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By : CryingCinderella

From TriniMinx on October 08, 2008
Hmm, yea. My friends ex-boyfriend, to answer you A/N, is a horrible man. I mean his mother too. So reading about how Sev tosses the baby aside...yea. That's why I said it'd be best for Harry to have the baby. Because I've seen first hand, its better for a child to be with someone who will take care of it than not. And I thank my lucky stars that my friend did the right thing in terms of her ex.

Though I must say this chapter with her diary is really, rather interesting. Does that mean she went to Russia?

Well, I do hope it ends up better, to say the least. This chapter was good on my nerves. And as I said before, it was too dark for me because it DID hit close to him. So let's just see, yea?

Is it wrong I really hate your Nalina? Not her baby of course, but "pretty, little, dead Nalina" or whatever she is. Ugh, I've decided I don't like her! And I'm glad you killed her off (except the baby of course), lol.

Lordy. lol

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From Angie30 on October 08, 2008
Okay I'm off the pins and needles the foot cream worked lol.. Anyways Excellent chapter, I'm still very curious about what Ginny is up to and why she had to have Hermione reveal she was carrying Snape's child when it was very clear she didn't want him to know. I loved it when Lucius entered the room, I hope he puts the redhead in her place. Look forward to reading more
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From catysmom1028 on October 08, 2008
I like it. Please udpate soon.

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From ANON - sljh on October 08, 2008
ooh, Arabella, wanna hear my theory? hehe, it's probably completely ass-backwards but this is kind of fun....

Nalina is Draco's half sister not via Lucius but Narcissa. In other words, same mom, different dad. Who is the dad? Severus Snape.
Mmhmm. Can anyone say Electra Complex? (Female version of Oedipal Complex) --- Like my squick factor twist?

Yeah, and Lucius has been plotting his revenge on Snape for years. In fact, the "attraction" between the two was perhaps a lust spell/curse or potion. He may have had all sorts of contingencies planned out right down to the tiny detail.

What he didn't expect is a random one night stand between Snape and another witch who would keep her accidental pregnancy a secret from everyone. He also didn't count on Ginny Potter messing up his carefully laid plans, hence how she stumbled upon all of his sensitive documentation.

It could be even more convoluted. What if Nalina was two timing Snape with Harry Potter, and Harry isn't this poor, innocent husband as he seems. What if he cheated first and Ginny found out? What if Ginny was on her way to tell Snape that their significant others were boffing eachother when she ran into Draco and they formed an alliance -- he to safeguard his inheritance and she for revenge or whatever? They get close, they start an affair, etc.. Dear old dad doesn't know or plan on that little contigency either, so he is caught unawares when she meets Draco at his mansion and she finds the "manilla envelope."

Meanwhile, Nalina can't get preggers with Snape's kid for some unknown reason, she just doesn't understand (she doesn't know that she's his daugher and the incest thing is causing her to miscarry?) so she uses a little Harry sperm for her backup plan to get pregnant. (This is my way of making sure it was someone else's kid and taking a little bit of the squick factor out of the equation, LOL). This explains why she's in such a tizzy about having to get married right now!!

That's my ultra squicky ass-backwards, probably way way off theory that makes me do an evil laugh: mwahaha.
I have too much time on my hands today, LOL.

Author, good luck on your assignments and get lots of sleep. School always comes first! Then I'll poke you with that stick! :D
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From ArabellaSnape on October 08, 2008
Bloody Hell! What in Merlin's name are you on about woman? An effing cliffhanger?

You know that I want to find out what those two are up to and now you dangle that damned carrot in front of me and then just yank it away? What is wrong with you?

You are a malicious creature and if I wasn't so damned hooked by this fic I would completely ignore you! But no, you had to write something that is too damned interesting to stop reading!

And Haagen-Dazs is not snooty! I find it creamier than B&J's and it seems they are the only ones that can make a proper Butter Pecan. Which I will have to down by the pint since you insist on withholding my current narcotic of choice.

Whinging about assignments, pfffftt. Save those for when you are at work, and my boss is too busy with his own devices and knows better than to bother me when I am in a snit. Which you have put me in with your manipulative...disturbing...bloody effing, dammit! I cannot even think straight.

