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Reviews for Cloudy Skies and Heartache

By : wildstarchild
  • From Yarou on June 05, 2009
    That last chapter made me so sad... I really do like your story and I want to see another chapter up soon. :) But here are a few things to work on. Detail! It's so important in a story. Emotion can be built up so much better with more insight to the characters thoughts and musings. And when you have a character yell you shouldn't make it all in caps lock. It should just have the exclamation mark at the end and character action in between. When Sirius yelled at Remus for "raping him" in chapter four you should have had Sirius's facial expressions or hand motions or body motions or what have you, in the text. We can infer and imagine as readers but it makes for a better story sometimes for the writer to do it themselves. But that's just my opinion. Thank you for these past two chapters and I can't wait for chapter six. Keep up the nice work. :)
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  • From Veracityrules on May 09, 2009
    Just found your fic today. Love the story, but just a request please. Longer chapters!!!!!!!!!!

    Can't wait for next update.
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  • From TheGingerLady on March 08, 2009
    OMG!!! Poor Remus!!! *hugs* waahh I wanna know more!
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  • From alittlenothing on February 12, 2009
    I think that may be the hottest S/R sex scene I've ever read.
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  • From Yarou on February 10, 2009
    You're welcome. :) This chapter was interesting as well but I felt like you could have expanded more with the whole... Bathroom scenario. Put a little more narrative from Remus and what have you. But I enjoyed it and when it comes right down to it that's what matters I think. Anyway, I look foreword to seeing what you'll be putting up next. So keep on trying and keep on writing. I'll be waiting for course. ;)
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  • From Yarou on February 06, 2009
    Hmmm... Interesting. -nods- Very interesting. Continue?
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