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From TheOsiris on June 12, 2009
WOW this story was so awesome. I loved the way you really made the characters come alive and be real. I really can't say enough about your awesome writing skills and your skill a plot at weaving the plot together. Several times I thought the story was progressing one way and then it moves another. I honestly couldn't stop reading. Masterfully done,
Osiris
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From Pete91888 on June 12, 2009
Good ending good chapter. Not much to say except that if you ever decide to write another Bella Harry story let me know. As far as your origional story is concernd.... I'm trying to get through it so that I can give you a review. It's just so busy around at home and I havn't had much time or patience. Talk to you later.
Pete
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From SalonKitty on June 12, 2009
Everybody got theirs, indeed. Though, I am left powerfully curious about this 'Ronnie' chap. Ah, well.

I guess we know who Ginny was eyeing in the harem when she noticed that some of them were a lot 'more' than she had previously assumed. Once again, Neville's big wang gets the girl.

Oh, but what was the warning for about the sex scene with slash and F/M/M? Was that a hold over from another chapter? Didn't see any need for it in your ending.

Well, it was a lovely story, my dear. Quite enjoyed that. Thanks for dabbling in the Bella pool and giving us Harry/Bella shippers another great story to add to the very small collection. Excellent writing across the board.
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From Jilliane on June 12, 2009
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I've been reading this story from the beginning, and I have to say, I thoroughly enjoyed it. The two things I liked best about it were that there was actually a decent plot woven in, because I admit, I had thought that it might perhaps be a PWP, and was pleasantly surprised to find it wasn't. The other thing I liked was the relationship between Lucius and Narcissa. It isn't often in fanfic that they actually love one another, want to be together, and are happy in their marriage, so I really liked that bit a lot. This was a well written story, and I enjoyed it very much.
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From brasilkat on June 08, 2009
I've been following this story since the beginning and finally got an AFF account so I could review... GREAT JOB and I`m excited to see what you do with it next
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From Pete91888 on May 29, 2009
Wonderful chapter, but what is going to happen to Bella? Will she meet Harry again?
Pete
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From SalonKitty on May 29, 2009
Wow, now I am totally curious how all this is going to turn out and I have to wait a whole week!

Well, first off, the scene where Dobby catches Narcissa plowing Lucius' ass was hilarious. I roared through the whole thing. I always knew those two were kinky.

Then, the Obliviation of Bella went perfectly, and I should have guessed that's where you were going with it after Theo, but the way she kept coming on to Harry even in her amnesiatic state was absolutely gold. She so has a thing for that boy that I could believe it would endure through countless memory spells and potions. Although, Harry just seems to invite that kind of lust, doesn't he?

I'm so glad Harry stood up for her, though, even if he recognized that she was a threat and something had to be done about her. His steadfast beliefs through the dialogue with Snape and Lucius were perfectly characterized.

I was really expecting the Bella sacrifice to be Umbridge, but Alecto is just as good. I just can't see Bella lasting for very long on that chicken farm, though, before finding ways to get to her lap of luxury again. I do believe she's innately a sybarite and just can't bow down to an honest workday kind of lifestyle. She'll be looking to frolic with the boys in some guise or another, even if her memory is completely shot.

I really hope Harry takes care of her some way. Lol, they do make an attractive couple. And I can hardly wait to see what kind of discussion he's going to have with Ginny and if he will give her a taste of his new talents. How will Ron handle all this, though? Will he and Harry really find true love together? So many questions still left unanswered. Looking forward to the end!

Oh, and a few things: You accidentally put in Bella's name when you meant to use Narcissa in that first scene. And this---And then there it was: that delicious rising tide of shivers that scalded and froze everything in its path and made your scalp crinkle and then burst inside of you suddenly, like a tiny sun. was positively gorgeous.

Also, I tried to give you a rating hit on the last chapter and it never recorded it, so I asked one of the admins about it. Could be a malfunction.