Now I shall be forced to actually work while at the office.

Thank you so much for that!

Wicked woman!
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From ANON - Electrical Storm on October 08, 2008

Popcorn is all yours! ;0)
::hands over my popcorn. Whatever will get me new chapters. :0) ::

While we're at it let's just add in the rest of the Hershey and Nestle repertoire. ;0)

Blackmail and intrigue! And with Lucius Malfoy in the thick of it you know this is going to be explosive stuff! Ginny, Draco and Lucius duking it out, I can't wait to see what happens. Hmm, I get the feeling innocent Nalina isn't (or wasn't - sorry - RIP Nalina) as innocent as we thought. And I think Ginny's in way over her head but thinks she can handle it. Yikes.

As I said, I love a good cliffhanger and this is a great one. I'll try to be patient and wait for new chapters. ;0)
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From KellyJCR on October 08, 2008
You really know how to build a great plot. I have taken a reprieve from hovering around the computer and came back to find three more chapters, needless to say I was thrilled. I am so anticipating the next confrontation between Sev and Hermione I'm sure it will be explosive. As for her little side project I have no idea what she is working on. However I can't help but think it will be a crucial part of the story. I was also wondering if we are going to find out about the whole "half-breed killer" comments. Then suddenly to find out that Ginny the little tart, might have blackmailed Lucius. I'm sure she is after money why else would she dump Harry and hatch a sceme with Draco and try her hand at extortion. My head is spinning and my poor kitty is purring so loudly in delight from this story she might go horse. Can't wait for more. Well done!!!!
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From Utopia on October 08, 2008
Good things come to those who wait... and I'll GLADLY wait for some SS/HG when the QUAILITY is THIS good!

Ignore the impatient ones, duckie, write for your own pleasure and not theirs! If you enjoy it, then who's to judge your plot?

ps. I love this, though it is rather depressing to read without a bar of chocolate on stand-by.
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From ANON - sljh on October 08, 2008
Oh yeah, it's always scary shit when Lucius is in the mix. Now it's going to get waaaay harder to find out that information from Draco and Ginny.

There's always so many little skeletons in the Malfoy closet (especially where Lucius is concerned), and I don't think sweet little Nalina was just an innocent bystander. Nope, but that's JMO.

Question about something from an earlier chapter:
"He never mentioned his one night mistake in that muggle club, thinking nothing more of it. And four weeks later his bride to be had announced that she was nearly two months pregnant. He could not have been happier."

Um, I don't know if this was a miscalculation and a teensy weensy continuity error or if it's very much intentional to the thickening plot we see developing in chapter 12, but...

Four weeks later she said she was two months pregnant, means that she was about a month pregnant already when he impregnated Hermione in the bar bathroom. In other words, she should have been a full month further along than Hermione. In other words, she should have given birth about a month before Hermione did. In other words, why was she STILL pregnant at her wedding when Hermione was 39+weeks pregnant? Did she lie about being pregnant and THEN get herself pregnant after they got back together? Does Severus not know how to count to 9? Perhaps someone should ask him to count back 40 weeks from Nalina's due date and then look at the calendar?

Now I'm back to thinking that Nalina's baby would have had red hair and green eyes, LOL. Ahh, poor Nalina -- I pick on her so. She has to live down that bad Malfoy rep that JKR has brainwashed us with.

Okay, I'll TRY to be patient while you are away from this story for a few days, but then I'll get out my virtual poking stick and will nag you for more more more!
Excellent work!
:D
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From Citten on October 08, 2008
oh ouch! that is not good i do hope that draco is going to be paying attenchion. well at least severus has found a possible way of finding her. i wonder now that he has got his interest piquicked how are thing going to be when he sees her now? (totally thinking out loud i will read the answer in do time so just ignore me!) well now i want to know what ginny found i have so many ideas in my head and i know they all have to be wrong! so do update quickly, so i can have some answers! :)
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From chickaboo on October 08, 2008
Uh-oh. This just keeps getting better and better. More please!
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From TenderQuaintWitch on October 08, 2008
Just to throw my hat back into the ring--I'm *glad* Hermoine ran away, it was perfect. And I've really enjoyed the past few chapters.
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From ANON - sljh on October 08, 2008
LMAO.
Okay, Hermione is a wee bit of a dickhead, too. No, I take that back. Just because she doesn't want to be accidentally knocked up with Snape's kid doesn't mean she's a bad sort. Not EVERY female who gets pregnant forms an attachment to their unborn child in the 9 months it's developing, that's for sure. But she had the situation with Snape and guessed his reactions spot on. AND it's clear from her entries that she had no idea that he was getting married or what Ginny's deal was.

