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Reviews for Original Sin

By : amburnikole
  • From Ithilwen on August 09, 2008
    This is a cute story!

    I'm waiting for more!
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  • From chickaboo on July 31, 2008
    Sounds to me like mutual attraction is starting to form eh? lol Great update, I can't wait for more!!
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  • From MilleniumForever on July 28, 2008
    Oh MY BLOODY GOD! THat IMAGE!! (
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  • From chickaboo on July 26, 2008
    Okay I'm addicted! I can't wait to read more. And on a side note, I really like that you provide links to the images of the clothing and such. It's lots of fun....and it gave me an idea of what to ask for for my birthday next month...I love Jimmy's, actually it's more of an unhealthy addiction really, but hey, at least I'm not in denial right? LOL Hope you update again soon!!
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  • From Sylvyr on July 26, 2008
    First off, your links stretch the page HORRIBLY, you might want to get a tiny url or something for them, because its rather annoying having to scroll left and right for the pages.

    Also, whats this about hermione's baby? You may have wanted to clarify that a bit more while you were jumping back and forth. It took me a few moments to catch on, and this chapter could have used work, the idea is great, just the delivery needs some work.

    Other than that keep it up!
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  • From AlexandraMalfoy on July 26, 2008
    Oh yes, I can picture this: Lucius in that black shirt, jeans and open hair getting in his Maserati. Ohhhhhhhh, what a sight. And surprise: he can actually drive and likes it. This men never ceases to amaze me. How lovely. I really like the way you describe him and make him look more human and down to earth. If anyone can ever call Lucius down to earth that is. Anyway, I really want to see how the date is going. I wonder if they go to a stylish club where they rock the floor. Or will it be a romantic restaurant? Who knows.
    Oh and I like the idea of Beltane. Wouldn't it be sweet both of them together at Beltane, celebrating each other at the fire?
    I'm waiting for the update and hope you will post reallllllllyyyyyy sooooon!!!!!!
    LOL, Alex
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  • From Cintyber on July 26, 2008
    This is a great story.
    You may want to wrap the text of your links though as it is causing some format issues.
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  • From jessirose85 on July 26, 2008
    This was a great chapter...im glad you kept Draco with Astoria...more soon please? xxx
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  • From DuchessCullen on July 25, 2008
    I'm really lovin' this story! Please please please update! :)
    p.s.
    When do we get more info on the kids? I think LM should fall in love with her kids as well. (p.s.s. PLEASE no red headed kids!)
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  • From AlexandraMalfoy on July 25, 2008
    Oh lovely. How sweet of him that he chose the snake necklace for her. If that isn't a clue. And the Choos for 920 Dollars? My, why have I lost Lu's number? I looking forward to the next display of the new Hermoine! But is she really new I wonder? Okay she liked the little show in front of Harrod's, but is she already healed from Ron's insults? And the divorce? And is she ready for Lucius 'Sexgod' Malfoy? But maybe your Lucius is a bit more sensitive, insecure and awkward than in the other stories. That would be nice for a change. Whatever it will be I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
    LOL, Alex
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  • From AlexandraMalfoy on July 10, 2008
    Yes, Harrod's. Oh fantastic. Lucius taking the tube, who would have thought? This man is always good for a suprise, isn't he? I love that.
    I'm desperately waiting for the hair-make over. I just wonder what's next. Make up, cloth, jewels, shoes, ...
    It was a great beginning for the whole remodelling plot. You really keep us curious. It just seems that the story is flowing and progressing absolutely fine. It's a treat to read.
    However, I was not smart enough to find out who really keeps the kids. Is it both of them? Do they share custody? If they do, it is very clever for the story, cause it keeps the tension. I'm looking forward to the scene in which Lucius is meeting Hermoine's kids. That will be thrilling. Does he like small children? Or are they to noisy and wild for the gentleman?
    Please update really soon and make the chapter longer, will you?
    Thank you for the last 3 chappies and LOL, Alex
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  • From Larrabee on July 10, 2008
    I hate Molly Weasley with a passion. I don't know. She has always been my least favorite character, 2nd to Ginny. But I love how you have made her likeable. She doesn't hold the divorce against Hermione and they seem to have a friendship. I like it.

    I can't wait for more. But I think it might be good to add more background about their lives after the war. Like how many children? Names? Gender? etc.

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  • From Malfoysplaymate on July 10, 2008
    Great part! Can't wait for the next bit!
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  • From Tenar10r on July 10, 2008
    SQUEE! I just love this story
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  • From AlexandraMalfoy on July 07, 2008
    Hi Ambur, that was lovely. Oh, I can imagine what Lu is doing to Moine. Shopping with Lucius Malfoy? Oh, a dream comes true. I can't wait for that make over. And he only wants to do networking? Yeah, right. That's what he dreams about. He might not have detected himself, but he does not want Hermoine meeting other men. He will find out soon, I guess. Oh it will be delightful to read the next chapters. And Ron is a real prat! Sending her pics of the kids telling her she's a bad mother. Arsehole!
    By the way - is Moine keeping the kids or will they live with their bitchy father? And how will Lucius cope with her children? Happy patchwork-family? Oh, I'm waiting to see that.
    I'm sure you will have a lot in store for us. I can't wait for the update, it's getting exciting. Please update soon, soon, soon!!!!
    Thank you and LOL, Alex
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