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Reviews for The Witching Hour

By : dreamer24
  • From jddammann on August 13, 2008
    Loving it!
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  • From noeby on August 11, 2008
    More... Severus, please, harder.
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  • From noeby on August 11, 2008
    harry's back in line. Good to see. And the first date was yum.
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 05, 2008
    good lord all mighty, that was hot,,damn your good...now give me more,,lots more..this is a good story..i really like the length of the chapters. so where did Ron learn a spell that even Harry didnt know???cant wait to read more,...please post more soon,
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  • From on August 04, 2008
    Love it!! Im not a fan of Ron & Mione....cant waite for the next chapter
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  • From neelix on August 04, 2008
    cooking on gas now! Great update....
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on August 02, 2008
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From diamondmouse on July 28, 2008
    that was great! but i was expecting more hell from hermi and sevvi to harry
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  • From Larrabee on July 27, 2008
    I feel like the confrontation with Harry began nd ended too quickly. Years of friendship should have warranted more. And she forgave to easily. And I don't know, I feel as if this chapter was rushed.

    But you know I love this story, I can't wait for more.
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  • From dreamer24 on July 27, 2008
    Once more, I would like to thank all of you that are taking the time to read and review. Noeby, thank you for pointing out that I need to watch my dialogue...you were correct when you said that it can be formal and stilted. I will try to keep that in mind as I continue writing the story. Thank you for the help, I appreciate it.
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  • From noeby on July 27, 2008
    Hi!
    this is my first review.
    You have developed an interesting premise to this story and developed it well. Congrats on your first fic! And your grammar etc it really good.

    The only bit of con-crit I would like to add is to perhaps watch your dialogue. At times it feels a bit stilted and unnatural. If you go back and read, say, Harry and Hermione and Kingsley -- they kind of all read the same: quite formal. It kinda doesn't feel natural. But, you know what, as you write more that tends to loosen up a bit. So well done! It's a good story thus far!
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  • From KellyJCR on July 27, 2008
    Great chapter! You had the confrontation with Harry and Hermione perfect. She would not have ranted and raved she would be mature with a hint of snark. Can't wait for more.
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  • From Sampdoria on July 23, 2008
    Oh yes, I like this!! Ron and Harry are iddiots and Hermione and Severus are grown enough to treat eachother with respect, not to mention the deligthful attraction:-))
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  • From diamondmouse on July 23, 2008
    awwww this is really cute! i love it!
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  • From dreamer24 on July 22, 2008
    In my next chapter, I plan on having that confrontation with Harry, Hermione, and Sev. It is going to be a good showdown between the three and I think you will be surprised at how it starts. Once again, thank you all for taking the time to read and review, it is appreciated.
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