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By : iluvmysato
  • From ANON - red713 on March 19, 2010
    Thanks for the new update! :-)

    I'm not sure I understand Harry's reaction in this chapter. He yelled at Severus, punched him once, and made that cutting remark about Lily - it's just not extreme enough. Severus seems to still be in denial about what he did ("It wasn't rape, but it wasn't anything else."), so HIS reaction and thoughts on the issue seem really in-character and appropriate. I can even understand that Harry would help Snape when the man collapsed; Harry wouldn't let someone die if he could help it. But offering to play nurse to the man who had just raped him - assist him around the house and help with his bath? It doesn't make much sense. I'm interested to see what Harry's "delayed reaction" is going to be, once the shock is gone and he's had time to think things through.
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  • From mrequecky on March 19, 2010
    Yippieh! Loved! I always watch out for updates, I love this story so much!
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 19, 2010
    Note: to disagree with 'Gryfflebabies', you need more practice at writing, and to develop your style. It comes across as if it was written by someone too young to be on this site. (If English is your second+ language, I appologise)

    And, whilst I hadn't noticed a lack of warning, I have been reading this chapter by chapter, so read the warnings at the beginning a long time ago. A N/C warning would be a good idea.

    The kids seem to be well-written, though James seems to be acting very like his name-sake ... even though he only has Harry and Ginny (whom we assume to be kind) as influences. It reeeeally doesn't tie in with the story and makes the whole thing seem very two dimensional. Even more so than the lack of character development. Though your initial ideas were very good, you just seem to have run out of them, so it seems like nothing has been happening since Snape started being mean, Harry started being angry/sad and the kids started to get revenge. Which was a long, long time ago in fanfic terms.
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 19, 2010
    It's a good idea, but they're really quite out of character. Kudos for unique story idea though. You just need some character development, maybe a review to try to get their characters closer to those at the end of the book.
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  • From ANON - Dalou28 on March 17, 2010
    Hello,

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  • From ANON - Dalou28 on March 17, 2010
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  • From ANON - Dalou28 on March 17, 2010
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  • From ANON - Dalou28 on March 17, 2010
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  • From ANON - Dalou28 on March 17, 2010
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  • From ANON - Dalou28 on March 17, 2010
    Hello,

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  • From ANON - Dalou28 on March 17, 2010
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  • From ANON - Dalou28 on March 17, 2010
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  • From ANON - Dalou28 on March 17, 2010
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  • From ANON - Dalou28 on March 17, 2010
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  • From ANON - Dalou28 on March 17, 2010
    Hello,

    Thank you !

    Severussement v
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