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By : graballz

From gorgeousbowneyes on November 12, 2008
Hotness shower sex!!! I forgot you were a grammar Nazi ..... if you met me in real life, you would HATE the way I speak. My grammar is TERRIBLE. I've picked up from an English friend the saying 'oh that's heaps good' or 'that's well good' and I said it the other day to a friend of mine and she was like 'heaps good?? talk about bad grammar' and I was like .... uhhhh ..... yeah .... lol.

For some reason I avoid writing smut scenes a lot lately. I just don't have the inspiration to do so ... and when I know the story I'm writing needs one, I'm like *groan* such a chore. Weird. I don't even know why I don't like writing it, coz I definitely like reading it.... I don't know, maybe it's some kind of sense of 'propriety' or something that doesn't want to be crude or something ... all my sex scenes recently are more metaphoric than actual if you get what I mean.

Well, I better get back to that assignment that is due 2moz that I've only done a tiny bit of so far .... I'm so screwed.

Thanks for the distraction, it was a wonderful read! I'm actually hoping for some plotty advancements for the next chapter though, which is weird coz usually I'm more of a 'id rather read PWP than a plotty story' kind of person.
~gorgeousbowneye
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From thrnbrooke on November 11, 2008
Holy smoke!!! Sooo need chapter 10!!!
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From tas on November 10, 2008
Hey Grabby,
Another great chapter!!!! Love the smexy scene. Maybe it will inspire me to work on my own fics - lol.

~tas
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From vampirekisses on November 10, 2008
That was perfect! I love those two in the shower anyway, and there was a little fluff, which was just awesome.
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From MisstressNicole on November 05, 2008
1st: *le groan* and I think I have everytime I've heard that joke. Here's another for you. A teacher was taking attendance when she noticed three of her students missing. Not too long after she began her lesson did one of them walked in. Where were you she asked and the boy replied I was blowing bubbles. As time went on the other boys walked in and their replies were the same. The teacher sighed and went back to teaching. Soon a girl walked in. How may I help you asked the teacher. The girl replied: "Hi, I'm the new student, Bubbles."
2nd: I feel like I can't win for losing. I have a lot to catch up on with you and a lot to tell you.
3rd: I want to say I have no idea how I missed this great chapter but sadly enough I do. I was out of a computer for a while when both the desktop and the laptop bit the dust at nearly the same time. But I'm back and I'm ready for you to update. Pretty Please.

Nikki
PS:. I have a new number and phone because I couldn't hang on to one phone if my life depended on it. So I don't have any phone numbers, sniffle. Love you and hope to hear from you soon.
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From Roozette on October 18, 2008
You're back! Oh man I missed you! My life... has been hectic. I officially banned the month of September. As in throwing my calender away, unplugging my phone, not updating anything I'm writing... September SUCKED. It shall henceforth be referred to as That-Which-Must-Not-Be-Named. But it's October now! Yeahness! And you updated, so things are definately looking up!

I LIKED this scene! I told you it would be good to establish a sense of new family layered over his old one. It wasn't squicky at all. It was perfect! Wow, I'm really down with the exclamation points tonight, aren't I? Sorry about that.

But now I'm worried! Because they had fantastic sex here, are going to have fantastic sex in the next chapter, but after that... back to dealing with the Emoness. But it will be good, because having a happy day off to rest *cough* and recharge their batteries may be enough to help our boys get through this ordeal.

Kudos on the black belt love!
Roo
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From gorgeousbowneyes on October 18, 2008
ahhhh such a lovely sex scene!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! And I reckon you absolutely MUST write the dish it scene too!!! I'm not sure when you posted this chapter, I've been out of fanfiction for a while because I'm currently going through my LAST EXAMS FOR A VERY LONG TIME. lol. So I'm quite busy with everything going on atm, and haven't been checking on AFF as frequently as I used to. But it's Saturday, and surprisingly I had a Harry/Draco related dream last night so I decided this morning I would check up on how this story was going.

And boy did I like seeing an update there!! lol.

I get that you didn't want them to break up, that's cool. You're friend's relationship sounds like one of my friends. Her and her boyfriend have been dating on and off for a very long time, and he broke up with her once on christmas eve and I thought they were finally over for good this time, and while I was sad with her, I was happy that he was gone. Then he called her up like a week later, not wanting to get back together, but wanting some 'booty' so of course her being in love with him still, agreed and continued sleeping with him even though he was just using her. About a month later I had finally convinced her this was so not good for her, and she decided to move to Sydney with her uncle and uncle's bf as they moved down later that month. She was gone a week, when the guy called her back and said he missed her and loved her and please will he take her back coz he was being stupid and he misses her so much. So she came back to be with him again. They were together for a few months, then he cheated on her, they split for a while and then she forgave him and they got back together. Currently they're still together, but she recently cheated on him, which I was kind of like well fair enough he's done that to you enough times, and I also think it means she's getting over him and moving on soon... hopefully. *sigh* It's hard as well coz she's one of my best friends currently but back in the day, like about three years ago we 'dated' as young teenagers experimenting with sexuality and stuff and she basically broke my heart then, but we kept being friends. Since I've mostly realised I was being a stupid young teenager and had mixed up the feeling of good friends with something I thought was more than that, so it was easy to get over that once I realised it wasn't that kind of relationship. And on the issue of sexuality, I mostly lean towards straight, and currently have a boyfriend. Although he pisses me off a lot lately, he's always so negative, if I say something he takes the worst out of it and presumes different things .... I don't know if its working really.

