No, wait. It never left. Silly me. But Voldemort isn't exactly helping, teasing Arthur like that. I have the feeling things will be veeeery awkward between Hermione, Arthur and Molly for some time after this. If they are allowed to remember that is... No, of course he isn't... how did I know that ;)
I never liked Molly. So I don't mind Voldemort threatening her and all her little babies. But it does give me a craving for mayonnaise for some reason. I think I'll go and buy some tomorrow after I've visited the eye-doctor. Yeah. *Miya - icecold*
Voldemort is so good to play on people's fear. Or, I mean, you are so good pointing out what their fears are. Both Hermione's and Molly's fears was spot on and they are acting very in character. And Voldemort as well, of course, for seeing their fears and using them to his advantage.
"This was bound to become beyond irritating, like pull your hair, nails over the blackboard, scratch your eyeballs out, and stick a hot poker up your arse kind of irritating." - yeah, that does sound irritating.
OHOH! The exceptions-conversation! I remember us talking about it ages ago! Nice!
OHOH! Luna! I had forgotten all about her! Did you get your inspiration to her in this story from Oma in Stargate? I just remembered... that thing Sha're's son says "the way to stop this evil is to deny it battle" or something, isn't that what Luna used in one of her test? Or am I completely forgetting this wrong now?
Haha, wouldn't it be fun if Hermione claimed her desire to be something like "I want to carry your child, you sexy beast". Tihi... I'd so love to see how he responds to that!
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From ANON - DalekStar on January 15, 2011
I am so thankful that I finally got to read this story. I just read Bittersweet and I started reading Apprentice three days ago and all I could think was about this story. I am more a Severus/Hermione shipper and I used have serious doubts about Voldemort being able to pull it off as an romantic partner (I love romance). Apprentice, however, made me understand the quality of this...match, if you want. The story is so vibrant and your Voldemort is like the best one I have ever read. There are so many unique facts and sides to this story that it truly made me change my view on this pairing. I am like addicted now. I am sooo looking forward to reading more!!!!

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From ANON - Morwen on January 15, 2011
I love your story!! The smuttiness is great and the plot is intriguing. Can't wait to see how it all works out!
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