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Reviews for Harry's Slave

By : Judie
  • From Jan on January 18, 2009
    This story has great potential to truly be a great story. But there are some parts that are questionable... like how they leave the house and left the babies alone in the house with no one watching over them, and if you're going to tell me that the house elves watch over them when Harry and his slave/'s are gone, then where are they? I never read about them being anywhere around the house since the beginning! Another thing is that the day seems to fly, one moment they just woke up and ate breakfast, next, one goes to the room, and notices that it's already dark outside, and goes to sleep... he just finish eating breakfast! How is that possible? I'm not trying to be a B***h, I'm just trying to help out. Try and find a beta, to make it more easier and smoother to read and comprehend.

    Please update chapter 11 soon ^_^

    Jan
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  • From POOHBEAR74 on January 18, 2009
    Another great chapter!
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  • From POOHBEAR74 on January 18, 2009
    this is a great story!
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