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Reviews for The Unseen

By : Kooldragon400
  • From starrynite45 on November 06, 2008
    WOW! When I first read the first chapter I was like "wow, this story is going to be very very interesting!" I rarely read fan fiction that starts with next generation point of view (I mean by story telling from younger side) especially when it's not Draco & Hermione's children and I'm very glad that you make Ron a git! and there's no child between him and Hermione. I like your story line so far and I'm so impatient for next chapter!

    I hope James will get out of that and someone will come to Hermione's rescue soon! Hope Draco will appear more!
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  • From LadyWinterhartZC on November 04, 2008
    Yay! Update! I love of how this story is beginning to come together. Keep up the good work!
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  • From LolaDiBlack on November 03, 2008
    AWWW!! I love it, its way too cute. James will you be my valentine?? *dropping on one knee* he's so manly and protective and Hermione will teach at Hogwarts and Draco too and ohh I want steamy sex and cuteness oh well I simply love it, update soon and take lots of care

    Love
    Lola
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  • From smmz79 on November 02, 2008
    wow another great chap... i love how intuitive james is.... i laughed so hard at snape and dracos banter that was quite funny... nice bit of history to catch us up in here... so draco is going to be the history of magic professor.... hmmm your right i am not sure that this angle has been done before!!! I loved his apology and the proof of his changed outlook... no long speeches or drawn out explanations... well done!!!! loved this chap... oh and i am definitely interested in seeing what ron is doing??? oh and maybe another hint as to the master??? hmm i wonder about lucius could he have something to do with the master???
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  • From RavenElfwitch on November 01, 2008
    This is fabulous, I'm really looking forward to getting to know the other members of the unseen, have an inkling who the master is but I'll wait to see if I'm right. Same for the relationship between Harry and James, bless em. James is in another story of yours?
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  • From RyGirl824 on October 31, 2008
    Oooh, I'm sorry Draco! Didn't mean to hurt feelings or step on toes! ;)
    I really liked his appearance in this chapter, I like that he apologized to Hermione. Can't wait for more - from James and the Unseen, AND Draco!
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  • From RyGirl824 on October 25, 2008
    Yesss! I really liked this chapter, it was very well written!
    Aaand, I'm actually more interested in James and the rest of the Unseen, than I am in Draco right now... Huh, who'da thunk it. :)

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  • From angelnomiko on October 24, 2008
    wow that was awsome ... please please update soon .. later for now

    angel
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  • From bananasforyou on October 23, 2008
    that was just awesome!
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  • From Pyroangel198605 on October 23, 2008
    hmm, you have me interested. I cant wait for another chapter.
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  • From ANON - obamaissexy on October 23, 2008
    Wow, that's all there is to it...
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  • From smmz79 on October 23, 2008
    What a great chap... there is sooo much that i want to review but i am not sure that i will get it all in here... great job btw i love the way you write.. ok so on with the review... first... poor james... i am still so confused as to why harry would treat him that way but after reading a little of what happened i think harry feels guilty and blames himself for james and that is oozing out into his relationship with his son... hmmm so bella has made an appearance.... and is she bad??? is she good??? probably bad but i can never be too sure when reading one of your stories you seem to surprise us.. ok so they were testing and doing things to kids... could the other boy be dracos child??? next so hermione came to james for help i think that is where i would go as well... i am sure that she feels safe with him... god ron is a dick.. he was going to beat her right after she got home what an ass oh i hope he gets his..... i hope james lights his ass on fire... ok and that was very interesting about how the unseen was brought about.. they each want to make a new name for themselves that is interesting.... and i liked how you gave us a little glimpse of how they trained... so james is going to hogwarts, i wonder how you will throw draco into this.... i was wondering if he could be the leader of the unseen he always seemed like the type that would enjoy being called master... but after reading this could it be dumbledore i mean he always seemed to have a way of speaking in a way that made you think he knew more then he was telling and the way that the 'master' was talking it sounds like he knew of something that was happening.... i am looking forward to james going to hogwarts this should be really interesting... god i can not believe ron would not allow hermione to eat... ass.... ok great chap PLEASE update soon i cannot wait to learn more on who the 'master' is...
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  • From LolaDiBlack on October 21, 2008
    AWESOME!!!! I want more more more!!!! like James is Awesome haha wow My speech amaze me but what I mean to say is I like the story very much and so far James Potter has become a fantasy on my mind ^_^ well take care
    and update soon

    Love
    Lola
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  • From bananasforyou on October 17, 2008
    i really hate ron. great chap!
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  • From RyGirl824 on October 17, 2008
    Oooh!! I've a feeling Ron will get what is due him, with James having his ideas of what happened.. and know that Ginny is suspicious as well... Poor Mione.
    Thanks for the lovely update!
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