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By : Mamacita

From fairytopian on April 10, 2009
So far, great story, most characters in character, original idea. But what happend to george?Maybe you already touched on that and i wasn't paying attention.But you would think she'd like a nice twin sandwich?Yummy!

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From SalonKitty on April 10, 2009
Aww, poor Lucius. I'm having a hard time feeling any sympathy for Draco, however.

Liked the boys all crowding around Harry's bed in the morning and Ron trying to be the experienced guy was funny. So very Ron. And Fred's ribbing is always a hoot. Wonder when Harry is going to be called on again? Will Bella be a little wary of his mad skillz, lol?

I always like it when Narcissa and Lucius are really hot for each other in a story instead of the fanon notion that he beats her or some such rot. I imagine their sex life is smoking. Nice bit of intimacy there.

Then of course, there's that favorite trope--Lucius, tinker tailor soldier spy, etc. Yeah, that works, but I felt a little worried that he was revealing his secret to his son in the castle walls. Isn't he concerned he might be tapped? And Draco, who I always see as that effete, small-minded snob had to find his way into the harem, huh? How disturbingly incestuous. I don't doubt Malfoy's frantic for his son. But please, if you must force the ferret on us, please keep his hands off Harry. Unless it means he's going to get seriously punished for it.
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From Pete91888 on April 10, 2009
Interesting chapter.
Does Lucius really dislike Harry or is it all part of the show? Will we get anymore insite as to how Bellatrix felt after she woke up from her orgasem induced sleep?
Thanks
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From Pete91888 on April 05, 2009
Finaly a harry bella scene. That was really funny I couldn't stop laughing Harry thought he licked the queen to death. Great chapter until next time. I wonder if she'll be mad? Bellatrix is a very hard girl to read.
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From SalonKitty on April 05, 2009
Lol, I always knew that Harry would take to sex like he did to flying. The kid's just intuitive about those kinds of things.

Nicely done. I like Lucius getting hot for Harry and then finding his predicament so amusing later on as the boy panicked. Ate the Queen to death, eh? Only Harry.
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From Pete91888 on April 04, 2009
Awsome chapters. Just a little dissapointing that we have to wait another week to read harry bella interaction. I also noticed your reference to Narcissa good to kinow that they are loyal to one another. Although in the actual series I didn't really get that impression of him. Anyway good job keep up the good work.
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From SalonKitty on March 27, 2009
Lol, I can't believe she kept Justin Finch-Fletchley.

Well, it's official. I am now completely smitten with the Keeper of the Harem. Thanks be the gods that the boys have him there to keep them occupied and sharp. I really liked how he got uncharacteristically stern with Ron trying to drive the point home with his son. Bit of tough love, there.

I'm surprised the boys haven't fixated on Harry, themselves. It's got to be obvious to all involved just how much the Queen will be requiring his services. Glad that you brought up her sadistic tendencies and roles in the past during her marriage. It will be quite interesting to see where her desires take her with all of this young flesh at her disposal. I am really curious about their "slave-wear", too, and wonder just how much leather Harry will be wrapped in. Will he get the full treatment? I have a picture in my mind of Bella on her throne with Harry on a leash, sitting at her feet like a good pet.

You did a good job of getting us primed for next week. I can't wait!
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From SalonKitty on March 27, 2009
Oh, Mamacita...I LOOOOOOOOOOOVED IT!!! Worth the wait. Glorious writing, as usual, I bow to your talent.

Let's see, where to begin. First off, enticing the boys by having Imperiused Slytherin girls on hand was inspired. Bella sure is a dirty player. I love that all the boys reacted so in character. Ron losing his wad first was expected, Fred's chagrin changing to what-the-hell-why-not made sense, and Harry's resistance was perrrrrfect (I'm Bella-trilling like mad over here). Being in Harry's head as he shrewdly navigated the scenario was lovely. Gods, I love that boy. You put us right in Bella's lustful expectations, however, and I can live vicariously through her as she begins her "education" of the hero. Oh, savoring his torture all for our delectation--sorry, Harry, but you're everybody's favorite slave.

My crush for Arthur continues to grow. His reactions are so real, and his inner apology to his Mollywobbles was absolutely lovely. In fact, the humor in this whole chapter was fantastic; such wit and panache. I felt bad for the parents having to endure the humiliation of their children, however, and I hope that Daphne's father doesn't have to see his daughter in too many compromising positions. I fear that Arthur should probably get used to it, though, you know he's going to be seeing plenty of action with his boys.

