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Reviews for Naga Inheritance

By : TenariRose
  • From thrnbrooke on October 23, 2008
    Uh oh!!! Not good!!! I soooo need chapter 10!!!
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  • From Chakahlah on October 22, 2008
    I like this story. Please email me if when you update if you get the chance ^^
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  • From sanda on October 22, 2008
    good chapter
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  • From sanda on October 20, 2008
    good chapter
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  • From thrnbrooke on October 20, 2008
    Sooo need chapter 9! Is Sirius on Harry's side? I sooo hope so!!!
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  • From hieisdragoness18 on October 19, 2008
    YAY! sirius is back! im glad.
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  • From Slytherdor on October 19, 2008
    I have enjoyed reading this fic, in spite of the author notes in the middle of the paragraph.
    If You are still looking for a Beta, I am willing to help you. One of my writer's seems to have abandoned her story which leaves me with some time. Feel Free to email me at slytherdor7@googlemail.com.
    If Not, I look forward to your next chapter.

    Slyth
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  • From Selera on October 17, 2008
    I ove it. I don't really know how to get a beta either though no one tells me to get one.. then again in alot of A/N's I make I warn that I have no beta. =P Also I heard of one person that sent their story to a beta to be checked over.. well the beta never sent it back then she found her story under the beta's name on another site. *Shrugs* Oh well, do your best to ignore flames they are just not willing to try and read through errors for the great story you have.
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  • From ChaosgoddessKali on October 17, 2008
    Hi I just want to say I love you fic, I am writer as well so I can understand some of the annoyance to some of the reviews. When it comes to betas I think there is a forum the way I found mine was stating i needed one in my fanfic and asking to email me. That aside while your notes within the story are informative they break the flow, when I was reading I would get into the story and then come upon a not and the thrall would be broken. this is only said constructively.If you want to keep them do just wanted to let you know. This is your fic but as writer you are trying to reach an audience and keep them interested I still am so you are doing a good job.
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  • From thrnbrooke on October 17, 2008
    Sounds like a fun group!!! Sooo need chapter 8!!!
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  • From hieisdragoness18 on October 17, 2008
    you are so entitled to be angry. as for how to get a beta i think you just have to ask someone and then email them your story before you put it up and they make any corrections in spelling or grammar and email it back. anyways i like that there's a witch for harry to be friends with. they will be friends right?
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  • From magentah on October 16, 2008
    I offered you a few suggestions, that was all. Perhaps I should have clarified; the reason I made those suggestions is because, as a first-time writer, you may not know some of these things. They are little things (much like some other reviewers recommended checking out the HP Lexicon to fact/spell check) that are offered ONLY to help you as writer, not to give you a hard time. I apologize for offending you--I'd forgotten that writers tend not to have as thick of skin when it comes to their first work. That is NOT a criticism, it just means I should have approached my comment differently. I don't regret leaving it because I think it's useful advice, but it is certainly up to you whether or not you want writing tips. A lot of good stories are passed over because of little things like that and as I said, I like your fic. I want it to be given the respect it deserves.

    A Beta is an editor, someone who looks over your story (usually on a chapter by chapter basis, but other situations can obviously be worked out) to make sure that the plot lines up, that spelling and grammar are sound, and even sometimes to offer suggestions on where to go or what to do next with the characters. On AFF, there is a section of the forums dedicated to requesting a Beta; follow this link, if you have interest: http://www2.adultfanfiction.net/forum/index.php?showforum=82

    Regarding the tattoos and piercings, I find it unrealistic because most tattoo artists and piercers are unwilling to put a body through that much physical trauma (which is essentially what happens with body modifications) in one sitting. It isn't something you'd necessarily know unless you have tattoos and piercings yourself--even then, if the story doesn't focus on Harry's tattoo process, who needs to know that he went back for multiple sittings to get a piece finished and then touched up? It would take away from the point of the story. Ultimately, it's like you said: this is fiction, and you /can/ write it however you want. I offered information, about the eyebrow piercing, for instance, in case you just didn't know and wanted it to be a bit more realistic. If you don't, then don't. That is certainly your prerogative.

    About the author's notes: I do maintain that putting them in the middle of your chapter breaks up the flow of the story. The more readers get into the story, the more they want to read, and the more they like what they're reading. It's an issue of style and preference, I suppose. A good example of what I referred to can be found here: http://www.hpfandom.net/eff/viewstory.php?sid=13563&i=1 (SoftlySweetly is a brilliant writer and very well-liked in the fandom.)

    Case in point: I offered you (and still continue to--Beta habits die hard) constructive criticism. This is NOT, as you have taken it, to piss you off, but to build strength as a writer. If you don't want it, that's fine, you don't have to take it. I think you're a good writer with a good story going. However, it's your first fic, which means there are bound to be things you wouldn't know to consider as you write. Feel free to email me (it's in my profile page) if you want to discuss any of this further, or if you've taken offense to something I said.
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  • From sanda on October 16, 2008
    good chapter
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  • From hieisdragoness18 on October 16, 2008
    im glad harry is getting clothes. that seems to be the norm in most fics. lol i guess its cause we all know how badly he needs them. maybe like a panther or something for a non magical familiar and maybe some sort of magical snake. it works for harry i think.
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  • From dracoharry4life on October 16, 2008
    I hope Draco is at the club. I was hoping this won't be a Harry joins voldy story. He should start his own side.
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