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By : tana97
  • From ANON - Anon on November 16, 2008
    Good chapter.
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  • From mls1971 on November 16, 2008
    loved the new chapter!!!!!!!!! keep up the great work!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - linky4u on November 16, 2008
    Thank you for another excellent chapter. i was really happy when I saw that you had already written a new one. Wow, you update fast. please keep up your good work.
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  • From Severussgrl on November 16, 2008
    lol, another good chapter. I can never find any spelling errors in other people's stories. Must have very good beta's. Anyways, can't wait to read more. :D
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  • From ANON - akaneikeda on November 14, 2008
    more, more, more! i so love this story
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  • From ANON - jadedragon on November 13, 2008
    Charlie is just a pig, he does not love Harry, if I am sure Harry does research he might find out that Charlie may have other lovers, he is just using Harry. He definately was using Harry this time to get to use a sex slave not caring that it was Severus
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  • From ANON - cravedom on November 13, 2008
    Goodness you have gotten a lot done in a short time. I came looking for an update and found four! It is good to see Snape recovering and Kreacher's behavior is very helpful. Charlie on the other hand was a butthead, I mean that threesome would have been so hot but the idiot had to push it until Harry sent him home. Grrrr, I have it when characters mess with my smut.

    Oh, Ron was so cute and full of good humor, and he did get to kiss Snape. Lucky bastard.
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  • From on November 12, 2008
    The twist of Charlie being his "lover" was fascinating. I'm ... well, I don't know. I like that Harry stood up for Severus, but I really wish he would stand up for himself, or at least learn that that is what he really did. It's fairly obvious that the relationship between them is abusive, at least emotionally... Thanks!

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  • From shuluv on November 12, 2008
    cool story. Charlie is an ass. It so clear that he doen't love Harry and is only using him. he hasn't seen his lover in months and the first thing he wants to do is play with a sex slave. come on what a git. I like how story is going so far. I like how you made Charlie so ooc. when I was reading this a thought Draco was his lover. You really shocked me with Charile as the lover. I hope there are more interesting twist to come. please update soon.
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  • From mls1971 on November 12, 2008
    I can't wait to read the next chapter!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - thegrimreaper on November 12, 2008
    I love Harry for kicking Charlie out. And for taking care of Severus.
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  • From ANON - linky4u on November 12, 2008
    Thanks for updating so soon. I think the story so far is really good. Please keep up the good work!
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  • From padme82 on November 12, 2008
    I can see how you'd be nervous about this chapter. I have a chapter coming up like that in my own story so I know how you feel.

    Well, to start I honestly thought it'd be Draco and was very glad it wasn't. Now, obviously this is a Snarry story so you didn't really want to have too much Charlie/Harry interaction but you really did make Charlie very OOC. Which is fine, but the only problem I really saw with it was that you made him a bit one dimensional. Which, again, is probably what you were going for since this is not Charlie/Harry but Harry/Snape but I feel it may be difficult to have Harry depressed and heart broken later on when we really didn't see them happy together in the first place. It honestly just seemed a bit unrealistic for Charlie to act the way he was. He's a grown man, it would make more sense to maybe engage in some kind of threesome activity that Harry would enjoy and maybe be not quite so cruel to Snape if only to get Harry to go along with it.

    Please don't take this as negative criticism. You have a great story here and I only criticize in order to help you grow as an author.

    Something nice before the review ends: It is, of course, very IC for Harry to want the love of Charlie and almost agree to allowing Snape to be violated in order to keep his love. Harry's kind of a sucker sometimes. But I'm glad that in the end, he did the right thing.

    As always, it was still a good chapter and a good story. My criticism is said with my love. padme82@yahoo.com

    -- snow
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  • From dominique1 on November 12, 2008
    i like this story but there's no hope for sev getting better it sucks that charlie just used harryi hope thatharry falls in love with sev and that sev becomes free from this curse the chapterwas good but i hated that harry heart is broken
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 12, 2008
    ....i am SOOOOOOO glad harry dumped that asshole!!! he never calls, never writes, acts EAXCTELY the way a cheating lover acts and before i even knew who it WAS i was voting for harry to dump him! if he had to worry abt. how his lover would react to him HELPING someone, that lover was OBVIOUSLY not right for him and didn't care for him all THAT much if he didn't like/know abt. harry's NEED to save the world complex! when ur scared of ur lover, i rank actually being scared of their reaction as also being scared of them, then that says two things RIGHT away, 1. they OBVIOUSLY aren't as attached/in-love-with you as they aught to be and 2. since one should NEVER have an un justified FEAR OF their lover, that person is so BLATANTLY OBVIOUSLY not right for you! fear does not a loving relationship MAKE! >(
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