Lastly, the way you depict Bella's affected boredom and then zeal to have the Boy Hero in her clutches; her salivating at the thought of claiming virgin territory; her strong attraction to not just what he symbolized but his physical self, all rang true and created a perfect account of the power-hungry, sexually dominating, older woman. She's been a patient supporter to a mad megalomaniac and now it's her time to make the rules. She's got gusto, no doubt about it, but she's also pretty freaking smart and not as crazy as everyone thinks. Great, great characterization. Can hardly wait for the boys' further indoctrination.

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From Pete91888 on March 27, 2009
Awsome chapter as always. One question pooed into mind though. Is Harry going to enjoy his time with Bella or is she just going to take him against his will?
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From SalonKitty on March 21, 2009
Awww, I love Arthur! His attitude is so great, trying to make the best of a situation and still being a caring parent against insurmountable odds. His pain is my pain.

Anyway, I must have been in a pissy mood last week, Mamacita. I read my review again after reading your notes, and boy, I was kind of impatient, eh? I think it's just the waiting a week, and for the reader you're building up a lot of expectation for the good stuff. It doesn't have to be about sex, necessarily, I just love Harry as a character and am eager to know what's going on with him. Plus, your writing is tremendous, so I am very curious to read how you describe his meetings with Bella. They are both so rich and great to play with. I can't understand why this pairing in particular is not used more often (in terms of sex, not as a romance, I mean).

I think your Ron is wonderful, too. So committed to the moment and worried about his belly. It must be so unnerving for them all to be stuck in that dungeon in total darkness. It's practically a sensory-deprivation chamber. I suppose Fred's antics are at least welcome in that it takes the boys' minds off of the bad stuff.n Oh, and that Marshall was making me nervous, and now we find out he's gay, what does that mean for the eunuchs? I can't imagine Arthur will feel comfortable knowing that his fellow slave is slobbering over his boys. Man, hard times ahead (heh, except for the eunuchs).

Of course, after your teaser for the upcoming chapters, I am now foaming at the mouth with anticipation. Way to go! I can take it. I'll be waiting for that scene in the Great Hall with bated breath. Till Friday!
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From ColdWaterFairy on March 16, 2009
I'm loving it darling. I just finished chapter eight and I'm breathless for the next chapter. I'm just waiting for you to post chapter six so I can leave my thoughts. Keep up the good work.
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From SalonKitty on March 14, 2009
Uh, well, yeah. That chapter was exposition hell. Sorry, but the tour would have gone down a lot better if we could have at least spent a little more time with the boys. Maybe try to break it up a bit better next time you have cause to write a set-up like that. And I don't really want to think about Arthur Weasley receiving an enema.

Bella is certainly the cruel one. She's going to insist that the boys in her harem have to lounge about naked bored shitless while they wait for her summons, but they are not allowed to touch each other under penalty of death? Wow. Way to thin the ranks. Even if they may be staunch heterosexuals, a little mutual masturbation never hurt anybody. I guess they'll just have to watch each other for their amusement. It will be interesting to see how you portray their reactions to being used as sex slaves once you actually get to those scenes.

Your story is starting to remind me of a lot of the "Sleeping Beauty" series and the genre of erotica it was based on. However, I really like your idea of subverting the traditional idea of a sheik's harem and making them all men to please the Queen. Judging by the strict rules and enema bags, I take it Bella is not going to just lie back and let them have at it.

Still interested, but give us something a little more next time, maybe. I don't mind you setting up your plot, just don't bore me while you're at it.
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From Pete91888 on March 13, 2009
Good chapter.
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From ColdWaterFairy on March 07, 2009
Oh no, Arthur got "sized up" byBella. She is one dirty witch. I had to give a head nod to her feminist rant, I couldn't help myself, even though she's a crazy as a shit house rat. Not to give too much away but I had good chuckle at Lucius's instructions to practice on themselves. I wonder if you will being writing the enuchs thoughts as they "prepare" the slaves. I can't wait for more.
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From SalonKitty on March 07, 2009
Mamacita, you are a master. Talk about foreplay. I can hardly wait for the main event to begin---namely Bella summoning her new concubines. The thought of this Bella sexually and mentally torturing Harry is a powerful image.

I loved how you described Arthur's mindset and his faint amusement at Bella's re-imagining. The way she tossed him off to his embarrassment and consternation was deliciously done. I also thought his philosophy was perfectly captured and succinct.

Anyway, I'm like Bella now with the squeeing and spinning. Meanwhile, I wonder what Hermione and Molly are up to? Actually, no I don't, I just want to get back to Harry.

Til Friday!
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