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Reviews for While You Were Sleeping

By : missgranger
  • From CryingCinderella on October 05, 2008
    And they told me that I could be the queen of cliff hangers. Goodness. I do like this start, and I tend not to read stories that are more than one-off's, as I don't have time to keep up with them, but this caught my eye, and you have not disappointed me. You did a very good job of recreating for the reader what it would be like to experience those first moments of coming to after a coma. A moment of weakness when he references her as Hermione, perhaps? It seemed disjointed from the other references to her, and for her to immediately reference him as Severus...it could be an interesting plot turn or twist point if you choose to utilize it as such. My compliments to this start, and I do hope that you update this one rather quickly. I am most keen to discover if there was a relationship between the two of them before she was hit with the curse, or if this marriage came about because of some law enforced while she was under, or if marrying her was the only way he could take her home so that Mungo's wouldn't give up on her like a lost cause. (Sort of like when Sandra Bullock lies and tells the paramedic's she's that guy's fiancee to get into the ambulance with him in the movie you've borrowed your title from) Kudos.
    ~CC
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