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Reviews for Just Around the Riverbend

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From ANON - valynderia on October 30, 2014
Your sorry was a delight to read. It had me laughing and at one point tearing up over the long wanted Remus meeting Teddy. Your character development was amazing and you kept their personalities together. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this and I love long stories so again you are amazing with your words. :) :) :)
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From ANON - jkw625 on February 15, 2013
It may seem strange to get another glowing review years after this was first published but what can I say...better late than never. I love your OCs both Daisy and yes even Phelen. Both are well drawn with inner logic and appeal. Hope Phelan makes a turn around. Isn't the point of much of this kind of fiction that change is possible? Severus with a toddler is in fact hilarious. Kingsley is right, this is a great opportunity for him, for them both. Not everybody needs to be paired off romantically . Will you be giving Pansy a great big comeuppance? I certainly hope so. Draco! For shame. Just how self centered are you? So, OK, his father did mess up the family name and he doesn't know Daisy from Adam but...selfish much? Looks like I won't be able to ration myself and make this last longer. Please keep writing. You have real talent.
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From ANON - dira on December 16, 2012
now i gotta go buy some, loved it/
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From ANON - CalGem on February 19, 2012
Yays! I just finished reading the whole thing while waiting for the next installment of your latest tale, and i must say, I L-O-V-E-D it!!!
Keep up the great work!!!
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From genjuro33 on August 23, 2011
Chapter 31 - so damn HOT!! more please....
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From ANON - Fiona on August 08, 2011
I like the story, but I think Hermione is too OC I don't think she is the type of girl that would get so emotional about Valentine's Day maybe it's the pregnancy hormones, in the books she is 'one of the guys' when she is with her 2 male best friends and she is too 'girly' in this story. Daisy is too emotional too, when I was a teenage girl I don't remembering my friends and myself be that emotional, I understand that her parents are dead and everything and that she has teenage hormones , but I feel it's a tad too much. Otherwise I find this story interesting and a joy to read!
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From krissybear on July 28, 2011
*SQUEAL* that story was so good! i love the way you ended it! i started crying when serena got bit but it all worked out *sniffle sniffle*
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From ANON - Anon on March 15, 2011
This story is great! "Jed And Forge" LOL Just too funny!
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From ANON - Dawn on February 23, 2011
Wonderfull story!! I laughed,I cried very satisfying to the end.
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From shadowchsr on January 28, 2011
Hello, I have been reading your story so far and have enjoyed it very much. I thought the premise for Lucius and Hermione was pretty original and it was interesting how you added additional characters like Grayback's son, and Severus's new parenthood. I also liked that you didn't overly stress or continuously bash Ron once Hermione broke up with him. As much as, I'm not fond of Ron, the attacks on his character in the long run can get very cliche and it's a relief to see you not going through that avenue. I will admit at times to being a tad frustrated at the lack of interaction between Hermione and Lucius at times, but that's mostly because I'm such a fan of their pairing in general. I do apreciate the dual storyline between Daisy and Phelan as well as Hermione and Lucius.

I will say that I am uncomfortable with Daisy being blood bonded to someone at such a young age. She's 13, had never even been kissed before Phelan and now she's bound to him for the rest of her life. I don't have anything against them falling in love down the road but to do so at such a young age seems rushed and like her chances to explore crushes and light romances before having a deeper one is robbing her of that experience. I know because of the loss of her family and Phelans own harsh upbringing that both of them are probably a lot more mature for their age, but i feel like to some degree they've been robbed of their choice. Not to mention that Phelan did not voice the same love that Daisy felt, just affection. And the joint living quaters at Hogwarts also concerns me, despite Phelan's promise to wait until she is 16. I know in this day and age, teens can become intimately active pretty young but that has always sat wrong me me, but maybe that's my own prejudice. I never had a boy look twice at me while I was in school, or least not that I knew of and was often picked on or made fun of so I got a late start when it came to boyfriends. And what also concerns me is the whole lack of freedom to grow and make a choice as she matures further in life. In a way it almost seems like the bonding was there as a reason so Phelan could have the opportunity to go to Hogwarts even if not to take regular classes.

