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By : Nerys

From ANON - lucianne on January 16, 2010
I've been really enjoying this story, it's addicting, well written with a well thought out plot.

Wishing you great ideas for the future.
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From ANON - Lady Miya who is sitting on another computer. on January 15, 2010
Yay! New chapter! Just before bedtime as well, wiih!
HAHAHA! Like Voldemort has ever been innocent. That would be like calling snow hot. I love snow... Naw, is Draco turning into a good boy? Tsk, tsk. And Bella gets her memory altered. Perhaps Voldemort would consider making her forget to talk all together so she won't be able to speak of what she happens to see now and again? Oh, she is that trusted. Baah. Poor Draco, he is in for some pain. Mehe!
Haha, Gellert is causing a lot of panic!
Okay, something werid just happened and Luna was out of phase (that is sooo from Stargate! Or at least from the SF-industy. I've never heard that expression elsewhere) and Gellert saved her for some reason and then Natharia speaks parsel and in comes a basilisk. Hm... Weird. Oh, and now Luna is being tortured. Hm.... I'm wondering if this isn't a darling you should have killed. Or will it all be reviled in chapter 39 or something? :P I know you usually have some plan for everything you write, but sometimes I wonder if you need so many deatiles about so many things. Okay.. maybe I should follow my own advice on that but... well, you know ^^
Ugh... boys indeed...HAHA and Hermione is on a revenge mission. You are really managing to turn her dark slow and gracefully. And I'm sure Voldemort will react just like that when he discovers Hermione's grade. Mehe. Poor girl, not getting the highest mark in a ll subjects.
"And he hadn't even "slept" with Voldemort... well, for as far as she knew. Though, she supposed he had killed for the man, which in her opinion was worse than having sex with him." HAHA! Oh, I have actually read a story where Voldemort and Snape has sex, and Voldemort wanted to be the bottom. For some reason I don't think your Voldemort would like that ;) But I think I agree with Hermione.... killing for someone else is just... well, I think you should take responsibilites for your own actions. And I also think, from a moral standard, that it's completely wrong that the leaders doesn't fight their own battles in the western world. Baaah.
Naw, Hermione is feeling guilty first, but then she gives Harry no credit at all in fighting Voldemort. Hehe. But oh, well, she is right when it comes to skills of course... But it's fun to read it from Hermione's point of view. You really do meddle well with the real story :)
Haha, that about Voldemort and the pimpels made me laugh as well!
Really nice chapter. But now I'm starting to look forward to some Hermione/Voldemort action! Want to see what will happen between them :D Wiiih! Take care

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From risotto on January 12, 2010
was hoping for some juicy bits
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From risotto on January 12, 2010
was hoping for some juicy bits
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From ANON - browneyes2yu on January 12, 2010
I am really starting to hate LV and dislike Hermione....it seems she's so easily swayed by the darkness (LV, to be precise) and doesn't care that much about Light, Order, Harry, etc. I don't know....I kind of thought that to be fair (even if Snape's not really fair) and knowing that Snape's the spy for the Order, Hermione would actually DO something to save/protect/something him. I actually like your Gellert and Albus and Mei-Li. And really, this is the only chapter so far that's elicited such strong negative response from me, I really loved the rest of it. Will keep reading more and hope that I'll feel differently about Hermione and possible LV, because right now I sort of despise Hermione (all her 'powerful' magic seems to be contrived and at dispense and manipulation of LV and for a powerful witch she's awfully easily swayed and most of the time seems to not even attempt to resist him....except in S/D scene of course, where she gets pleasure from the punishment for insubordination) and LV..well, he's supposed to be utterly evil, ain't he? so I really had no 'good' expectations for/of him.
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From ANON - Yummydraco on January 05, 2010
Hello...I have never reviewed a story before but I have read alot of yours. I don't have a creative bone in my body so I don't write any stories so I feel weird reviewing them. I really loved Masters of Manipulation. I just wanted to share something that everyone else thought was funny. On Septemeber 27th 2009 I was in the hospital in labor with my daughter Emily. I had been so in pain and my mom had brought her laptop. I stole it and greedly looked up anything to do with LV/HG pairing. I had been without internet for a few months. I found this story and happily read it while in labor. I had no meds but while reading my favorite pairing I was okay. The nurse came in to check me and was crowning while reading. Two pushes later my daughter was born. I guess I just wanted to thank you for bringing relief to one of the hardest things I have ever done. Please forgive mistakes...typing while feeding is alittle tricky.
Becky
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From ANON - the-quiet-girl on January 03, 2010
because I'm not too bright, it has taken me this long to figure out how to review on this site, so now I'm able to say what I've been thinking ever since I got hooked by your beautiful style:

I love your stories, to date I've not found another writer in the rather bizarre world that is the Harry Potter fandom that writes like you do. The intensity with which you create life into these characters always makes me impatient at the end of each chapter to see what happens next, and being a confirmed book worm that is something I highly value in my reading - in short I've been rather wordy in telling you that I love your stuff!

