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By : Kooldragon400
  • From distinctlyME on December 29, 2008
    I'm so sorry I disappeared for awhile.
    it's been a horrible couple of weeks.
    I seriously injured myself just in time for Christmas, and then I was home visiting family and got caught up in that and well yes. I'm sure you know how it goes.

    ANYWAYSSS... lol

    quite the few produtive chapters you've gotten up. exciting exciting.

    How very interesting, Bellatrix has a son? huh...why is his last name not lestrange and why has no one noticed? Thats a mystery I wouldnt mind solving lol.

    And Aden. poor guy. Just dreadful *heart*

    and what this with the Rhea girl? Will she be a big key in this story or was she just some odd filler to show the fight between Fenrir and Phelan?
    What will happen with that?

    all sorts of mysteries to solve huh? How long will the wait for the answers be I wonder.

    Good Luck with this thing your going too! I hope you get whatever it is you wanted from it. And be safe!!!

    till next time as always.
    dM


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  • From margaritama on December 29, 2008
    Well, that was a stupid move. Love how you introduce these new characters randomly, though I'm sure purposefully. Hmm, a female werewolf - hope our boys don't fight. I guess once you don't fight the wolf, you have more control, it makes sense.
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  • From smmz79 on December 29, 2008
    nice chap i am sorry that your muse went on a vacation those things are tricky.... i am glad that you are back though... i REALLY liked this chap... very good job i enjoyed reading about phelan and rome and this was very exciting to read about them going against fenrir...
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  • From LadyWinterhartZC on December 23, 2008
    holy ever-loving s%^&. Who would be stupid enough to impregnate Bellatrix Lestrange? ...Scratch that, I'm not sure I want to know.
    Aww, Draco and Hermione were so cute! I adore those two! And I'm so proud of the little first years, loving James as much as I do. I feel bad for Phelan though, I mean, I know there had to be a scapegoat, but still...
    Poor Aden. Jerk, b%^#$. She better not try anything like that with James or I'm gonna have to open up a can of whoop-@$$.
    Please update as soon as you can. I'm anxious to know what happens next.
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  • From LolaDiBlack on December 23, 2008
    Oh My!! Sorry for the delay, my finals were choking the living out of me, well my review to the last 3 chapters.

    I was shocked into complete silence with the Aden's incident, like that's was just morbid, and poor bastard is not his fault his father was such of scum, why are they so prejudice, that makes them no different from the Oldy Rotting Voldy, James you are definitely the man of my dreams, and so much more for standing up for your friends.

    Aww!! the next chapter was just AWESOME!, Dragon-man just fucking hilarious, and then the classes Tobias please never change you are the perfected version of Severus, Phelan well you have a tough luck my friend, we readers know you are nothing like HIM (I'm a little afraid he's like beetlejuice say his name 3 time he shall appear and tear you apart), Draca you are very loving, so cute, then there's HIM and Bella, that's what you get when you assosiate with fleabags like HIM, and well you are a fucking bitch here so you deserve every piece of it.

    And last but not least, you should just KISS al-bloody-ready, like come on we know you have had the hots for each other since hormones and puberty started to kick, glad you are friends now, moving on, James you are a hot, cute, awsome, did I said hot Slytherin Potter and I can't be more in love with you...oh wait I can, well you are brave and bellisimo and....okay sidetracking here, now we know who attacked Aden and well James sort of apologize and WHO THE HELL IS BELLATRIX SPAWN??!!


    Oh love the part that you kept the melting of the piece of crap formerly know as Voldemort and well that my prince, Severus (don't get hasty my lovely dragon-man, he's in the past) survived obviously and kind of help save the day and the world so to speak.

    You know how much I love the story and well Update soon, take lots of care and HAPPY HOLIDAYS!!!

    Misbehave
    Snog and get some loving under the mistletoe

    Love
    Lola
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  • From starrynite45 on December 19, 2008
    Ha? I don't know...Bellatrix/Fenrir isn't my fav pairing, damn it...but now we know they have pup together?! Hahaha. Anyway, I still don't get what she wanted from her plan (since I don't know what's her plan) but I'm sure if I think again I would go crazy as her too!

    I'm glad to read some of DM/HG in this chap. It's kinda big step for them, right? I'm beginning to like James more and more in this story.