Excellent writing!
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From Pete91888 on May 28, 2009
I'm home it wass a long day and to pass through 3 time zones. Oh well great chapter and it looks like the story is finally coming to an end. It's sad but well done. I'll see you on your next chapter.
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From SalonKitty on May 27, 2009
Oh, poor Harry! It's so tough being good.

However, I'm surprised he let her have it as much as he did, since Bella is so off her rocker nothing that she says can be considered reasonably coherent at this point. Her 'lark' comment just set him off, I suppose, regardless of his sympathy for her. They've all certainly had to put up with a lot at her doing, and him scolding her like she'd made a mess of her toys was kind of amusing, although I did feel the tiniest bad for crazy Bella.

I was surprised by Lucius' handling of Nott, too. Obliviating him completely was pretty harsh, but I guess the boy is effectively orphaned so may as well let him start over.

Wonder where Harry and Dobby are going to take the mad Queen now? Maybe he should take her to the harem so she could see where the boys live and snap out of this maudlin Bella. Whatever happens, though, I don't think Bella is going to be getting any of the Harry love tonight. I feel her pain.

Good cliffhanger! I love how every expression your characters make is so fully realized in your writing. It makes this story practically read like a screenplay.
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From ColdWaterFairy on May 26, 2009
Haha I always get really good words to type in. Today I have primly learned. Anyway, stupid boys! I think Lucius is going to obliviate Theo. Excellent job, my dear.
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From SalonKitty on May 22, 2009
Lol, you weren't kidding about the dancing part. Ron's conversation with Draco was amusing, but no Ferret sex for the Weasel? Surely they will be summoned together again.....surely *eyebrows arching**hint*hint*

Unless Theo were to get his way, which I feel assured won't be happening, as Lucius seems to have a good grip on the situation, being his Big Daddy PimpCane self with the silly boy. At this point, I can't see Bella registering much of Theo's devotion, she sure seems to have left the building in terms of her brain, although I'm sure Queen Bella will return from time to time to get Lucius to bring her some money.

Draco really seems to have his heart set on Marshall, so that's kind of sweet for them until they get busted again. He'd better be careful, assuming they aren't constantly watched in the Hogwarts castle which has always been characterized as an almost sentient edifice (ooh, I think I will use that).

Now, the Weasley gays---I don't know what to think of that, lol. The whole dang lot of them? Now that's batting a thousand. Molly's womb is a Pride rainbow, go figure. I love how everybody has detected that Ron is gay except Ron himself. And is Harry really gay? For gay boys, they sure seem to like sex with Bella when she's not spanking them or hitting them with a Crucio. For that matter, Ron reacted pretty strongly to the Slytherin girls at their initiation test, too, so perhaps he's a little bi? Or was he just overeager at being exposed to taboo bits? Well, it's your story, I'll let you figure it out.

You made Harry such a strong character, when he's not in a chapter, his absence is notably felt. Wonder what's been going through his mind on his night off? And when is Bella going to call Neville? Now that's going to be an interesting night seeing as the only person who hates Bella in canon more than Harry would be Mr. Longbottom. Maybe they can tag team Bella and get her more crazy, although I'm still holding out for Harry in the middle. Heh.

Till next week!
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From Pete91888 on May 22, 2009
Great chapter as always. Oh no Draco and Marshal have been found out obviously Lucious will try to hide it from Bella. Until next time.
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From lordoberon on May 20, 2009

Oh my god! Chapter sixteen was sooo good! ooh! I loved it! I wish things were more drawn out though. Everything goes rather quickly. I would like...to dwell on it.

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From Pete91888 on May 20, 2009
Great chapter as always. I really liked getting a bit of Bella's past. It's really too bad that she is losing her mind if only Harry could bring her back. Actually I thought that after hearing that Harry would do something to the other death eathers. Will Harry tell the Order what Happened to her? Or will he kep it to himself?
Until next time.
Pete
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From lordoberon on May 20, 2009

OMG! I love Fred! That was f*****g hot! whoooaaah! The Weasleycest was good in this chapter. Yummers. :D
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