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From LadyWinterhartZC on January 24, 2009
hot damn..... I mean...wow....I don't know what to say. What is there really to say?

I am sorry about Hermione though, I hope she's ok. Tobias better be ok too!
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From CarlaRush on January 22, 2009
I just found this story and found it so good that I read all twenty chapters in one sitting. I'm looking forward to more~!
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From LolaDiBlack on January 22, 2009
Oh SHIT!!! that was awesome...MY dragon upset that's hot just to think about it, poor dragon he had to obliate his darling aunt...Draca I'm letting you barrow him for a little while but overall, good chap, I love it...(oh on the last chapter, my goodness that kid is the spawn of satan [well is Bella's spawn pretty much the same], poor toby)

Update soon
take care

Love
Lola

Ps:I missed You
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From margaritama on January 22, 2009
WELL HOT DAMN JAMES! YUMMY - I want a turn I want a turn! I wonder what their babies will look like - LOL :-) wink wink

I can't believe he obliviated Hermione. Actually, I can't believe Hermione ran off, I'd like to see spark of old Hermione who would have given him a piece of her mind then offered to help.

Well nice to see that Draco and Hermione's relationship is progressing "off screen", so to speak. I hope Draco is just as HOT as James, albeit maybe not that much stamina.

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From LadyWinterhartZC on January 17, 2009
ooh,that bastard! I'm going to kill that little spawn of satan for hurting Tobias! He's practically the perfect man, and someone had to go and mess with him! Ohh, they are in for it now. I am coming in there and going to rip anyone even remotely responsible for this to tiny little pieces, then I'm going to regenerate them just so I can do it again!

On the other hand, Phlean's students are so sweet! I could hug and kiss every last one of them for being supportive of him. He needed that, and I wish I could give him a hug and congradulate him for being a hero too.

James is still adorable. I think he always will be. those boys are in for a very unpleasant time when they head to detention. I laugh quietly about it to myself and can't wait to see how it goes.

...I do mean it though. I am going to come in and muder Bellatrix's bastard. Just you wait and see.
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From margaritama on January 11, 2009
I KNEW this was happening on purpose and I suspect I know who Bella's son is.....I know Tobias will be ok (oh how will Sev react). I hope James and Draca catch on now and realize that something is going on. They can't be THAT thick.

I found the Gryff bulling the Slytherin boy a bit reminiscent of Sev being taunted by the Mauraders....was that intentional?

Oh, Draca, help Tobias!
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From distinctlyME on January 11, 2009
From the minute he was introduced...I knew it was Bellatrix's son.

The draught of living death huh? That some serious potion. I'm hoping because it was clearly messed up that I mean nothing TOO deadly will occur.

HE IS NOT ALLOWED TO DIE!!!!!

)=
I'm not being very goo with my reviews am I?
I'm sorry. )=
Life. you know I doubt you need an explanation.

Anyways...this is getting interesting and incredibly sad.
Keep up the amazing work!!
And feel better!
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From smmz79 on January 11, 2009
aahh yeah for phelan he is starting to find a place in the students hearts... and yeah james he really is a great teacher... and i have a funny feeling that damon tardie is bella's lovely son.... and i hope that tobias will be ok... so how is hermione doing... and i have to comment about your comment to my review about draco... he is a malfoy he sticks to what he knows!!! fix things with money
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From smmz79 on January 11, 2009
ohhh mmmyyyy gggooodd what a chap ok so phelan is beginning to be taken in by the students... james is great i love the way he handled the gryffindors... ssssoooo i think this tardie guy could be bellas son.... and oooohhh i hope that they can help tobias... great chap
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From LolaDiBlack on January 07, 2009
more please!!!!

ok that was sad, poor girl, she is so cute is not her fault that HIM! attacked her, she was just curious, and I'm glad to have catched the quote come on Pinky and The Brain were geniouses without a foolproof plan I loved them until elvira came into the picture (curse you Steven Speelberg, I really don't know the spelling of his surname) and well my little heart broke with the poor girl, thank you Sevvie for being the bastard you are!!! and well James I love you, such a little bastard....ta ta for now

take care
update soon

Love
Lola
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From LadyWinterhartZC on January 07, 2009
ok, well I have to feel a little sorry for Rhea, even if this has all happened due to her own stupidity. It's still not fair though, Romulous and Phlean are heros but they're being treated like its their fault. Stupid Greyback. He just has to cause drama.
Snape it so sweet. I think he's a better headmaster than Dumbledore. At least when he says something, you know that he isn't trying to manipulate you into doing something. He means what he says.
Draco's a sweetheart too, trying to figure out how he can help the Lycan community. He and Hermione are perfect for one another.
Man, I've had the same reaction to situations as James. Why is it that when there are things that require you to rush some where, it only happens when you aren't dressed to be in the rest of society? I can't wait to see what happens next and what our adorable "dragon-man" does next.
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From margaritama on January 07, 2009
Um, okay - so Rhea's parents completely disowned her, I'm not sure what I was expecting but that wasn't it. This was a very brief chapter - almost like window panes allowing the reader a glance at the repercussions of this young girl's actions. Oh, very clever putting "Rhea" in Gryffindor (hence the lion reference). She reminds me a bit of Hermione: curious, brave, emotional, strong no doubt.

I don't think this will ruin their plan necessarily, just add a new dimension. Think the wolf-boys will have to remember she's a student should she go into heat and when she changes. Can't let the more beastial side take over now can they? Or maybe they can.

Draco's chapter was strange - caught me off guard. I know there's a reason his POV was given but I don't see it yet. Was it just to show how much he has changed by his reaction and the fact that he's considering Lycan charities (ok just the fact that he gives to charity is an eye-opener).

Am loving Snape - he's just badass. He does what he wants but does it well. Perhaps Hermione should meet Rhea and take her under her wing? Two betrayed souls.

James is a sexy bitch - though I love Draco! mm mm good.
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From smmz79 on January 07, 2009
oh wow we definitely got some opinions in this chap.... a lot of them... ok first i am not sure what to think about bellatrix and fenrir so i will leave it at this.... interesting??? I do love severus and i am so glad that he is headmaster bc almost anyone else would have crumpled already under the stress... oh wow that poor girl she has no one... i wonder what will happen to her??? i am glad that severus is not going to fire phelan and romolus... and sweet of draco to want to try and help werewolf charities... i do love james as well.... he is slightly funny and i like his relationship with his friends they really are an interesting group..... ok i just want to say that i am soooo sorry that you are getting sick i had bronchitis about 3 weeks ago so i understand... get feeling better and i hope that you are able to update soon...
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From LadyWinterhartZC on January 02, 2009
Is that girl mental???!!!! Yes, its a great idea to follow two werewolves into a forbidden zone. Stupid female! Does she realize just how much trouble she was in? Or what danger she put her two proffessors in? Well, at least she's gotten her punishment, but if this effects those poor boys negatively, then I'm gonna have to come in and kick her butt.

Oh, and please update soon, I have to know what happens next.
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From LolaDiBlack on December 30, 2008
Oh Oh Oh!! MORE!!!!

I love it!!

AWW Phelan I love you and You too Romulus It was awesome you kicked HIS butt (you know he might be like beetlejuice, I don't wanna risk it)
and Rhea is a werewolf now, that's more awesome, a girl in the pack, I mean I'm sorry the poor girl had to go and get bitten like that but they have a girl in the pack :) oh and quoting Pinky and the Brain was just freaking genius LOL

Well Sevvie we need to get you into a Anger Management Club it will help you tons (Now I will run along before he sends a hex on me)

Take care
Update soon
(Love YOU James!)
Lots of love

Lola
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