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By : Utopia

From HermioneMalfoFan on November 16, 2008
Oh Utopia! I feel sooooo bad for net reviewing twice! I loved your updates and it's not that I stopped reading your story. You were just too fast updating! I wanted to go back and reread, and voil
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From Ithilwen on November 16, 2008
So now she's all set for school! Gotten her familiar and everything. Even "met" Mr. Riddle! It's very good that Tom wont be in charge hehe!!

Liked how she suddenly got all "french" when she gets angry. Really cool! And I hope that the assistant wont be there for long!
And now she's met her future BF. Isn't he charming, abit uncomfortable with the elf but. Who has he recently lost? Since he put his mourning robes away recently?

Loved it! Now you have gives us a taste for more with him, so I hope he will be frequent in the story from now on!

And yes, I'm a LOTR fan. I chose the nick for a reason hehe, It is Female and roughly translated means "Luna" In English. I chose it because I love the moon and well the translation of my name didn't exist lol.
And I know what you mean, if you can't write well, then don't!
I think it means the same in both Elvish languages actually, but not sure.
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From carha on November 15, 2008
Another great chapter. Always looking forward to your next update. Have fun on your field trip!
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From ANON - northernmoon on November 15, 2008
Grief and mourning are very difficult to write with sincerety. I appreciate how you are accomplishing that in this story. I'm looking forward to reading more.
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From GammaOrionis on November 15, 2008
I am quite deeply OUTRAGED! APPALLED! SCANDALIZED! AND SLIGHTLY STUPEIFIED! YOU have the AUDACITY to mess around with my Sevvie-poo! I am scarred for life. I'm never going to be the same. After all I did to get his attention...nothing when...I wave my arms around when he starts handing out detentions in class asking him to pick me...when he gives the potion instructions, I say "NO IT'S THOSE DAMN VOICES AGAIN!"...no attention from him! *pouts*

Remus loves me though. We share chocolate and exchange hugs. And more than that...He is my cuddle-wolf.

NOW that that has been covered! I loved this chapter. I love that Hermione got Sev the wand that suited him and that it was the wand that Tom was supposed to get...I love that Hermione got Harry's wand! HORRAY SEVERUS! AND finally Lucius is there. *happy dance clapping hands* I hope Hermione isn't in Gryffindor. I hope that she is a Slytherin so she can have plenty of time with the very HOT headboy. Well, I have my Remus and I wouldn't trade him for anyone.
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From voraciousreader on November 15, 2008
So Severus is her surrogate little brother, including brother wands; Tom missed his chance at the phoenix core, and Lucius is just recently out of mourning? Excellent detailing in the new universe! I love the idea of Adamina still having the wand Ollivander's ancestor sold her, gives an incredible feeling of continuity to the story. Of course, if she's 206, that puts her date of birth at shortly before the American Revolution, doesn't it? Wonder if she has a few stories about Malfoy's ancestors as well.
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From Ithilwen on November 09, 2008
Vultures that's what they are. Those reporters and her so called "family" that only wanted her money!

It was really sad, how people can just take a funeral like that. No respect at all!!

I hope things wont be too bad for her when she comes to the UK.
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From soldiersgirl0709 on November 09, 2008
I dont like Jacinthe. I never understood the need to dress up for a funeral....if I am sad I want to wear my comfy track suit and I want to cry my ugly cry and not wear make-up or do my hair. I want to BE sad, not worried about how I look. Does that make sense? When My Father in law passed on I was 7 1/2 months pregnant and had been on bedrest for months so I never bought alot of maternity clothes. What I had consisted of knit elastic waisted track pants and several tee shirts (My favorite being my Brewed by the Half Blood Prince one).... My idiot spouse dragged me to the mall in a wheelchair to shop for a funeral dress and I thought WHY? Would his dad care more that I was wearing a fancy dress to his funeral or that his grandchild was growing safely in my tummy? (mind you his father was so excited that I was having a girl since his own daughter had died in a car accident 2 years earlier I am leaning more towards the second) But I watched My mother in law primp and preen that morning and thought if it were me, you would be lucky if I even spoke to anyone. I would likely sit there in my track suit like a zombie, probably a drugged zombie.

Sorry about the rant...I guess that chapter struck a chord with me on that note. Funerary practices and customs have always been a spot of interest for me. I took Thanatology in high school and we went to a funeral home for a field trip. It was very very interesting and in college I took several more thanatology classes and did a short internship for forensics with a Medical Examiner. I learned more than you can ever imagine about mortuary affairs, embalming, funeral practices and customs throughout the ages. It was what I originally hoped to do, be a medical examiner, but on the last day of my internship a child was brought in and I knew it wasnt for me after all. As long as the 'patients' were adults I was okay with it, but I broke down at the sight of a child.

Anyhow, darlin', sorry about the long review LOL and sorry I dont do it often, but you know me, I suck at reviewing LOL

Have fun on the field trip and I will talk to you soon!!!!!!!!!

Happy Writing
S_G
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From GammaOrionis on November 09, 2008
I liked it. I felt so bad for Hermy though. I'm not surprised by what people are doing. There will always be those that are sincere and those that are out to make money. I can't wait for Hermione to meet her cousin...I hope the cousin is who I think that it is!
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From voraciousreader on November 09, 2008
Too many funerals turn into circuses. When I was young I remember that when Richard Burton, the actor, died, the reporters were so bad that many of the mourners threw rocks at them to keep them away from his family and former wives at the graveside. Good chapter, and I like the frail aunt already. As for the contract the money-grubber sent, I assume it will be shredded and returned in a howler?
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From ANON - Debby on November 09, 2008
I wonder when Lucius ( or Lucy as I call him in my head, lol ) is going to show up....^^ keep up the good work!!!!
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From voraciousreader on November 06, 2008
Third time I've read it and I still like it. BTW, if Werewolfhime is stalking both Severus and Remus, can I stalk Lucius? I've been looking for a hobby for a while now, and...
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From GammaOrionis on November 03, 2008
I like Gamay...she is such a sweet elf. I can't imagine how stressed that would have made Hermione. Poor Hermione. I can't wait for her to meet good old (um...young) Lucius...He will like her. She will have him for her lover!

Remus is sleeping with me, not being stalked by me! He is a sweetie poo!

Severus is stalked by many. I share him. I am nothing special...he barely notices me anymore...not even when I hum the theme song to "Secret Agent Man" as he walks by in the hallway...it's sad!...or when I confessed my LOVE for him to the whole great hall at the Welcome-Back feast and blow him a kiss...*wipes eyes*...or when I had the Cherubs arranged by Lockhart sing him a love song in front of the Advanced Potions Class...*sniffles*...doesn't even get a rise out of him anymore. *pouts*
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From LaBibliographe on November 03, 2008
Chapter 5: Hermione has been transferred into a very difficult new life, with burn wounds and all her family members dead. She is certainly paying for her second
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From Ithilwen on November 03, 2008
Just read the 3 chaps and I like it so far..

It's very emmotional and dark in the beginning!! But now I hope the fates will make it so Tom wont have control.

And I can't wait to read about a inexperienced Lucius LOL. It will be "refreshing" *g*

And I love Gamay too! She's a nice elf.
And what Wineyard elves wear, maybe they wear different wine coloured cloth, Those working with the red wine grapes wear red cloth and those with the white wine wear some kind of champagne coloured cloth. And Those who work with the other side branches of wine like Rose wear something pink or just plain white lol?

Can't wait for more!
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