Ok well, that's a lot of stuff about me and not much about your story lol. Although I can't really say much more for sex scenes than HOTTT. lol. And also that I'm glad they 'reconnected' in a sexual way after their .... well the easiest word for it is fight.... , I sometimes find that that can help just as much as talking in a relationship. And I just watched the Sex in the City Movie last night for the first time, and having re-read the last bit of the previous chapter, it reminded me of Carrie and Big(sp?) in her closet, with Draco and Harry lying down to sleep. If you've seen it you'll get what I mean, if not you should because it was so fucking fantastic, and this coming from someone who'd never watched any Sex in the City before in her life when it was a TV show.

Right, well, good luck with the next few chapters, I look forward to seeing more!!!
~gorgeousbowneyes
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From thrnbrooke on October 18, 2008
Oh that was beautiful!!! I sooo need chapter 9!!!
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From bananasforyou on October 17, 2008
i just love your sex scenes!
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From ANON - tas on October 17, 2008
Hey Grabby,
Great chapter - as always. lol. Liked the smex (read that somewhere 'smex' - like it. lol). Anyway, love shower chapters. Your dirty/clean joke was pretty lame, but it made me shake my head and say to myself - only Grabby?! lol. Haven't been much for writing lately myself so take your time with the P&S and Inches (duck as some of the readers glare in my direction lol). Who knows maybe that would get me writing again *shrugs*. Anyway, miss you and the rest of the Coven group. I'll read over our little chapters challenge sometime soon and send it back.

~tas
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From vampirekisses on October 17, 2008
The last chapters were positively BRILLLIANT! Just the perfect mix of everything I needed to make my day better. You have no idea how much I appreciate you for that. I about melted into a puddle of fangirl goo during the sex. Need I say...GUH! Hot and sweet. In short, perfect. You are truely talented!
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From vampirekisses on September 19, 2008
Those last two chapters-FANTASTIC! I was a bit worried for a while there about our boys. Brilliant writing!
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From Roozette on September 17, 2008
*big hug for Harry and Draco*

Ok, chapter breakdown: The Roo edition.

Hopsital scene: Intense. Man I felt bad for the boys. And I think you navigated it well. If you would have had the boys stay and listen to Arthur, it would have tweaked. But having Draco get up and leave and Harry follow him worked well. I don't think it would have been viable to handle that much emotional discord and remain together. Giving them time to escape and "lick their wounds" for lack of a better term, made it seem a bit more realistic. I think you should let the boys sleep in tomorrow. Maybe not even go to the hospital until after lunch if at all. Their relationship is shaky right now, but thankfully not broken.

Godric's Hollow: Very sweet. I love the fact that the nativs ebrace them. These are the people who erected the statue (which I always thought was a bit off, personally) and made the home into a monument of sorts. They live with a daily reminder of what could have been, and are therefore much more accepting of Harry and Draco. I like the townsfolk.

SO GLAD you are back love! I was getting worried! Glad my e-mail made you laugh, and yes I received your reply. When I heard the suspect was sighted I started clapping!

Loves!
Roo
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From tas on September 14, 2008
Hey stranger -- long time no see. lol. Liked your new chapter to 'Break'. Pretty ansty - which I like. Some fics can just be too sappy. It's nice to have some of the angst in there. Keep the readers reading, laughing, crying..... Will Arthur deny it? Does Molly know? How long are they staying? Is there a next installment in that crazy mind of yours already plotting away? lol. Anyway.... good chapter from a fellow Coven member, even though we've all went our separate ways it seems. *sighs*. Miss it sometimes.

~tas
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From gorgeousbowneyes on September 14, 2008
Hmm, I re-read chapter six like you said and it was probably a good idea because I'd forgotten a lot of what had happened. I still like the line where Harry just accidentally says Oh my god you did rape her, for some reason it stands out to me. I literally jumped up in my seat when I saw your story on the New Page, and my mental talk was like, OMG OMG OMG OMG YES YES YES YES lol.

But honestly? This chap did feel a little weird to me. I'm not sure exactly what it was either. I think it was that I felt like all they were doing was moving, just keep on moving, when it's something that should be still .... I'm not sure, I think what I'm saying is it was a little too fast paced. I don't know how that works out. But I did enjoy reading it all the same. I'm glad their relationship held on, but for me I felt like it should have torn apart for a bit ... but that's just coz I enjoy drama and situations where people are hurting just as much as the situations where they are in love.

And you're most welcome to pass the link on to my art etc. I don't tend to draw too much really, it's just an every now and then thing. I had a best friend when I was really young who was a brilliant artist and for some reason I always felt like I wasn't any good at it compared to her, and I think, us being young, she used to say things like its not as good as mine, etc. and it just made me not an enthusiastic artist. Which also compels me now to say ... it's not very good lol.

As for troubling study work, don't you just HATE it? I do. lol. Can't wait to be finished with it. It's too stressful for me, I'm just sooo over it. I'm glad you got through your final though! And as for leaving more than one review ... well you just might have to hack it alright? Jeez, what can I say, we just like talking to you way too much alright??? lol. jks

anyway! I'll talk to you later, hopefully when I put my next chapter up which should be soon, and then when you put your next chapter up, which I'm hoping is soon!! lol
much love,
~gorgeousbowneyes
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