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By : graballz

From thrnbrooke on September 14, 2008
You had me soooo scared! I soooo need chapter 8!!!
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From gorgeousbowneyes on September 03, 2008
Hey! I'm hoping everything's good with you, haven't seen an update in a while, so I thought I'd leave a msg to see how you're going. I'm really missing reading Break!! lol. ah well.

Also, I remember from Dance that you linked us to some youtube videos of dances from ... Dancing with the Stars? And I also saw that you had dance knowledge, and I'm a bit of a dancer myself, but I don't have any ballroom experience. But, you know the show So You Think You Can Dance? Well here in Australia we had our first season a little while back, and I felt like sharing what I thought was the best dance of the season with you, thought you might appreciate it. It's a waltz, but a fairly modern version I suppose. Link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ROTwJxow9Go . The guy, Rhys, was the runner up for the show, came so close to winning, and was my favourite. He's also highly gay and has been a drag queen lol. He also used to play an elf on a children's show here which has like singing and dancing and fairies and toadstools and things, which I'd actually seen before the show but totally didn't make the connection between the two until after the show and they mentioned it in an interview. But he's always stuck out to me coz in the initial audition stages they have a group audition thing, where they're grouped together with a few people, given a song, and they have like over night to chori something. Rhys was in a group that had all females except for him, so they did this thing where he was the ring leader and they were his puppets, but what really stood out, was that he wore stiletto boots and danced heaps good in a hip hop ish style in them!!! lol.

Well, thats about it from me, hope to see an update soon ish, but no pressure.
~gorgeousbowneyes
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From thrnbrooke on August 29, 2008
OMG!!! What a mess!!! And you nailed it! I sooo need chapter 7!!!
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From Roozette on August 19, 2008
OK, so I read your reviews. You know I always do! I agree that Harry and Draco should have sex in the bed! It wouldn't have to be squicky. It could be beautiful - Harry mixing his past life with his present. Making a home for himself. Something like that. But right now their emotions are too fragile. Draco needs to break, and they can have angry desperate sex in the supply closet or something and save the lovemaking for when they are home again. *grin*

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From Roozette on August 19, 2008
How the hell did I miss two chapters? *is confused* I check all the time! Ah well. I've found it now and am not letting go. *hugs story protectively*

I LIKE where you have them living. The little touches you invented were lovely. Absolutely lovely. Finding the hidden gift nearly broke me, because I do that all the time. The thought of my family finding little presents destined for them after I die made me run outside and hug my neighbor. Well, not literally. My neighbor is a creepy old man who likes my boobs. I tend to avoid him, actually. But I did call my daddy, so there's something.

Also, the scene in the hospital? Intense! Can just see the whole scene. Poor Mrs. Weasley all decrepit, Mr. Weasley all full of rightous fury, Ron and Draco going off, and harry's mind numbing realization of the actuality of rape. Poor Draco, learning that until that moment Harry hadn't completely believed him. Bet Harry feels bad NOW for ditching a vacation in the sun to go back to angst ridden London. *sticks out tongue at boys*

I'm dying to hear Arthur's excuse. And how could Ron have known and said NOTHING to Harry about it for all these years? He told Harry everything! Bastard.Update soon lovely :)

Loves!
Roo
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From gorgeousbowneyes on August 17, 2008
Link for my pic! http://gorgeousbowneyes.deviantart.com/art/Sexy-Draco-58991113 It's actually quite old these days. I've started learning animae drawing techniques - manga etc. so I've got heaps of other stuff I just can't be stuffed to upload. lol

For the chapter - my GOD I LOVED IT!!! I love angst, specially when I'm in the mood for it, and my gosh, I love argument scenes that get a little bit out of control, like too many people involved and sometimes with an audience, and doing things in public that they shouldn't be doing. Now, I know Draco is hurting, but that scene at the end there, absolutely perfect hun! I really felt for them and boy do I love it when they make a scene. And the Healer! I was happy that Arthur defended them, but it was rather out of the blue. Like yes I'd expect him to defend Harry, but I dno I just didn't think he'd be sooo violent. And Harry's comment. I was like OMG GASP. I wondered whether Molly knew or not, and was like I hope this isn't a shock for her espec now she's sick. But Ron's comment made me think he had told his family but twisted it to suit him instead of the truth.

Well that's about it for now, I gotta get to bed, great work once again!
~gorgeousbowneyes

PS I tried to post this two days ago but my internet fell out because the provider was having issues! Just as I was about to press review! So I saved a copy so I could post it when the net came back!
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From vampirekisses on August 14, 2008
Wow! So much drama. I wonder how Arthur is going to explain that. And I hope that Draco and Harry can iron themselves out. Draco's going through the wringer right now. He really needs to lean on Harry.
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From ANON - Nikki on August 14, 2008
I'm back again. For how long I don't know. I just wanted to stop by and tell you that I'm still hanging in there and reading. Take as long as you want to update. It's taking me forever and a day to read. *sighs dramatically* Life...

