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Reviews for Spanking the Ravenclaw

By : twocanz
  • From twocanz on November 27, 2008
    Somatose,
    first, thanks for the review and reading the story, I greatly appreciate that. And thanks for your honestly as well. The basic premise of the story was actually simplier than what may have come across. It was just that Harry treated Cho too delicately in this relationship, and she wanted him to show that he could be rough with her, that she wasn't on some pedestal(I have to stop using that word!LOL). I didn't want it to come across as she now wanted to be spanked and choked all the time, just once in awhile. Every couple, I feel though I know this was an extreme case, need a little spice in their life. She also knew he was capable of it because she knew about Ginny, yet he hadn't tried it with her before. Cho also didn't want to have to tell him to be rough with her every now and then, she wanted him to do it on his own. I think what Cho was looking for was a balance in their sex life. She appreciated the sweet but could also handle the rough, which she felt he didn't think she could.

    Oh, and don't worry about 'making a fuss', I really appreciate honest opinions with decent explainations behind them. So thank you. PWP can be kind of tricky because your limited in what you can write. You should never be limited as a writer, but I was really looking to try and make a one chapter, one shot for the first real time. However, that leaves very little room for detailed background stories.

    Hope you enjoy the next Harry/Cho I come out with! Thanks again!
    Twocanz
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  • From Somatose on November 27, 2008
    Okay, first the good bit. The story is very well written (especially since it's smut-ish). The beginning was especially good and well put together. I particularly liked your use of language ("the epitome of beautiful" and "delicate, precious, innocent pedestal") and your imagery was very vivid. I found some lines brimming with emotion "she told him she understood about lifelong crushes and how hard they were to let go" really made me feel sad and was slightly distressing (for me). I also liked the twist at the end, especially since something between Ginny and Cho was alluded in other parts of the story ("I know you know the spell…").

    The problem I had is with the basic premise since it just seemed illogical to me as to why Cho would like to be dominated and why this seemingly 'perfect' couple with an almost saintly hero indulge in this if they've been satisfied with 'vanilla' and if they really love one another. . I thought that as they were in a serious relationship as you've implied initially, why would sex be the primary objective of the relationship. I have no problem with them 'fucking' instead of making love but I do not see what gratification such a good couple would find in particularly violent sex.

    Sorry if I'm making a fuss out of something that isn't there, but this story seems lacklustre after Paying for his Padestal (which tried to explain Harry and Cho's actions and desires to an extent), and as I said before, I have no issues with the way the story has been written and I actually found it quite enjoyable to read, but it seemed sort of...odd...to me. Maybe I don't get porn without plot or smuts or bdsm. Had Cho wanted to indulge in S&M after the events of Paying for his Padestal, I might've understood, but here it just seems pointless.

    Looking forwards to your next story,
    Somatose.
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  • From ANON - AutumnKate on November 23, 2008
    Great twist at the end! Reading good Harry/Cho stories really make my day! Thank you.
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  • From SSJ04Mewtwo on November 10, 2008
    Hmmm, smut. Can't ever have enough of it. I didn't find that many mistakes, but I still will feel sorry for you.:)
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  • From twocanz on November 09, 2008
    Thanks, Soft! I just wanted to add a little twist in the end!

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  • From SoftObsidian74 on November 09, 2008
    Well, that was rather interesting, and rather amusing...Cho teaching Harry how to dominate her just the way she wants, only to learn that the domineering Ginny was her teacher. Ha. funny...good job.
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