    Also, I like that you update very often, which is very fine for me..I check new update here almost everyday. Keep writing!
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  • From margaritama on December 19, 2008
    Yummy pic...you should do images of all The Unseen along with older Draco/Hermione. SO:
    - Bella's son is a student and informant, question: have we met him yet? Is there a clue? Sounds like he's a 6th year.
    - Is Draco a widow? And "Friends" RIIIIGHHT - I say that lasts 2 chapters MAX LOL!
    - Will Draco/Hermione play a bigger role? Does their coming together impact this story?
    - Is the Dark Lord REALLY gone?
    - I want Fenrir to get his comupence already - preferably from his son, who kicks his butt and takes over as Alpha-male wolf
    - I feel like The Unseen are getting their butts kicked, I hope they're stronger
    - Any romance planned for any of our wonderful heroes?

    LOVE THIS STORY - do you have an LiveJournal?
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  • From smmz79 on December 19, 2008
    omg ok so love the beginning with hermione and draco i am glad that they can put the past behind them and be friends... ok so bella did this to aden well i am not surprised she is pretty twisted and her accomplice is young.... has to be her son and of course the ending when he said yes mother is a clue as well.... wow i really am interested in seeing what happens next and i am glad that you trough hermione and draco in there i like seeing where they are at... and a little history on how severus survived very cool.... great job as always and cool hint
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  • From distinctlyME on December 17, 2008
    Oh wow..so what I was thinking was well on the mark eh? Huh...makes me feel good that does.

    I feel so bad for Phelan. Why are you picking on him? Why does everyone else get to be popular and not him? I'm pouting for him right now.
    It's fine. I'll be his friend. I wouldn't judge. Stupid students.

    Well I'm glad at least everyone else is settling in and becoming well acquainted with positive attention.
    Do we get to hear about Hermione and Draco's first days?
    OH I forgot to ask...what does Draco teach, did you tell me? I completely forget if you mentioned it.

    I want to know if Hermione got any male attention the way Draca did.

    Waiting for explanations(patiently this time lol) and more information to gather.
    Till Next Time.
    dM
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  • From starrynite45 on December 17, 2008
    hahaha...I really like that Dragon-man song! Very hilarious and I laughed so hard!

    and thank God! You didn't detail more about Greyback & Bellatrix's scene! I would be shuddering too!

    I don't have more comment on this chapter except..it's quiet entertaining..(Dragon-man, yes!) and it's kinda fill out chapter for the first day of them. Anyway, I like it...(dragon-man again! LOL)

    can't wait for next chapter..I'm beginning to forget this is supposed to be DM/HG!
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  • From margaritama on December 17, 2008
    I bashing my head trying to figure out who the spy is....there are clues I'm sure...ARGH
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  • From LadyBlueEyes on December 17, 2008
    LMAO - "Dragon-man" I loved your take ont eh Spiderman theme! Wonderful!!!

    Well James is well on his way to being a student favorite, but poor Phelan is not. I hope to see people become a bit more accepting as the story goes on. Even though i am sure things will get worse before they get better.

    Draca has much of the male Hogwarts population feigning sickness aleady? I don't know any man who wouldn't want a pretty wpman taking care of them.....

    Bellatrix and Greyback......and he "smells like a fucking wet dog" Ha ha ha......You had me laughing out loud a few times in this chapter!!!

    Can't wait to see whats next!!! Great Update!

    Lady B*
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  • From smmz79 on December 17, 2008
    yeah the first day of school... way to go james of course he is popular already.... and i liked tobias in this chap a lot bc he was very much his father with his own personality thrown in we got the usual speech on potions with flare and draca knows how to handle herself thats good i wonder how draco and hermione are doing i wonder who the insider is hmmm could we have a hint???? pretty please... :-) ok so i am looking forward to the next chap and hearing more of what happened to aden(sorry i do not think i spelled that right) ok great job
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  • From RyGirl824 on December 14, 2008
    Oooh poor Aden! I hope he's going to be ok!
    And those damn aurors! James was just trying to help his friend, and if they hadn't been such a-holes at st. mungos, none of it would have happend!! Weiners. More, soon, please!
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  • From LadyBlueEyes on December 12, 2008
    Ahhh, Ok so I had few chapters to catch up on.....

    Ron's dead at the hand of Greyback, and promises Hermione one favor. Thats interesting, I wonder what that favor will be one day.

    Hermione is at Hogwarts, Draco has reached out to her after Ron dies. So I assume that this is the start of their more frequent interactions.....Can't wait to see where this story takes them.

    I love your Snape....trying to be less abrasive so as not to hurt Hermione any more than she already is =)

    Harry tried to have a decent conversation with James but that didn't work out so well. I hope he learns how to talk to his son. NO matter how old James may be he still needs his father around.

    Aden is hurt?? What happened?? And damn those Aurors!!!! Treating him like so much garbage!! Glad at least one of them let him leave peacefully, even though it was only because Harry Potter is his father.

    Brilliant work, DragonFyre.....Looking forward to more!!! =)

    Lady B*
    xoxoxo
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