Love you and the angst is getting to me a bit. I'll have to go read something else you wrote that I love. Oooor, go back to HIYA.

Gotta run.

Nikki
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From thrnbrooke on August 07, 2008
OMG!!!! You sooo had me laughing! My family thought I was losing it! Gotta have chapter 6!!!
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From tas on August 06, 2008
I loved this chapter Grabby. Angsty, but not overly so I think. It helped that Draco was there to lighten it up. Loved the personal touches you added like the reading glasses and the books. The underwear bit made me smile, and totally agree. Could have found a pair of thong underwear in James drawer? lol. Or 'toys' in the parents nightstands....now that would be 'a not need to know about your parents' type of thing. lol. There so much more they could find on a personal level...like music, recipe books, photo albums, christmas ornaments, toys that Harry played with, and so on. Is Harry going to be keeping any of these things to take home with him? He should I think. Anyways....another great chapter...wish I had the motivation to get to my fics. lol. I read WAY too much. Just missed you on chat today, some day we'll click huh? hugs.
~tas
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From gorgeousbowneyes on August 06, 2008
And now I'm hogging your review space! I couldn't stop giggling all the way through reading the review you left for I Love My Boyfriend Two!!! Yes, payback is a bitch isn't it? lol. I *might* be able to fit in the shower scene, you like, read my mind or something. I didn't end up writing shower sex though. But I'm going to fit your scenario into it in a later scene just for you! lol.
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From gorgeousbowneyes on August 06, 2008
Lol thanks for your MANY reviews on I Love My Boyfriend! loved them. You should go check out the review I left that reviewer on her story after she reviewed me lol. I already told her all that :P
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From gorgeousbowneyes on August 06, 2008
YAY, an update! I was just finishing posting my NEW STORY (OH MY GOD ITS A MIRACLE THAT I'M WRITING AGAIN) and checking it out on the New page, and going oh yeh, I'm good! when what did I see but an update from this story and I was like, wow this night just keeps getting better and better! I get my mojo back and pump out like three chapters in one hit for this new story AND an update from Break!!!

I was wondering where they were going to sleep. I figured it would be weird for Harry to sleep in his dead parents room, but figured there really wasn't anywhere else in the house for them to sleep in. I was kinda like, well are they going to sleep in the same bed coz that would be even weirder, and then you answered my thoughts with the whole transfiguring a mattress. You're right, it would be squick factor for them to have sex on his dead parents bed, but not only that, I don't think Harry himself would even be able to perform in that kind of situation. I know I wouldn't want to sleep on that bed let alone make love, knowing that it belonged to my dead parents, were I Harry.

James' read panties ... I don't see it honestly. Not with him with Lily. But that's just me, right. Some people can so I'm all good with it. And the condoms ... I cracked up laughing. I thought that was the best thing they found in the whole room lol! Although Lily's gift was quite a good thing to find as well, very beautiful scene there.

And your welcome for the comments on DA, I know what it's like over there, very hard to get any kind of reviews whatsoever because it's not as well designed I don't think. You should check out a drawing I did of Draco off of a picture that is online somewhere, I think he's a Draco look-alike, coz it was based of a human photo but wasn't Tom Felton (I don't think!!!)

Well, looking forward to more, as usual!
~gorgeousbowneyes
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From ANON - MN on August 03, 2008
I've gone from feeling bad to feeling worse. I've been using my sisters laptop because 1. my laptop has been down for a while and I'm too lazy to get her fixed and 2. the desktop isn't going online anymore and I'm too lazy to get it fixed. Not to mention school has been kicking me in the ass big time. I have a week off this week and I'm spending most of it in school making up time missed. But I miss you guys too, Draca, Tassy, Gabby and the rest of the girls. I'm trying to make a comeback but I find it really hard to do when I'm passed out from exhaustion.

As for the story: the series started all light and fluffy and as it went it picked up angst and depth. Dude! That is the wrong direction to go for a smut story. :-P just kidding, I'm loving it not as much as Pray and Dance but I really am loving it. it's like we're meetng a new Harry and Draco after some time apart. Not to mention one of the places on my list of places to vacation is really close to being crossed out. Are you really going to have them stay there? Why didn't I think of that? I feel slow.

Love you lots,
Nikki
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From ANON - tas on August 02, 2008
Pretty angsty there Grabby. .. lol. I was warned. Is Harry going to plan on fixing this childhood home up, making it habitable? There's got to be some good memories in there somewhere too...possibly he could find some pensive memories or more photo albums? Liked the chapter, and now know why this installment is 'breaks'. And I noticed that Nikki has touched base with you....miss talking to her too. We really should plan a chat with everyone one of these nights with whoever can spare an hour or two, just to see if we're all alive and kicking. Talk at ya later. Hugs.
~tas
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