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Reviews for The Apprentice

By : Nerys

From ANON - Lora on November 30, 2009
I love this story! I check it all the time to see if you have updated (her at adultfan and fanfiction). I know that you have this thing called a life and I cant chain you to your computer so I can have daily updates *sigh* So from from one fan of hermione and voldemort to another you have one ass kicking story!

Thanks for giving me something worth reading!!

Mama Shireman
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From ANON - PurpleDungarees on November 29, 2009
Yay ^^ I think that this is a fantastic original story you've written, and I can't wait to read the rest (:
PurpleDungarees
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From QueenRuby on November 13, 2009
My roommate stumbled onto this story when it was being featured on the front area. Neither one of us read Hermione/Vlodemort stories and probably wouldn't have if she had realized it the beging what it was. But she thought the plot sounded intresting and didn't even look at the pairing so she read it. After listening to her go on and on about it for two days I read it. Your plot and story writing has made an impossable pairing more real then some of the others I have read. Please update soon as we would like to know what is going on. I know find my self not knowing if I want to see the Dark Lord dead or not. Your scary good. Oh and more Luna please. We love her driving her guid nuts.
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From ANON - Saff on November 01, 2009
I'm loving this story!!!
It's so different to other fics i've read, and the characters are really well done.
Why has the necklace turned black??
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From ANON - Elisa on October 25, 2009
Why hello, Nerys! I must say, you update too quickly for my lazy arse to review... Argh, scratch that. I didn't mean you shouldn't... Whatever.
So, after the opening-that-makes-so-much-sense, ahem, let's do that. Review.
Crap, now I can't forget how ssserpensssotia and you dedicated a WHOLE CHAPTER to review-craving. Magnificent.
You know, all the Occlumency thing was a bit... Not fair. I mean, poor Severus, having to keep his facade up and deal with malign Hermione as well. Though I loved this line "Quick note to self; never play poker with these two." Ha, poor Hermione! But... Serves her right, for being such a bitch to Snape.
And pray, THIS - "
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From ilvemusic21 on October 23, 2009
What the Hell is Dumbledoor thinking thats it he wasn't thinking. please keep going i love it
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From ANON - XellamyBB on October 23, 2009
Pfft. I've been a bad, lazy reviewer, *hits self*. Sorry, the moment i was gonna review this when the chapter came out someone sent me a link to a Very Potter Musical. And that distracted me for like the whole day. I cried with laughter. AAhh shit i'm being distracted again. See?

Anyway, i reaaaaallllllyyyyy enjoyed seeing the differences between this one and the ff.net one. I especially liked the whole Voldemort/Hermione/Nagini thing. The two ffs are so different - i mean, in the ff.net one she is still cringing when he touches her and in this one they are like making out without thinking about it etc. (which is totally awesome, btw :P)

Hm, as i said last time, i really can't wait until the possibly cringey trio moments after Hermione's stint as Voldie's sex buddy *cough* i mean... Apprentice *shifty eyes*.

I'm beginning to wonder what will happen when she goes back to Hogwarts?! Whatever it is, it will mean less LV/HG time inevitably, which does to make for hugs and puppies. Well, arguably it makes for more hugs and puppies, but seeing as i am reading this ff hugs and puppies is evidently not want i want to be reading. Oh well, i trust where ever you bring it. Update ASAP, the last update was quick smart and it deserves a round of applause. And not sarcastic applause either. The real deal.

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From ANON - cosettex on October 22, 2009
omg!! i loved it. The part with nagini was sweet, i loved how nice V was (by his standards. PLEASE UPDATe SOON! oh yeah, this made my day:

"Merlin, how she felt like taking a good swing at him. Alas, unlike with Draco, there was no good target in that face of his. Perhaps it was why he had disposed of his nose. Too many women had hit on it.

He sniggered.
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From TheLadyMiya on October 22, 2009
Mehe, see, that's what happend when you don't help your fellow evil keepers. They don't warn you either! Although, I'm not sure Sharashvati would help him anyway...

Voj, voj, voj, what is Dumbledore doing? Pandoras box? Sending Hermione through a door? Hm... this doesn't look good at all... and what naughty little enchantment have he put on the school? Tsk, tsk, tsk.

