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By : CryingCinderella

From Terrie on October 11, 2008
Good thing on the other side of this computer you are. The disturbance that Albus felt was the collective scream from all your readers. On that note, I think I'll just go to bed. Have to go to work tomorrow anyway.
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From ANON - sljh on October 10, 2008
LOL on the Yoda speak.

Are you sure you didn't hit the tequila before writing this one, sweety?

MMM - BUSY BEE YOU ARE.

hehehe
I love it!
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From TenderQuaintWitch on October 10, 2008
That was really rather amusing. A nice break from the "oh my goodness, let me just rip my heart out of my chest, it'll be easier" or the angry. I enjoyed every word.

-TQW
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From ANON - sljh on October 10, 2008
Is it too early to start whigning?

POKING with the stick: The author may NOT go partying just because that's what one does in college on the weekends!!! Well, okay, just a little bit....but not so much that you are left with a hangover that keeps you from posting MORE chapters!

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;)
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From ginnylovesharry07 on October 10, 2008
okay what's going on. Did I miss something. I thought hermione was up at the cabin all alone. what is going on. I can't wait to see more. I am enjoying or somewhat different take on the hermion/snape ship. It diffantly has the right amount of ansgt to it.
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From ANON - Electrical Storms on October 09, 2008
Did you hear that after chapter 13 went up? Yeah, that was me.

Screaming, "NO F***ING WAY! NO WAY!"

Yeah, it was that good! One hell of a cliffhanger! If it was enough to make Severus drop his wand, it had to be big.

Okay, taking the gloves off now. That was an extreme cliffhanger, even for yours truly who loves a good cliffhanger. But so, so good!

So, if our doe-eyed Nalina isn't dead, I hope she took a bath at least and washed off the gore before toddling off to Russia to meet up with Hermione in the far reaches of the planet. :0) And changed her clothes, too.

I kid, I kid.

I assume it's Nalina but I'll have to wait until the next chapter (yes, that was a big hint..hint, hint..)to find out. Until then, I'll wildly speculate.

*It's not Nalina. It's an impostor.
*It's the real Nalina and the Nalina at the wedding was an impostor paid to pose as Nalina. Polyjuiced Nalina gets offed in the accident. Oops! The real Nalina needs Hermione's brains to help her figure this out.
*Nalina's a werewolf, and she has a vested interest in Hermione succeeding in finding a cure for lycanthropy. I'm reaching, I know.

I'll wait by my computer until the update goes up. ::drums fingers on the table::

F-A-N-T-A-S-T-I-C! This was a fabulous chapter and I can't wait to read more. ::rubs hands together:: This is getting even better. Mystery, suspense and intrigue. Wait, where's the blackmail? Don't forget the blackmail! ;0)

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From catysmom1028 on October 09, 2008
I like it. Please update soon.

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From Angie30 on October 09, 2008
Such a wicked cliff hanger, I just love how you keep your readers hanging :) Keep up the great work and I cant' wait for the next chapter!
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From ApollinaV on October 09, 2008
Chapter 13-
I was sulking about having my trusty Nancy Drew magnifying glass wrenched from my grasp. Then I read the chapter. It's time for me to hang up the Junior Girl Detective title... (not giving up the stylish tweed trench or powder blue sportscar) It's obvious I'm just a hack detective. Nalina reappearing? Really? In backwaters podunk Russia? So maybe the doe-eyed silvery blond isn't Nalina, even though those are the descriptors you chose with her, but honestly, it fooled Severus. What else could have made him drop his wand? Sigh. I suppose I'm just going to have to sit back and watch, cuz obviously I'm not on the right frequency to have gotten it so terribly wrong. Damnit! And I always took high marks in Divination! Something must be blinding my inner-eye. Pollen season.

I haven't weighed in on the whole Nalina thing yet. I may be one of the few who hasn't. But I'm not opposed to OFC's, having written several Snape/OFC's before, so I guess I'm less clouded than the die-hard 'shippers. I don't think she's a skank-ho. I can accept that her love for him and his for her was real and a beautiful thing. If you can accept that HG/SS can have normal-happy-romantic relations, then I don't see why he couldn't with another character. ...And I'm not even going to touch the whole Lucius is the father theory either...ugh. I'm just going to wait and see and hope that she's a realitively real person; or whatever. Her crying at the ruined wedding and acting a bit like a bridzilla seems perfectly understandable given the situation, it doesn't make her a bitch in real life. Had someone done that to my wedding, I would have become full-on all-out Gorgon, and that biotch claiming my man was her baby-daddy like some trashy day time talk show would have been in the market for a wig. ...wow, I just realized how incredibly low-class that sounded... still, I stand by it.

Yeah, thanks for the curve ball. I struck out. (And that's it for sports euphemisms for me. I don't watch 'em, I don't play 'em)
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From ANON - sljh on October 09, 2008
okay, duh, lol, found it.... plain as day in the second chapter:

"The years had not been kind to the elder Malfoy, particularly after Narcissa had died. He
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From ANON - sljh on October 09, 2008
Lyra Aphrodite Moon said:
"Or that could have been Narcissa. LOL"

Yeah, I was thinking that. ORRRRRR what if Nalina WAS Narcissa all along? I need to go back and re-read the whole thing again. I can't remember Narcissa being mentioned at the wedding...was she?
What if it was some fucked up plot against Severus that she and Lucius cooked up and she started feeling guilty and wanted out and.....nah.

