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By : CryingCinderella

From pandabear on October 09, 2008
What the hell...."silver haired girl" what the hell am i su;pposed to think with that. You just had to leave me at the egdge of my bed
! LITERALLY!
*groans* itsd NAlina isnt it.....dear god, please dont do this to severus.
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From ArabellaSnape on October 09, 2008
AAAAAAAaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaagggggggggggggggggggggggggggghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!

What are you doing to me?

You end the chapter there?

What have I ever done to deserve such treatment?

You end the chapter there?

There is where you decide to end the chapter?

If that is who I think it is then who in the bloody blazes was cremated and had their ashes strewn about the garden?

I cannot even think anymore. What are you on about? Update, and soon!
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From Heidi191976 on October 09, 2008
This was great. I look forward to reading more to see who the silver haired girl is with Hermione. Also what will happen to Ginny now that Lucius is in the hotel room and what is the secret she is hiding.
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From KellyJCR on October 09, 2008
To leave us there on that cliff and stop. That is a most evil trick. I know cliffies are great fun but when a story is this good it is torture. I'm done ranting, sorry. I have no idea what is going on. I have my suspicions and if that is Nalina in that cabin I don't know what I'll do. I just hope she didn't come back from the dead that can be odd. This could all be part of the blackmail thing that Ginny happened upon. I don't know. You are the master at plot twists and turns. You obviously paid attention in that class. The kitty has had a several cough drops and is quite punch drunk at the moment. I am absolutly floored. So looking forward to more. Extrmemly well done!!!!
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From ANON - Anon on October 09, 2008
i like this story so far. i just don't like clff hangers, because i want to know what happens. i was sad when Snape lossed his child, you would think that after losing one child he would welcome the other one with open arms, but then again there is no telling how a person reacts to grief.
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From RoseEvans on October 09, 2008
All Hail! All Hail Crying Cinderella.
Who loves to keep us hanging on
with twits and turns.
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From andarte on October 09, 2008
"Woah. What?" I swear to god that was the first thing that came to mind at the end of chapter 13 -- its such a mean cliffhanger! lol. Can't wait for more.
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From ANON - sljh on October 08, 2008
Yeah, that brings it back a little to my squicky Elektra theory, but I agree with you. Instead of being Harry she's been doing on the side, it's actually dear old dad.

Draco and Nalina are half siblings with same mom (Narcissa) and different dads. Nalina's dad is really Severus but he/she didn't know that. Lucius, in a plot of revenge, set them both up with a lust/love spell or potion to get them to fall inlove, even though they are really biological father/daughter. Yes, squicky. Meanwhile, Lucius is boffing Nalina (instead of Harry...or maybe in addition to, lol). Maybe he's polyjuiced as Snape or imperius curse or what have you.
Now that's some serious revenge: "You screwed my wife and she got pregnant with your spawn, so I'm going to make it so you fall inlove with your own daugher, have sex with her and then I'm going to screw her and impregnate her with MY spawn." Yeah, I could see Lucius doing something really sick and twisted like that.

I'm still wondering how old Nalina was, in relation to Draco, et. al.? Not that it matters, because she's dead, but yeah...
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From desiraes0220 on October 08, 2008
hum maybe my imagination is not that far off it goes something like this:
That the baby Snapes lil Malfoy girlfriend yes alto was prego it wasnt snapes oh no it was daddy's
lol ok so maybe not quite that simple but hey i have a bad dirty mind hehehe
ok well update soon ok course you always do which I totally love you for.
Des
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From ANON - sljh on October 08, 2008
Winters,
This is absolutely CC's story -- what's great abou it is that it's making us think and react and feel and theorize and all that good stuff. That's a good thing. I don't know about anybody else, but I am most definitely NOT dissing on CC.

That being said, with it bing CC's creation, she can do whatever she wants, of course. So if she wants to make Nalina into the cliche Mary Sue, it's certainly her perogative. I'm guessing she isn't but then that's just my guesses, nothing more. That being said, even if Nalina was a perfect, flawless Mary Sue, she is dead.

So now Severus is going to have to get to the bottom of what the hell has been going on in the Malfoy household, has to decide what do about his son, has to decide how to deal with Hermione and whether or not he's going to help her with her research and then....go on with life. I think it's sweet that you want to hug Sev, but he's not the only one grieving for the loss of loved ones and he's not the only one effected by tragedy. And lucky him, he doesn't have to cope with post-partem depression throughout his grieving process either.

The ulimate bad guy is pointing to Lucius Malfoy right now and the ultimate scapegoat and loser in the whole damn game, as usual is working out to be Hermione Granger. Everyone else is going to come out smelling like roses probably.
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From ApollinaV on October 08, 2008
Chapter 12-
Gasps! Plot thickens! Again! ! Hmm... *pulls out trusty Nancy Drew magnifying glass* Any particular reason why Gin is continuously referred to as Ginny Weasley? Divorce already transpired? Did I miss that one; I know the papers were left for Harry. And the Saint Weasley comment in the previous chapter made me dry heave just a bit. Not that Gin is the master-manipulator here. It's obvious she's an amature. So Lucius has stealthily made an appearance. Grand. It's time for the adults to play now. Ginny is too blunt and unsubtle in her manipulative tactics that it's just... sad. Yep, sad's the word I'm looking for. Time for some proper Slytherin scheming. This ought to be good.

Oh, and I just love the Draco's inheritance angle. It casts just enough hint of doubt on whether this 'running away with the love of his life' is a bit of a facade. Cuz it did sorta sound romantic. Twisted and delightfully dysfunctional, but oddly sweet. Maybe I'm just dysfunctional... entirely possible.