"Perhaps it was why he had disposed of his nose. Too many women had hit on it." Tihi... yeah, that wouldn't surprise me. However, it would surprise me if he had let those women get away with it. "manipulative word skills" gaaah! yeah, that is Voldemort alright. And also, my lover. Perhaps that is why I like having sex with him so much, he remindes me of Voldemort? Or well... maybe not that much... my lover haven't killed anyone... I think... ;) But oh, I think Hermione would want to have some sex with Voldemort under the imperio. I think she would find that most satisfing. Or am I just speaking about myself again? ;)

Oh, no, who could blame Nagini for wanting some snuggle-time with Hermione? Hehe, nice little snakey. And now Hermione and Voldemort are getting all cosy together :) Nice, nice. If only it was that simple to get rid of a phobia... sigh.
Oh no. They opened the door anyway. But now Voldemort is coming to the rescue! wiiih! I wonder what he will do... Okay, of course, try to kill everyone. Yeah, I really should have seen that one comming. Interesting conversation. I wonder how Voldemort will sneak into Hogwarts :)

HAHA! Gellert, you naughty boy. Steal a wand and destroy a prison. Good days work. Very good :) Well, maybe not for Albus, but this will give him something to do; chase after his former lover. You have to write a snogging scene between the two of them! Wiiih! Old men kissing :D I bet you'd be one of the first writers to do that.

AAA! Hermione is back at the burrow! well, this will prove very interesting... hum, hum, I wonder what she will tell her friends. Hehe... this will be very interesting indeed :) Good luck writing the next chapter! I'm looking forward to read it!
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From mrequecky on October 21, 2009
Absolutely loooved!!!
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From ilvemusic21 on October 17, 2009
Ha i knew it i knew it! Dumbledoor is a rotten bastard. update soon please i cant wait till Harry fines out want his headmaster did or is doing.
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From TriniMinx on October 16, 2009
Is she pregnant?
That's what I thought immediately when she said she didn't feel well.
Hmm...

Severus -- *sadness* Poor Sevvy-Pooh :(
I'm still a little confused as to a) how you killed him and b) if he's actually dead. I thought GG got in the way of the curse???

Anyway, update soon :)
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From ANON - Lady Miya (who is on another computer...) on October 15, 2009
Hm, interesting reaction to her touching him. Worse than I had thought. I wonder why he is acting like that. Well, as long as he doesn't mind to have sex with her, I'm happy :D Or well, I want to find out sometime why is like that, but still.
Is Dumbledore planning to go to Voldemort himself? Oooh, can he walk in on them having sex? Can he? Pretty please?
Yes, I do want Dumbledore to die of a heart-attack.
Oh, Hermione, Hermione, you studious little girl. Don't you see that he just want you to exhaust yourself so you will be too tried to pass his test the next day? Tsk, tsk.
Okay, one village-massacare, check, destroying Snape's summer-vacation, check. Boy, Voldemort is one busy little beever.
Haha, this is so sweet, Snape trying to bully Hermione. I*m imagine she managed to keep her giggle to herself... aaah, it almost work. Sneaky Snape :) Oh, and now Hermione is on payback :) Good girl, making up new memories to tease Snapey :) Mehe, Payback is a bitch. Good Hermione, turning his teeth all big.
OOoh, Voldemort was there... this is fun, fun, fun! Voldemort and Hermione together against Snape, mehe.
aaaah! I'm on pins and needles, really, but I just have to write that Voldemort is so, so evil! Talking about Lily in frong of Hermione like that... so evil and soooo him :P AAAAAAAAAH! Snape tired to kill him! And then... Gellert saved Snape and then there was this spell and BAM! Did Snape die? And then Voldemort helped Hermione and disappared and then Dumbeldore did something tricky and then there was this white wolf.... DAMNIT NERYS! I'm telling myself what happened but you are such a myserious little author. BOO! Miya want's to know what is going on! Tell me, tell me, tell me noooow! *throw herself at the floor, having a tauntrum*.

Okay.... Best line of the chapter; "Quick note to self; never play poker with these two." Mehe... I love your humour at the most serious moments. Just love it. It's like my dad said; humour is a way to survive all the horrors in this world. Good work.

And now all I can say is; GIVE ME ANOTHER CHAPTER!
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From TriniMinx on October 07, 2009
hehehe, so far, so good and awesome enough :)

It's interesting, I never thought of story like this before. Keep it up!
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From AoiMitsukai on October 04, 2009
Ugh...FINALLY got around to leaving a review :sighs: only a week off when I wanted to. Got to love midterms :rolls eyes: Ok...I'm going to skip over parts that I've technically reviewed (on FFNET because they're basically the same and I won't waste our time repeating myself). Ok, we start off with Hermione's lovely thoughts on just eliminating all of LV's followers, which the mental image I got of this was quite funny (lack of sleep probably caused this mental image). I must applaud Hermione here; it
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