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Reviews for Forgiveness

By : tambrathegreat

From ANON - Victoria Cox on January 19, 2013
Wow, a truly epic and fascinating tale. A story worthy of Snape. Your original characters are as engaging as the HP originals and the way you wove in Native American and even some Asian wizardry was brilliant. Thank you for this wonderful imagining of better days for Snape.
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From ANON - DiDi on September 12, 2009
"Severus hunched his shoulders. 'Dunno. Mum's the only one I know besides you.'
'Don't you have any grandparents or aunts and uncles?' Lily's questioning gaze lifted to his, and he was glad she was distracted from her original question. He hated being poor." Is that a quote from the books? If not you captured the relationship perfectly. And so, this is a great chapter. I really like that you can seamlessly integrate past and present and show just what Severus' weaknesses really are. I loved the ending here. It was really touching and very realistic.
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From ANON - RowanRhyse on July 27, 2009
Oh, I wish I could have found this as you were posting it, because I'd have given you a review right from the start. I was utterly fascinated by your bringing Severus into the Lakota family, and I really love your OCs.

I truly appreciate the research you've done regarding the various spiritual and magical traditions--and the psychological effects of the kind of life that Snape led from early childhood on. There are too many scenes to count that really touched my heart, and made me choke up.

I have to admit I really grinned when Severus told off that rat b*st*rd Clay about what he'd have done to him. And I grinned even wider, for much better reasons, when Severus arrived at the ceremony site for the adoption and saw his extended family was there.

I liked how you had the interludes from Blaise Zabini's journal. I liked the scene at the dance when Severus danced with his daughter, and with Antonia. I enjoyed the bit where Severus asked Antonia's dad for her hand in marriage--and the bride price made me howl with laughter. You see, I have friends who have fainting goats, and so I could picture that VERY clearly.

You did a fantastic job of showing Severus' slow path to healing from that night that JP accosted him to the wonderful day that he finally married his Antonia, without making the love and erotic bits sappy, nor the nightmares and his self-denigration too melodramatic.

I've added this story to my list of fics to re-read (along with the others I've reviewed in the past few days). It's now a favorite and I can only say "Well done" and move on to read more of your works. :)

Thanks for sharing your creativity!
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From ANON - Kat on July 22, 2009
Simply amazing work! I admire the time and effort of the varied research so evident in this and all of your stories. I too have a compulsion with it. I rarely read fanfiction, let alone find anything that I feel is worthy of my time...I stayed up entirely too late (or early as it were) reading The Slytherin Redemption like a fabulous book I couldn't put down as I scrolled through the chapters. You have a rare and amazing talent and I am thrilled to add you to the handful of fanfiction authors that I will read. I am already looking forward to reading your next installment of this series (already read the first three chapters). I do a fair job of writing myself, at least so I've been told, but have never produced anything of this caliber and I am inspired to try. Our styles are different but that is a good thing I think. Please never let the lack of reviews make you doubt your ability. Okay as a writer I know they will, but I'm sure that for every review you do have there are hundreds of readers who have enjoyed your story who simply do not realize the importance of a word of appriciation for the effort. Or are simply too overwhelmed by your talent to form coherent thought!
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From ANON - Yocum1219 on July 14, 2009
WONDERFUL!!! I'm waiting patiently for the sequel to be updated!! I LOVE stories where they Slytherins aren't as all bad as everyone might think, but not goody goody "angels" either. Thank you for writing such wonderful stories!
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From ANON - GitonCrais on November 15, 2008
That was a wonderful conclusion to a story well written. As in real life, it is with a feeling of relief and regret when one finishes a great journey. Hope you will think up other journeys for us to visit. To keep Snape so wonderfully English while he was in an American setting is not something you come across every day. I have thouroughly enjoyed this story and am anticipating more stories of your pen. May your muses be kind to you.
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From Madietta on November 14, 2008
I have so enjoyed reading this story. I loved your portrayal of the US magical community, how easily it intermingled with the muggle world, as well as with the Native American community. Your original characters are brilliant. I love Stella and Joseph Pony. Snape's mental road towards self-forgiveness, with all the flashbacks, was greatly written. I liked how positive this story was. Thanks for a most enjoyable reading experience.
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From Happyappy on November 05, 2008
You know, all I can say is Wow. Love it.
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From Imperatina on October 26, 2008
I was glad to find your excellent "Slytherin Redemption" again (finished reading it this morning), then started on "Forgiveness" which I enjoyed very much!! Great characterizations and I love your original characters. Can't wait to read more. Please update soon!
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From Happyappy on October 20, 2008
Still loving your writing! I had to go back and read all of your other stuff because I liked it so much. All great stories! I sure hope Poppy is wrong about the eventual wheel chair. I hope the acupuncture Dr. can help him. Glad to see Severus getting over Lily and moving onto loving another. I was very glad to hear that he realised he had the will to live. I think I remember reading sometime that you were wondering if you should add more sex to the story. I know that this is AFF, but I for one like a good story way more than reading all the smut. So in my opinion (which is probably in the minority on this site)what you have in so far has been fine. Please update soon!
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From ANON - GitonCrais on October 19, 2008
I felt sorry and happily surprised to find your story. Sorry, because it was already part 20 and happily surprised to find such a beautiful and good flowing story, an wonderful gem. Your portrayal of Snape is well done and well worded and an absolute joy to read. Spend nearly 3 hours to read it from start to this point and it is a time well spend. I like your way with words and descriptions of various situations. Also the insight of Snape's past life and memories, blended with the present and future what could be, kept me sitting on the edge of my chair and feeling the need to finish reading it. I hope you will update soon, as to satisfy my growing curiosity to see how this will all develop. Thank you for sharing this with us.
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From eyesuhkattspeleeng on October 18, 2008
Wonderful.