I do hope that with Daisy at hogwarts with Phelan, then we can see a little more focus on Hermione and Lucius's realitonship. At this point, I'm almost certain she's pregnate and that's something they'll both have to talk about. Not to mention Draco needs to really alter his views of the world. I'm guessing the pain of what he's been through is making him cling to old views and habits out of reflex and comfort because otherwise I can't see why he'd hold to pureblood bigotry when Lucius has been so open minded in this story. Usually, it's the younger generation who's willing to change first. I hope to see some evolution of his character soon as he's feeling very one dimensional right now.

A few other things I felt a bit odd about. When Harry had his nightmares, Daisy made him a dreamcatcher to stop his nightmares and it worked. So why didn't she try to make one for herself to stop the nightmares of her parents death? Is she punishing herself for surviving? I'm also surprised that nobody has looked into any kind of grief counseling or mentioned it for anyone, aside from Harry who refuses despite all he's gone through. And with Daisy being orphaned the way she was as well as having to adjust to a new country etc, it makes little sense that the subject was never breached. If nothing else it may have helped her nightmares and any kind of survivors guilt. I know I went through my own feelings of guilt and lack of worth when my elder sister died and I was 27 when that happened. And it wasn't even anything as sudden as and accident.

I hope to see more about the effects of Hermione and Lucius combining magic in the future chapters. Though I have to admit, when the dome formed around the werewolves, instead of them trying to breach the dome, part of me asked why Hermione wouldn't have tried to burrow up under the dome. I'm sure the building had lower floors or a basement and it would have been easy to do create a new entrance. Unless the spellcaster thought to shield the floor which was never mentioned. Granted it wouldn't have required the blending of magics, but it makes sense for Hermione to come at problems from new angles. She's the one in the books who not only created charmed coins to let the DA know when they were meeting but also created a binding agreement that would curse whomever broke their vow. She's very good at coming at a problem sideways.

I will also admit that I was upset that the werewolf who created the shield was destroyed imeadiately. He was a prime example and arguement to show what the wizarding world does to werewolves is wrong. He had a successful career and life until he was bitten and was blacklisted and didn't have any other choice but to join Greyback or another pack on the fringes of society. His brilliance made him too dangerous and he was put down like a rabid dog and I saw very little outrage from Hermione on the situation. And that just sits wrong with me. maybe that was your intention to rile up the reader but I saw so little response from Hermione that I was confused by her lack of action. Though maybe I'll see that in future chapters later on as well.

I know it probably seems like i'm picking but I am honestly just trying to be constructive and let you know what I think and feel. I still really do like the story and will continue to read it to the end. I hope you take my comments as things to consider in the future works that you write. Please do take care and I look forward to finishing your story.
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From ANON - loisa on January 22, 2011
I can't believe the story is over :( even though the ending seemed abit rushed to be finished i still loved the story none the less. Thank you for writing this amazing story
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From alina290 on January 19, 2011
I am not at all alright that this story has come to an end. You did wonderful job with all the characters. You brought twists and turns to this story that were unexpected and surprising. I salute you in your endeavor and look forward to reading more of your work with my favorite characters. Thank you so much.

Liz
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From serinblackmoon on January 19, 2011
Beautiful story! I can't wait to read your next one!!!!
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From margaritama on January 15, 2011
oh what a lovely ending...it was well done and filled with tenderness....what can I do to get you back to the Unseen...happy to bandy about ideas.

Hugs and thank you.
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From ANON - alina290 on January 13, 2011
Poor Serena. You keep me on pins and needles here, but it is my fault. The next chapter is up already, but I don't have internet so had to wait to post my review and read the next chapter. Thank you for your work.

Liz
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