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Reviews for Harry's Slave

By : Judie
  • From dominique1 on January 14, 2010
    hey what happen to harry's two son i know time rewind so harry and herosons are not born yet but at last let harry and hero and draco be re back together finish all your stories i love them
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  • From NightStalker22 on June 01, 2009
    I've only just started to read this, and so far so good for the first chapter... I love a Dom Harry! And as far as I'm concerned theres not enough of them so thank you for making one :) Take care and keep up the great work!
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  • From lauriscrow66 on May 01, 2009
    its a good story.
    hows the new chapter coming along ?
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  • From Altherin on February 02, 2009
    Oh dear... I feel disappointed.

    This story actually had so much potential. It could have been a fantastic story with an intriguing plot and a dramatic tale. Unfortunately I found the way it was written to be terrible. Of course I could have stopped reading it but against all odds I held out hope it could maybe get better. It did not much to my disappointment.

    I will write a few of the things that bothered me. I could write more but I'll mainly mention the major problems.

    From the way you write, I am sure you are underage and shouldn
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  • From Jan on February 01, 2009
    Sequel please ^_^


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  • From Jan on January 27, 2009
    *sighs* Once again, I think this story is all over the place.

    Update chapter 16 soon.

    Jan
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  • From POOHBEAR74 on January 27, 2009
    still love it !
    can't wait for more!
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  • From Rokkis on January 26, 2009
    Ah! How lovely! Harry watched Heero puke his guts out, but the second he smelled breakfast he left without a word of concern! Lovely! I have drawn two conclusions from your pathetic rambling...
    The first, English must be your second language, and although there are surprisingly few spelling errors, you need a proper course in fictional writing, especially dialogue and the use of synonyms. *whimper* ;p
    And secondly, you are most likely... maybe fourteen years old, which scares me somewhat considering this is AFF.net and you really are too young to be thinking, let alone writing about mutilating newborn babies!
    The plot is actually somewhat interesting, except the whole VOldie's son, sent back in time to become a vampire without the need for blood thing. I might just borrow your plot-bunny sometime. The thought about Harry finding a Master Vampire enslaved is intriguing, but not the way you've done it.
    I will NOT be finishing this story, and I urge you to rewrite it with a proper Beta!

    Cheers!
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  • From Rokkis on January 26, 2009
    "Heero whimpered and finished the dishes." You do know that a Thesaurus is NOT a dinosaur right??

    Cheers!
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  • From Rokkis on January 26, 2009
    Shudder! What the bloody hell?
    Why is Harry acting like this? Hitting Draco when he clearly states later that he knew he came from an abusive home. And his behavior towards his own slave is too OOC and random, not to mention irrational. Further more, you should consider researching D/s relationships and slavery some more. I really don't believe that Heero would have gotten away with whimpering every time he was hungry, cold or wanted attention.... And what about blood? Is he a vampire or not? Madame Pomfrey didn't even address the issue?
    Your characters are too shallow, and there is no insight into why your Harry is acting like he is!

    Cheers!
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  • From POOHBEAR74 on January 23, 2009
    wow!

    love it!
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  • From MinervraMcGonagall on January 21, 2009
    I was actually confused...
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  • From POOHBEAR74 on January 21, 2009
    nice twist!
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  • From POOHBEAR74 on January 19, 2009
    I love it and this is a great story!
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  • From Jan on January 19, 2009
    Intriguing, very intriguing... How did Draco go from hating Harry, running away and being raped and beaten into submission, to falling in love with his Master?

    Please update chapter 12 soon ^_^

    Jan
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