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Reviews for Where do we go from here?

By : jasminejoanleigh
  • From angelnomiko on March 16, 2009
    wow that was awsome ..please please update soon i would love to read more .. later for now

    angel
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  • From cathyhester on February 25, 2009
    Just found your story and very much enjoying it. Will be looking for updates.

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  • From bookgeek on February 06, 2009
    I really like this story. I love when Hermione has a hidden secret and powers.
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on January 23, 2009
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From Heidi191976 on January 20, 2009
    Excellent. I look forward to reading more.
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  • From soldiersgirl0709 on January 16, 2009
    Chapter 5:


    This is the best you have done. I am going to assume that either A) you slowed down and took the time to think it through and write it out without the rush or B) you got a really good Beta reader to look it over and help you out. At any rate, which ever one you did, keep doing it. Good job.


    S_G
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  • From jlclark on January 16, 2009
    Excellent!! I cannot wait to read more. I kind of like this less confident take on Hermione since she is usually so head-strong and bossy. Keep up the great work and please update soon I want to know what is going on with the "Trio".
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  • From Heidi191976 on January 15, 2009
    Excellent. I can't wait to read more.
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  • From soldiersgirl0709 on December 31, 2008
    Hello Jasmine.....


    Alright, so I will begin by acknowledging your improvement, and as you go on you will improve even more, but you still have a long way to go. The story has so much potential but you seem in a mad rush to post it. Why not just take it down and take your time and post something that you can be proud of? I personally do not begin posting until my fics are complete. I usually run it by 2 people before I post it, not beta readers but they will let me know if anything is off, and still there are type-os, thats fine, no one is perfect and errors are expected without the use of professional editors. Your story is riddled with them from the summary on....you REALLY REALLY REALLY should take up one of your readers on their offer to Beta read for you hon. I want you to keep writing, and I truly understand the feeling that if you dont hurry and get it out there it will leave your head, I also understand the excitement to have others reading your work, but wouldnt you rather give them something thats easy to read and that you can be proud of? Dont ignore the constructive criticism that the reviewers are offering you, they mean well and they WANT you to succeed and put out a good story.


    Happy Writing,
    SG
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  • From ApollinaV on December 31, 2008
    I did not get on the 'bash jasmine bandwagon' because it seems like you have a lot of negative reviews and that's frustrating and demoralizing for a writer. I don't want you to give up. With every chapter you write, your writing will improve, but it takes conscious effort. You have several reviewers who have generously offered their time and talent to beta your fic. I would take one of them up on the offer and use it as a learning experience. Betas and reviewers can point out consistent mistakes. If you know where your problem areas are then you can become a stronger writer by learning from them - even simple things like capitalizing the personal pronoun 'I'. But reviewers shouldn't have to point out mistakes this glaring. Ideally your piece should be polished enough that the grammatical errors won't detract from your story. After all, you want people to read and review your fic for the content of your story and not the poor quality of your writing. I know it's agonizing to work on polishing a chapter when all you want to do is hit the publish button. Trust me, I'm a very slow writer. Just becuase I'm posting now doesn't mean I haven't been working on my fic for nearly a year. Take pride in your work and take time in your editing. A final piece that is well put together and readable is much better than hastily published chapter notes. Your reviews will improve with the quality of your writing. AFF is a very supportive environment. Everyone wants to see you do well. We all love reading good fics. Give us a good fic Jasmine. Post something you're proud to publish.

    And for heaven's sake - correct the spelling errors in your Title and Story description! First impressions count.
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  • From EnteralDarkness on December 31, 2008
    I like it. Can't wait for more. Please and thank you.
    And Happy B-day!!!!!! ^~^
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  • From tairensoul on December 30, 2008
    Do you need another beta-reader? There are quite a few grammatical errors in here that make it hard to read. Email is abrook@agnesscott.edu
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  • From Heidi191976 on December 30, 2008
    Excellent. I can't wait to read more.
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on December 30, 2008
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From Citten on December 30, 2008
    HAPPY BIRTHDAY! i will. question though what was the name of the story that you posted before that is now this one? i love the story and i do hope that it will be regular updates. :) can i ask you to do one thing. would you please seperate each persons statements and not have them grouped in a paragraph, please? :) thank you! doing it like how they are done in published books, it makes it eaiser to read. i do hope that you get everything you want for your birthday and have a great day! :)
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