Love how you integrated American History with J.K. Rowling's British Magical history. Very unique. You don't really see stories that do American Wizards very well, they pretty much keep it the same. I think the cultures would be different you know? Even in the real world, our two cultures are very different. I'm usually a bit sketchy about stories that take place in America or involve an American mainly because my attempts have failed but you've done such a wonderful job with it.

Also I love how you're able to get into Snape's head but yet the text is distant enough it doesn't overcome the whole story.

Seriously, how long did it take you to get this good at writing?

(Sorry but when I find a good story I can't stop reviewing)
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From eyesuhkattspeleeng on October 18, 2008
I know, overusing the phrase a bit, but beautiful. Very real, I think. I favor your writing style for some reason though I cannot put my finger on it exactly. It's a Harry Potter fic, I know, but it's different. It's a life time of different if that makes any sense what so ever. I love Joesph Pony and the imp is just adorable. I cannot wait to see what you have in store for our favorite Potion's Master and your wonderfully developed characters that fit so well in to your story. I love how Stella is so young but isn't overly innocent. A lot of people will make children out to be innocent creatures and overly cute when most of them are crafty (which isn't a bad thing). You've given both the kids (though I suspect one of them thinks hes an adult) a not so bright past and it affects their personalities. Being raised in poverty you get jaded so early on in life to the horrors of the world and in a way you've brought that out in the two. It's real.

And I'm sorry you didn't get any reviews for your first chapter. I never do either but I promise that your story is interesting to at least one person anyway. Please don't ever give up because you truly deserve more praise than you have gotten so far. I would not change a thing.
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From eyesuhkattspeleeng on October 18, 2008
Beautiful. I'm in love already. It's hard to find any thing good to read any more but you have given me something and I thank you for that. For now, I shall continue reading this so far wonderfully written piece of fanfiction and will periodically come to tell you what I think and to further lick your boots to a shine so bright it blinds people when the sun light catches them.

(Meds make me kinda loopy but seriously, I really do like your story so far.)
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From Happyappy on September 30, 2008
Well, I guess Severus ticked off Antonia at the end of this chapter. She always seems to get over it fairly quickly though. I hope the lawyer can help Severus. I am slightly confused with the Percy Weasly stuff, What does he have over on Severus or the order? Does he have a dark mark too? Please update soon!
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