Yep, I'm noticing my reviews are getting longer the more engaged in this fic I'm getting. Brownie Girl Scout honor - I promise not to write a page... or more.
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From Terrie on October 08, 2008
Do not..I repeat..do not waste your time responding to my review. Reviews are for your benefit. Ok, they're for the readers too but that doesn't mean you have to respond to every one. The story is wonderful and very well written. It pulls me in and gets me all emotional about what's going on. Not to mention the desire to put knots on some heads. Especially, Ginny and Draco. Hermione, I would like to give a good shake. I don't know the details of her attempt to cure werewolves but it sounds like she may have taken on too much by herself and without sufficient controls. Severus, I would like to hold and give comfort (minds out of the gutter, not that kind of comfort). As for Nalina, she sounded like a very nice girl who made Severus happy. I wouldn't have wished her and certainly not her baby dead. I also don't wish for any nasty secret to come out about her that would ruin Severus' happy memories of their time together. Although I love the Hermione/Severus pairing a lot because I can identify with her character and thus pretend to be her, a well written OC female that makes Severus happy (which he so deserves) is ok with me. **dodges bullets from HG/SS shippers** Hey, it's all about the story and I think this is your best one yet.
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From ApollinaV on October 08, 2008
Chapter 11-
'His thoughts were amuck' Amuck! Amuck! Amuck! Amuck! *smack* Sorry! Had to.

As I pull out my trusty Nancy Drew magnifying glass I wonder if Juno is her traveling pseudonym. CLUE! Though Russia might be a destination CLUE! A part of me is curious if it's possible that she's taken up residence in Hogwarts itself. Let's disect this. Undoubtably she's familiar with the castle. It's certainly large and secretive itself to hide someone if necessary (and Dumbles would probably support hiding her) It's possible that she could have 'the Map,' thus aiding her secret residence. Food wouldn't be a problem. And more importantly, if she's attempting to continue her research, which is likely, she has access to resources she needs. She could be the other other ghost. Reminds me of a childrens book (No, not HP) where kids are living in a museum.

CC - Got to trust the process. It's not my story. I'm just along for the ride; good, bad, indifferent. Feedback where I add my two knuts worth, reaction, and speculation is part of the fun. There's a lot of speculatin' to be done here, especially to such a unique story. But it's YOUR story. I got that. I think after your note, others will too. I think it hit the right tone.
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From ANON - sljh on October 08, 2008
I cannot tell you all how inordinately pleased it makes me that my "pretty little dead Nalina" phrase has been repeated many times.
I don't squee because I'm just not a...um...squee-er........but all your nods make lean a teensy bit toward squee-ish-ness. LOL

I thought about Ron for a few seconds too but, if you remember it was mentioned in one chapter that he is disabled and lives at home where Mrs. Weasely takes care of him full time. Er, something to that effect. Unless of course, Nalina is a healer in training and was going there to "help" out and found out that she could ride Ron like the brooms he used to ride. Ha! Maybe she was doing half the wizarding world and had no idea WHAT her baby was going to look like! hehehe
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From TriniMinx on October 08, 2008
hahaha, that last chapter was awesome. Oh how I love how Lucius Malfoy complicates things. Thank goodness! I gotta say, you story IS looking up. I'm happy and looking forward to the rest of it now. Though, of course that is subject to change like the wind (as we know) when you put Severus back in the mix with all his horrible-ness.

Though you have me thinking now...

Half-sister, eh? I don't think Narcissa was the mother. I bet Lucius was the father and the mother is some muggle! Oooh, that's a way for Lucius to stick it to Sev. Because that would mean Nalina was tainted! Ooh I like my theory. Ooor, maybe Lucius didn't want to stick it to Sev, but Sev was a "upholding" alternative to hiding the truth about Nalina. Orrr, I wonder if pretty, little, dead Nalina's mother was Bellatrix. What if she wasn't even Draco's sister at all, but his cousin? Yep, I'm gonna keep on not liking pretty, little, dead Nalina.

What did Ginny find? What did she find? I bet she found out that Nalina WASN'T carrying Severus' child. I bet it someone else's and Draco couldn't do that to his godfather! Of course, because Nalina's not as good as she seems. And Lucius making sure Nalina marries Severus covers the "goodness" of the Malfoy name! Oh yes, that is EXACTLY what it is. But whose the REAL father? I bet it's Harry. Nalina had a one-night stand with Harry...oh yes. That would make the plot thicken so well. Ah ha! And that's also why Nalina told Severus she was pregnant and HAD to get married before the baby was born...you know black hair and green eyes and all... OMG, I would die laughing if Nalina had an affair with RON!!! Oh that would explain the Ginny factor! Nalina's baby was Ginny's biological neice! Ooh yes! I figured you out, I make sense! Yes, yes I do.

I think my wacky theory makes me happy. So I'll leave it at that.

Alrighty, good luck with your assignments. I'm in university too, and I read your stories in my free time when I take a break. So I know how you feel :o/ Best of luck with them!

Okie Dokie, update soon!

(p.s. also about it hitting close to home, my friend was 18 when it happened to her, and the guy (the piece of crap that he is) was like 23) just so you know/understand, more of where I'm coming from... and you're absolutely right. Not everyone is a good person. -- But that makes me wonder, do you mean your Severus, in this story, really ISN'T a good person? That would be really sad if it were true. Then I wouldn't want him being with Hermione at all.)
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