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By : CryingCinderella

From ANON - Save Yourself on October 19, 2008
I'm not sure where all the sycophantic reviewers come from. But, they are more than likely the product of the same school system as the author.

This story SUCKS ASS!!!
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From ANON - sljh on October 18, 2008
So....
Angry sex, especially at this point and time......baaaaaad idea. That's not ship, that's definitely a step in the wrong direction. And like someone else mentioned, have they not learned their lesson from the first frantic drunk fuck? When he wakes up, Snape is going to be even more angry at Hermione. He's highly irrational right now, driven by grief and anger and ignorance. He has no idea what her side of the story is, really, and he has not rationalized what role Draco and Ginny (and by extension Lucius) played in the disaster on his wedding day.

I don't know if it's even possible for him right now, but if he can actually take a moment to step back, take a deep breath and look at the big picture, he'd realize that Hermione is as much a victim as him, perhaps even moreso, as she has no money, no comfortable home and stable career to go back to, no realy friends, all of Britain hates her, and she gave up the one really special thing that was truly hers: her baby. What's more is she's grieving over lost loved ones too, so he does not hold the corner market on grief.

I keep coming back to this but I can't help it. Hermione does seem to have gotten some of her spunk back and I HOPE she takes this, examines her life and decides what's really important. I hope she has an epiphany that the research will still be there in a few months, in another country or whatever. But her baby boy might not be. She needs him as much as he needs her. Maybe that is what she needs to get her priorities straight and focus. From there, far away from Britain, she then can continue her research in peace with a better frame of mind and find that cure. This is what I'd like to see.

While she's getting her shit together and running off with her baby boy, I hope Severus does some serious soul searching, and angsting over Hermione. I hope he investigates all of the Malfoy schemes, using his super spy skills and kicks some butt where it needs to be kicked. I hope he takes an interest in Hermione's research and starts to help her out with that.

I hope he eventually goes to find her and......and this would be really funny......finds her 39 weeks pregnant again from their angry fuck in the Russian cabin, about to give birth AGAIN. But this time, he's not only ready to be a daddy to one but both kids. (And they live happily ever after...)

I'm an optimist....what can I say?
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From ANON - cherripepsiisgod on October 18, 2008
Wow...that was a steamy scene. It got me all hot and bothered.
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From TriniMinx on October 18, 2008
Well now...tears, blood and sex...that should be a frightful morning after. My goodness! Though, it would be really interesting if that little encounter got her pregnant again, LOL. Actually, that would be rather morbid. Okay, so now I'm confused, will Severus be changing his attitude towards Hermione now? You did say this was def. going to be a SS/HG story...but I would think that after some blood and sex, he'd hate her more. And yes, your Severus is STILL horrible. But you are right about one thing, had he gone a bit softer on her sooner, I'd probably love him for not being a complete jugheade and jerk. I like strong and NICE men...that's how I picture Sev to have always been, it was life that just made him bitter -- that and Harry, lol.

Though, still going on with my confusion, how in the world did they end up having sex all of a sudden? I really just want them to finally live happily ever after, for him to stop being horrible, and go and get baby HermSnap.

Your stupid Severus needs to stop blaming Hermione for pretty, little, dead Nalina's death too. Sorry, but its getting redundent, in terms of the story. I think its time he moves on or at least tries too. And I mean, it's pretty, little, dead Nalina's fault she died anyway. No one told her to go crossing a Muggle street. Even Ginny tried to stop her, and Draco screamed at her. So there. Problem solved. Pretty, little, dead Nalina killed herself. Yes, yes, that's exactly what it is. Now Severus needs to move on...to loving Hermione.

Eh, who knows.

Lenore and Harry? Hahahahahahaha, I knew she was a little wicked. Here is my boob Harry, now give it to the son of your best friend, enjoy it! I still don't like Lenore wantinig to help raise baby HermSnap (you should name the baby that :o)). I still stand by my idea of safe Uncle Harry.

Where is Ron? What happened to Ginny and Draco and Lucius? You still need to clear up why Draco and Ginny ganged to stop the wedding.

Okie dokie, update soon :o
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From ismene5 on October 18, 2008
Wow this was a surprise.
And I loved it!
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From chickaboo on October 18, 2008
Oh geeze. If they aren't just stupid. They're still trying to resolve the first baby that resulted of the last time they had sex. And I know Severus is hurting. But he needs to face reality and place the blame for Nalina's death where it belongs. Draco tried to keep her from crossing the street, she did it any way, she got hit by a car. If you want to get technical it's Nalina's fault she died. Harsh as that sounds. But the truth of the matter is, it was an accident. But I understand how it's human nature to want to find someone to blame. If we can blame someone we can be angry. If we can be angry, we have a new emotion to feel other than overwhelming sadness and grief. It's how most people deal with grief. But it doesn't fix anything, and it doesn't help someone to heal. It makes it worse. Severus is blaming Hermione for everything when she is just as much a victim as he. If anyone is going to be blamed for the whole start of the debacle then it all comes back to Nalina. She left Severus, even gave back the ring, something she had never done before. He got depressed, went to drown his sorrows, met Hermione, did the nasty, went home, then Nalina came back, they proceeded with the wedding, and well all know what happens from there. So really, yeah. But what I'm still a bit unclear on is, what was Draco's interest in getting Hermione there and stopping the wedding? Okay, I'm done. lol
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From Heidi191976 on October 18, 2008
This was a great chapter. I can't wait to read more. I hope that now Hermione and Severus will decide to get their son back and be a family, especially after what they just did.
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From ANON - Electrical Storms on October 18, 2008
::blinks my eyes, speechless for the moment::

Speechlessness over. Yeah! Now we're moving right along!