And lastly, your take on the character of tom/lv - the way you capture this character, is the main reasons i fell for this fandom ;)

cheers,

E.
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From ANON - tropicalilith on January 02, 2010
I'm enjoying this story SOOO MUUUCH!!! I haven't been this excited about one in a long time, good work, really. I particularly love how you portray Gellert, its so funny. All in all, is a witty, fun and complex story, including the lemons.
I can't wait for the next chapter. Happy 2010!
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From ANON - firewall on January 01, 2010
There I'm caught up and just have a couple of things to share. First I was struck by the argument Gellard made re Severus' wand being "buried alive" with the dead wizard. It was something I hadn't thought about...where would a wand go when the wizard they chose died? Impressive.

The other thing that I have enjoyed from the beginning of your story has been the wry and sarcastic tone of Hermione's inner thoughts. It seldom fails to amuse me when I read a chapter. Nicely done.
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From ANON - firewall on January 01, 2010
I know I'm not signed in but I'm too lazy to right now. When I saw you had updated I was relieved that you had not abandoned this story. I can accept RL and illness and hope that both do not deter you from future updates. Now I must go and enjoy reading two new chapters. A lovely new year's treat. :)
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From ANON - XellamyBB on January 01, 2010
Loved it (even though the differences between FF.net and this were small) :D I don't have anything interesting or new to say, apart from I will be waiting for the next update :D
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From TheLadyMiya on December 31, 2009
Yay! Another chapter! And I was sooo bored :)
hehe, such interesting books. I wonder what Dumbledore will say.. oh, he didn't seem to bothered by it. Oh, well. But no, Hermione doesn't strike me as the type to read romantic novells. Maybe in the bathroom when she find herself stuck for a while and her mother or something has left one there... or something like that.
Oh, how fun if Voldemort had picked up thoughts now and again about what Hermione are thinking. He probably has.
Mehe, Voldemort seemed to be able to protect Hermione quite well. Ooh, Dumbledore thinks she is wearing a horocrux! Is she? Haha, I just love how sarcastic she is! Yes, lets everyone try and kill Hermione! wiiih! Gah, why are Hermione so surprised Dumbledore used a dark spell? he isn't a saint...
Oh, what an interesting form of Occlumency. I wonder how Voldemort will react when he realise what Hermione has learned. Hehe.
Hm... that is an interesting conversation between Dumby and Ljudmila. What are they keeping that make someone from the light be glad that at least the dark side is powerful? Hm... has to be something rather spectacular. Hm... the powers? Wilder?

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From TheLadyMiya on December 31, 2009
Okay, lets try again. For some reason firefox doesn't want to review. But this time I at least copied the review before I tried to send it so... oh, well. HELL! I left such a nice review and it all just disappeared! DAMN AFF really doesn't want people reviewing. Why do they have to make everything so insanely difficult? Oh, well... I said something about, haha, Hermione has spent too much time with Voldemort, using illegal curses like that. Hehe, and I can so relate to her feelings about wanting to be happy over something, but just not be able too... so annoying. Hmhm... and then I'm very curious to see what Dumbledore and Hermione will talk about. Guess there will be some Legilimency from Dumbledore's side? Oh, and does he know Hermione and Voldemort have been having sex? Hehe, can't wait to see his face when he finds out that.
Hehe... seems like Voldemort will get a chance to take over the Ministry now? Mehe
Oooh, and Gellert is looking handsome. Do I see some old-men-smut coming up? Haha, can't wait! I wonder if Voldemort will use that spell on himself? Hehe... good-looking Voldemort is always nice!
I'm so glad you updated! And just when I was done with my essay too! Wiiih! Such a nice treat! Hope you'll find the inspiration to update soon again! Take care and Happy New Year!
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From ANON - FA-AL on December 28, 2009
I have to admit I was reading both of your atemts of this story, here and at fanfiction.net I'm really impressed how you managed it to leave out parts of your storyline there and still tie all the knots together.

Awesome story, I cant wait to read on.
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From ANON - Anon on December 02, 2009
nerys...you know that you're awesome & that i love your work, right?
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