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Reviews for Strong Hands

By : ZooArmy
  • From ANON - Moyima on September 22, 2008
    Fantastic chapter-- very hot. The chapter read beautifully. Having someone read the chapter over for you worked really well-- now your awesome writing isn't distracted by little mistakes. Great job. When this story ends, I'll be looking for more of your work!
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  • From hieisdragoness18 on September 22, 2008
    lol. i LOVED the line damn the torpedoes full speed ahead! its from one of my favorite movies. i know its also a famous quote but every time i hear it or read it i think of the movie The More the Merrier. lol.
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  • From thrnbrooke on September 22, 2008
    Sooo need chapter 6!!! Even though it means the end!
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  • From ANON - xAkireix on September 18, 2008
    You are my saving angel. I was reading a story and it was so sad I couldn't stop crying. But then I found this one and it was exactly what I needed to laugh again. It's so funny and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
    Love
    --xAkireix

    PS. I don't see anything wrong with your English so don't let anyone get you down. Just keep writing the way you were doing and if there are mistakes, so what. That happens to everyone. ^.^
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  • From cylean on September 16, 2008
    i love your story, and don't worry what people say about your writing. For it not being your first language you write pretty well. yes, you make some mistakes but not enough to make the story hard to read. Listen to the person who got her Bachelor's Degree in English.
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  • From CelticWarrior on September 16, 2008
    I'll do more than slaughter, if theres no hotness in the next chapter :P


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  • From ANON - Alex on September 16, 2008
    Hey ZooArmy,
    your story`s really wonderfull- I like thid massage idea a lot!
    From my point of view language isn`t a problem.
    Maybe `cause I`m no native speaker as well? ;-)
    No matter, please keep writing!
    Looking forward the next chapter(s)...
    I send you a hug,
    Alex


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  • From tas on September 16, 2008
    Ah Zoo, that is so mean leaving a cliffy like that. lol. I just clicked on AFF and saw your name and read your first four chapters. I really liked it. As for the reviewer that said it was atrocious and hard to follow.....Although I found some grammar issues, it wasn't that bad I think. I was able to follow it quite easily. I have read far, far worse. Maybe sometime later you can have someone read it over, but I wouldn't worry so much about it now. I thought it was okay.

    If you can, can you please let me know when you update? You probably have my email somewhere. It hasn't been that long since we last chatted. lol

    ~tas
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  • From NightLo on September 16, 2008
    Hum...so I miss a few interesting chapters, and...I really don't see Harry as a massager, which must feel very very good...

    Actually if we imagine the conversation they are taking...one being nude while the other is fully clothed, together with oiled body and sweaty chest...please update soon!
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  • From MilleniumForever on September 16, 2008
    THAT CLIFFY WAS THE MOST EVIL THING I HAVE DEALT WITH IN AGES!!!!!. Also, check that last sentence. The words are....backwards.
    LOVED it. The info on the massage types was illuminating.

    *cookies*

    ~Sophie Max-Anderson
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  • From hieisdragoness18 on September 16, 2008
    rawr. i wanna know what happens. and your grammar is fine! i had honestly forgotten that english wasn't your first language. i actually get reviews complaining about mine and english is my native language. there are just people out there who like to nitpick and make others doubt themselves but you are fine. trust me.
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  • From ANON - Moyima on September 15, 2008
    I LOVE this story. Very original and exciting. I love the emotions and the angst! To answer your question: yes, your grammar is difficult to read sometimes-- HOWEVER, you're doing really well for someone whose first language isn't English. I honestly think I know what's happening. I'm assuming that your first language is a romance language? French, Spanish, Italian? Unlike those languages English has a strict order in which the noun and verb need to go. The difficultly in the grammar is arising with the word order in most cases-- sometimes it's verb conjugation.

    I don't think there's any need for you to worry. If someone reviewed you and said that your writing is awful, then they don't deserve to read your wonderful work (and I bet you anything that THEY couldn't write this well in your language). This issue can be easily fixed by having a native English speaker beta your work. I'm leaving my email and offering my services for this fic. If you'd like me to send suggestions for the chapters already posted and look over future chapters, please email me.

    Please keep up the great work!
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  • From cravedom on September 15, 2008
    Yes, we should take you to the chopping block for doing this to us.

    I like your story, is sweet, romantic and very light on the angst. Angst is a wonderful thing ( I am reading Barking dogs don't bite) but sometimes is necessary to take a break from it and refresh. Speaking about refreshing, if you stress out about every comment on your grammar there wont be much refreshing; will there? Just remember that you know how to read and write in two languages and you are obviously creative enough to write a story in a language that is not your native. Furthermore you are brave enough to make your stories public taking the risk of rejection. Try not to worry about so much and remember sometimes people do not read the author notes and therefore miss your warning.


    Are massages really painful? My husband was trying to convince me to get one for my neck ache but it does not sound all that pleasant, maybe I should just take two Motrins for now.
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  • From ANON - Melaiya on September 15, 2008
    Dont get me wrong, I really am loving this but Im curious to know. Is your first language something other than english? Its just your word placement and grammar is just really um...off...Im not flaming you cuz I love the plot and all its just all the grammatical errors make it a little hard to concentrate on the story cuz I have to keep correcting them in my head in order for the sentence to make sense. Do you have a beta by chance?
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  • From blackpaddy on September 15, 2008
    Damn you and your cliffhangers! *pout* Now you have to update again soon!
    Re: the grammar thing, I agree that CONSIDERING your first language is not English, you're doing VERY well with what you have done and remember, most people (I know I wouldn't) wouldn't have the courage to even write or post a story on the internet in a language they're not 100% familiar with so good on you for that!
    If you are really concerned though, I could have a look over a few chapters to come or some of the ones already posted and email you some pointers? Let me know...
    Anyway, looking forward to the rest of the story and I know my reading fun hasn't been lessened by a few grammatical errors here and there!
    Stef
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