The Lenore/Harry thing...okay, I never would have seen that one coming but now that it's here, hey, that's a pretty good twist on things.
I'm glad Harry has the baby, at least for now, and that finally the baby is getting some much-needed attention.

Hermione and Severus - Zowie! Didn't see that coming either; I figured he would get her back to safety and then stand over her until she signed the papers. I'm so glad she didn't. I hope she doesn't.

Glad to see girl's got her spunk and her mouthiness back! I was beginning to miss her know-it-all-ishness and I'm glad to see she's (hopefully) regaining some of her confidence. I like how she gave Snape a little of his own medicine after the terrible way he treated her and HOLY COW did they just screw each other?

The plot thickens - I'm biting my nails at what might happen next when Severus and Hermione deal with the fact that they just slept together - and he damned well knew who she was this time around. I knew it, I knew it! He just can't resist her even though he thinks he hates her.

Severus would never have been happy with the intellectual void (Sorry, Nalina, no offense intended. But you can't all be as sharp and intelligent as Hermione.) that was Nalina, no matter how much of a pretty young thing she was, no matter how nice she was. It was fate, I tell you. Fate.

::Gives CryingCinderella her key to the Willy Wonka Factory::

Now that was an update worth the key to the WW Factory. Give us some more chapters like this one and you'll have a whole set of keys dangling from your key ring. ;0) Fantastic! I can't wait to read more, more! ;0)
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From KellyJCR on October 18, 2008
I am absolutely speechless, you are to good. I litteraly have nothing to say I'm trying to process the whole thing. Congrats on completing your studies. Well done!!!!
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From neelix on October 18, 2008
OK.... you are forgiven!!!!

I totally loved that..... please please update soon!
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From ANON - sljh on October 17, 2008
There really is no twin. Actually, Nalina has MPD and Lenore is her other evil personality. When ever Nalina would get pregnant, Lenore would come out and abort it and make it look like a miscarriage. Nalina loved Snape but Lenore loved having sex with ... ??

OR

There really is no twin. "Lenore" is actually Narcissa, who didn't really die, wearing a glamour. She befriended Nalina as her long lost twin, shorty after Narcissa "died" so that Nalina would trust her. She's been manipulating Nalina in every way possible, responsible for her "miscarriages" instead of helping her and was the one that killed off Nalina at the wedding by luring her into traffic with a carefully placed imperio. This was in revenge against Lucius and Severus both. She was going to call it a good job until she found out the "mudblood" was carrying Snape's real kid, and she didn't want him getting over Nalina just to be happy with a new woman and baby, so she steps in as Lenore again to mess with him some more, by reminding him of Nalina, taking the baby, killing it....

OR

Same scenario as above, except that Narcissa (in disguise as Lenore) actually killed Nalina off when she disappeared for two weeks following their big argument. She stepped in playing the part of Nalina with plans of marrying Snape, taking all of Lucius and Snape's money and killing them off, and then riding off into the sunset. But, mudblood and her baby threw that off, so she planned a quick last minute diversion with Nalina's "death" and then came back as "Lenore" to stir things up.

Lucius knows but he's a fat bastard who just doesn't give a shit? He's in on it with Narcissa and/or Lenore or who ever that is? He's still mad at Severus for turning out to be anti-Voldy and this is part of some big elaborate plot to make him really sad? ...

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From ANON - snapeaddiction on October 15, 2008
Seriously, are you ok?
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From ANON - snapeaddiction on October 15, 2008
Take two days off and I think you're dying.

Everything ok?
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From desiraes0220 on October 14, 2008
Oh my god its been like over 24 hours since you last updated amazing lol
I guess you needed a break I mean I dont think this story has gone this long with out an update
Well good for you but I hope fore and update soon even if it takes a week
This last ch you left alot of things hangin so now I am like just hangin also
Poor Hermione is probable really cold by now thow if you are planning
on her hookin up with snape fora happily ever after ending you minght want to get
on that before the have to hook up in the after life lol by hey ghosh sex could be kool to
Des
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From ANON - Electrical Storms on October 13, 2008
I humbly hand you the key to the Godiva Chocolate Factory. ::hands over the golden key, grumbling under her breath:: In exchange, fifty new chapters, please.

Okay, we'll take twenty.

Ten?

Five?

Anything? :0)

Pleeze?

Hermione's freezing her ass off in the snow and she's starting to get bitchy about it. Save us all from Hermione's wrath! ;0)
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