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Reviews for Pretty Girl

By : StarKneazle
  • From LillianMarie on September 12, 2012
    oh please tell me that youre planning on updating soon... i know its been a few years but you could update...right?
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  • From mirukarumi on October 22, 2009
    I rly like this story. It had awsome potential. You should totally finish it.
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  • From kazfeist on February 10, 2009
    Well, I can see Draco's plan being picked apart. Is Snape in your story also a double agent and, at heart, Dumbledore's man? If so, I look forward to his ability to snatch victory from the jaws of defeat, given Draco's plan. And, I'd like to see Hermione be the forgiving, kind, compassionate girl we all know and love, as well. :D

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  • From kazfeist on January 27, 2009
    Glad for the update...can't wait to see what happens next. :D
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  • From LiteraryBeauty on January 19, 2009
    I love this story! Seeing it from Draco's perspective gives it an extra taste that is missing from a lot of these types of stories. I really like his internal struggle, you portray him really well! And I had no problem with your depiction of Snape thus far and I'm a huge fan, so I guess you're doing something else right!

    Keep up the great work and I'll be looking forward to an update (of this and all your other unfinished tales of course)!
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  • From ANON - october on January 19, 2009
    lol to the whole thanksgiving thing, so true. And im loving this story so far, its really well written
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  • From ANON - october on January 19, 2009
    lol to the whole thanksgiving thing, so true. And im loving this story so far, its really well written
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  • From on January 19, 2009
    I think you did right by Snape... Draco doesn't know that he is a double agent or maybe in your story he is not... Your the author!!! but I am glad you are back from winter break and I hope it was a good one but the reader in me screams MORE MORE MORE MORE WHO CARES THAT YOU DIDN'T HAVE A COMPUTER PUT MORE UP!!!!! Sorry for my inner reader but wonderful chapter....

    Fallen Star
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  • From margaritama on January 19, 2009
    Holy cow these are my fave lines: "Not for the first time, he realized he was well and truly dead." AND "Eating her would be just fine." ROFL......

    This story is a blend of dark humor, raw sexiness and good canon characterizations. I love the build up and rising tension. How long can Draco hold out before he just f*cks poor Hermione into the nearest wall? Not that she wouldn't LOVE IT!

    I love how it went from this sweet one shot of an insecure girl breaking down only to be mended by the hottest boy in school who supposedly hates her. No, he thinks she beautiful (implied of course).

    We know how this is affecting Hermione emotionally but I do wonder if its affecting her physically. Is she changing? Coming into her own? Has the gorgeous butterfly emerged from her crysallis? Will she? I think apart from how she feels internally (which is an important part to the story), it would only be a natural extension for her to see herself evolving physically: managing her hair (that's not vanity its a necessity), lipgloss, etc. Show the world what Draco sees (though he likes her how she is)....anywhoooo - really like your story.
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  • From ilke on January 19, 2009
    First, I am utterly flattered out of my mind that Claiming Hermione has influenced you. I kind of gasped a little when I read that on your review to reply to kazfiest on chapter 2. But then I giggled when you told her to go read it cause she has been one of the betas for it. Hehehheh. Anyway, I'm all blushy-faced at the compliment and I can't wait to discern in what way it's affected you since the story lines seem to be fairly different. Now, onto the good stuff....

    I love Hermione's complete unwillingness to be something she is not, even if it would give her thing she wants most. ADORE an obsessed and possessive Draco, of course.

    And this line is really hitting me: "would have whispered beautifully heartbreaking things in her ear as he turned her into the girl she wanted to be . . . " The idea that she is ascribing Draco the power to change her - and just with words - feels so... so big. It feels very multi-layered and leaves me with the feeling that I have only begun to see a glimmer of something very rich, very powerful, and somehow important.

    I can't wait.

    Ooooh, more delicious lines: "breathing the same air as he and existing in the same universe he was in. It was how close they were without physically occupying the same space.

    It was how distant they were even though they were mere feet apart."

    I love when we are made aware of the distance between two things, whether it's people, or tables, or two noses. Something about that calculation makes me feel like the air between them is thick and palpable, maybe even moldable, like it's something you can touch. Love.

    Chuckled out loud at this: "He found that once he arrived, he really couldn
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  • From LadyBlueEyes on January 19, 2009
    YAY I was so happy to see this updated! Sorry you were without a computer for so long though, thats no fun!

    So it seems that Hermione has noticed Draco's staring problem. Funny thing about that is thatI believe she's developed a little staring problem of her own. How else would she notice? lol.

    It's interesting that Hermione dreams of him at night, as though she consciously tamps her thoughts down during the day and only at night is her mind free to wander about all the what if's and what could be's while Draco flat out fantasizes during waking hours. Yet another interesting contrast between them.

    Snape noticed! Well really someone had to...all that staring was bound to attract unwanted attention! And Sev was right....Lucius would not be happy at all. Something tells me Snape will become more involved in what Draco does......and helps him as well.

    Can't wait for more....

    Lady B*
    xoxoxo
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  • From CovenmasterOrion on November 30, 2008
    Another Fabulous chapter. I am entranced as to see what will happen next. I hope your Thanksgiving Holiday went well, I suspect you may be a Southern Girl at heart with all your talk of mashed potatoes. Please continue writing. I hope to see the next chapter soon.
    -Kefi
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  • From LittleMissPrincess on November 29, 2008
    This is good
    I like how they haven't strayed far from the original characters yet.
    Looking forward to the next chapter,

    xxo
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  • From kazfeist on November 28, 2008
    Loved chapters two and three...though I was unable to log on to read the second one, as I was out of town. I am glad you've got their emotions on the same train, speedwise. But it's clear this is a story that will come to a head fairly soon. And, since it's in Sixth Year, we've got Death Eaters to worry about, right? Anyway, have a good holiday. Update when you can. :D
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  • From ANON - brayzen on November 27, 2008
    while i really liked your story-- I take offence in your interpretation of what Thanksgiving is about in actuality the first thanksgiving was a celebration for a successful harvest that the pilgrims shared with the native americans. Both sides provided food and feasted for several days. Thanksgiving is not an american celebration of killing native americans. So im correcting your statement of "Fun Facts" cause quite frankly i am appalled that you would even consider that killing anyone would be a celebration at all. and if this is what you have learned about history then you have clearly been mislead.
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