The diary lacked any representation of any emotions she's feeling, though, other than anger and sarcasm. Those are more fanon than canon traits, and while I like that characterization, and while she's always been a little bit of a loner, I think her current life situation would have put her into a more angsty state of mind than a little tongue-in-cheek humor. JMO

Please tell me that he is going to make a visit to Draco and Ginny and make them answer a few dozen questions, too. Their motivations are, in some ways, far more important. In fact, their actions are what led to his wedding being crashed and his fiance being hit by a car -- you'd think he'd be shoving veritiserum down their throats. Hermione's motivations seem pretty straight forward: hurry up and have the baby and find it a good home far away from Snape, Hogwarts, Britain, and maybe even in the Wizard World, so that she can get back to her research -- pretty single minded.

More more more more more -- spoil us with 3 chapters today like yesterday!!!!

BTW, I'm happy to be of service in opening up that Pandora's box. Stories that get you interested, even excited or angry, get you thinking, and then get you talking about it because there is just something you've got to put your two cents in about -- I don't do that very often. Rarely, in fact. And like a lot of people, I make little guesses as to what they're thinking or what's going to happen and I know it's just a guess 'cause I'm not the one writing it but I'm guessing or hoping or whatever. You know what I mean? But it's good to get people thinking and talking. About situations, about life. Because some of what's going on in this story, hits home with a lot of people, either personally or through people they know. They can sympathize and empathize in a real way. Excellent job.

Like, I've read a ton of these fics where Hermione has some sort of one night stand, gets pregnant and then waits to tell Snape that it's his. He's always mad at her and everyone always thinks she's wrong for not telling him instantly. No matter how it's spun, she's somehow wrong or bad. Not him, poor old clueless and innocent sperm donor Snape who was just minding his own business when he accidentally fucked Hermione. LMAO

I get tired of seeing people go into automatic where they assume that Hermione is the Bad Guy in this situation because the tragedy appears to be all on Snape right now. But the Big Picture, guys, is that it's never that simple. And she made one really stupid drunk mistake and had to face the consequences and then make the best possible decision that she could. For her, personally, she couldn't go through with an abortion so she decided on adoption. Okay, guys, I'm bummed that she didn't fall inlove with it and want to be the best little mummy in the whole wide world too, but she was trying to be responsible.

The running off thing? Maybe she thought the matter was resolved or that it would keep for three days until she got back. Three days to a researcher who is single mindedly obsessed with finding a cure to something really horrible might do something hair-brained and "absent-minded-professor" like that. Maybe she figured she'd done her bit for 9 months and the baby would be better off not associated with her any more, period. I guess we'll be finding out the answer to that in the next few chapters. ?maybe?

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From ANON - Electrical Storm on October 08, 2008
This just gets better and better. I'm hooked on the suspense! Hermione's diary entries were fanastic, so in character for her. I like that Snape can see that the diary entries show she had no intention of telling Snape about the pregnancy (so she wasn't trying to ruin his life after all) and that it was Ginny's meddling that led to the chain of events. The plot twists are wonderful! I'm no less impatient than anyone else for updates, updates ;0) but like you said, good things come to those who wait and if you reveal everything in the beginning then there's no more story to tell. Draw it out, make it good, nail-biting reading! ;0) Sad to see Harry in such a state and that Ginny left him, but it's very realistic. Would love to see Hermione snap out of it and keep her son - she's a tough cookie, she is - but let's see where the story takes this. I can't wait for more! :0) I love a good cliff-hanger.

::sits back with popcorn and waits for more chapters:: ;0)
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From ANON - me on October 08, 2008
Please don't turn this into a non ss/hg story!

I don't know how you could possibly bring them together but I'm along for the ride...

The longer and angstier (yes, not a real word, I know) the better.

I'm so hooked.

Reel me in!

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