But one thing is out there: If Nalina was two months preggers only one month after she and Sev got back together, then:
1) Her due date would have been a full month before Hermione, hence could not have still been pregnant at wedding, and
2) Got pregnant during their breakup, hence her baby (if there really was one) probably wasn't his

Yup, I really need to go back and re-read the whole thing. After I do my laundry and dishes and errands. ;)
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From TriniMinx on October 09, 2008
Eh?!

Pretty, little, dead Nalina ISN'T DEAD?!

WTF. WTF? WTF! Seriously?

Or that could have been Narcissa. LOL

geesh.

Those Malfoy's. Goodness, where is Lucius? That makes me think about SLJH's comment, "You screwed my wife and she got pregnant with your spawn, so I'm going to make it so you fall inlove with your own daugher, have sex with her and then I'm going to screw her and impregnate her with MY spawn." -- LMAO, omg that would be great. I would laugh. Well, I take it back, I AM already laughing at that idea. Highly amusing if it were real.

Speaking of which, OMG, if that was pretty, little, dead, un-dead Nalina, god I hope that makes Severus feel like crap! The bastard! ugh. Piece of crap, arrogant man! Grrrr. He deserves that, especially for treating Hermione like that, damn it! It takes TWO to make a baby. Sperm donor my ass. What a prick. -- Okay, I'm done ranting and raving about that now. *getting off her soap box for the bazillionth time*

Yes, I'm still reading, it's not so bad, after that chapter where Hemione ran off crying. All that stuff before, yeaaa, if the story continued like that, then I don't think I could have continued reading (dude, those chapters were more intense than Autum Argument -- eeeeek). That's the stuff I cannot deal with. Which is why I encouraged those warnings be revised. So I only hope you continue with all the mystery and secrets right now, and lay off on the emotional abuse and mental torture with extreme angst for awhile. *a wince and a cringe* That's a part of your web, I don't care to muddle through.

Okay, but I also just read some stuff on the pregnancy and I'm curious about that too. I think I asked you something about that. Can you clarify some baby questions? I'm seriously beginning to think pretty, little, dead, but un-dead Nalina wasn't pregnant (what a lying bitchy thing to do! -- argh, I STILL don't like her). And yea, if Nalina was 2 months pregnant, that means she's 1 month more pregnant than Hermione. Which again, why didn't she give birth before? eh? eh! eh?!

And what happened to Hermione's baby? Throw me a plot bone, plllleeeassee. Appease me, and tell me, little baby of Hermione and Sevvy is tucked away nice and safe with Uncle Harry! :o)

How are your assignments coming along? Spend some time on those! I feel ya, I have a part of my thesis due each week :o/ So I assume you share my mental exhaustion too. What are you studying, btw?

Oh and please update 'An Autum Argument'! :o)

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From ANON - sljh on October 09, 2008
You said you weren't going to answer my question. You mean this question:

Question about something from an earlier chapter:
"He never mentioned his one night mistake in that muggle club, thinking nothing more of it. And four weeks later his bride to be had announced that she was nearly two months pregnant. He could not have been happier."

Four weeks later she said she was two months pregnant, means that she was about a month pregnant already when he impregnated Hermione in the bar bathroom. In other words, she should have been a full month further along than Hermione. In other words, she should have given birth about a month before Hermione did. In other words, why was she STILL pregnant at her wedding when Hermione was 39+weeks pregnant? Did she lie about being pregnant and THEN get herself pregnant after they got back together? Does Severus not know how to count to 9? Perhaps someone should ask him to count back 40 weeks from Nalina's due date and then look at the calendar?

Oh yeah, I figure her (or her look alike) showing up in that cabin is (hopefully) going to shed some light on that subject. I'm beginning to think she was never really pregnant and it was a scam the whole time.
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From ANON - sljh on October 09, 2008
One more comment (hehe)
So, if Hermione didn't know anything before (from Ginny and Draco), she certainly does now from Nalina. At least Nalina's version or as much as Nalina can tell her. Unless that's Nalina's long lost twin.
And um....where is Nalina's baby? Looks like Hermy isn't the only one deciding not to pack a newborn along to frigid Russia, huh? Or is it still dead?
Oh, girl! You have some questions to answer! Get back here right now!
pokepokepokepoke>>>>>>
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From ANON - sljh on October 09, 2008
Aha! Pretty dead little Nalina....IS NOT DEAD! You see, you just cannot trust those fucking Malfoys. LOL.
Nice of her to inform her grieving fiance, though. Was this her way of running/hiding from big bad Lucius? Did she find out that she was really Snape's daughter? Does she want to adopt Hermione's son and raise it as a Malfoy with Lucius? LOL.

CC, I do indeed have a plethora of time on my hands during the day right now. (Alhough some of my reviews were made in the evening.) I know some of the other reviewers are going to be simply shocked but *gasp* some of the authors and readers here are in their 30s and 40s. :D >> For the last 10 years, I've been a stay home mom. Now after years of doing that, I have a bit too much time on my hands during the day...SO...I have been trying to get my ancient resume together and I'm going to try and find a part time job. Easier said than done because nobody wants a mom who hasn't worked in over 10 years, pay her decent hourly rate for part time hours (so that she can be home when her kids come home from school), so it's slow going. I'm actually quite spoiled and lucky in that we are not in a position that I have to work so much as I need to for my sanity, and to make extra in order to pay for my kids soccer trips. And I have no idea why I've been on the computer more lately than I normally do, but I guess it's a diversion of sorts. Maybe it's the resume's fault. Yeah, that's it. Maybe I need to go back to school and start over. I do remember college years, though, all the work and no sleep so I promise not to poke you with my stick too much. Really, I promise. I'm still walking 5-7 miles a day, clean house, do the laundry, make dinner, run errands...does that count? :)
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